Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 请在回答中直接回应问题并给出一到两句具体理由或例子，避免重复表述。可以用连接词使回答更连贯，例如 because / so / for example。尽量控制在不超过5句。

예시: Not really. I'm not an artistic person, so I usually avoid making handicrafts because I find detailed cutting and folding difficult. For example, I tried origami once and gave up because the small folds were frustrating.

제안: 请使表达更自然并提供具体细节，避免语法和用词错误。可以说明写信的对象、频率或感受，使用连接词如 because / when / for example 增强逻辑性。

예시: Yes, I still write physical letters sometimes. I usually write to my grandparents on special occasions because putting pen to paper feels more personal than a text message.

제안: 请简化表达，避免口头语（如 umm），并给出更具体的观察或对比，例如哪些人或情境还会保留手写信件。用连接词如 however / because / for example。

예시: I wouldn't say it's common nowadays because of smartphones and social media. However, some people still keep handwritten letters for sentimental reasons, such as family notes or wedding cards.

제안: 请在回答中加入短而具体的例子或频率说明，並用连接词使句子更流畅。避免含糊表达，如 'if I need' 可以具体说明情境。

예시: No, I don't usually carry paper and pens because they're inconvenient when I'm out. I always bring my phone instead, and I only carry a notebook when I travel or have meetings.

제안: 请将句子更简洁并提供具体例子，例如你画什么、多久画一次或谁教你画。避免重复（"I'm not and I'm not really good"）。使用连接词如 but / because 来说明对比和原因。

예시: As a child, I loved drawing on paper, especially animals and cartoons, and I drew almost every day. I didn't enjoy making handicrafts because I wasn't confident in my cutting and folding skills.

× I still write physical letters because when I am writing the letters I am thinking the love to whom I write to.

✓ I still write physical letters because when I am writing the letters I am thinking of the person to whom I write.

句中出现两处介词使用问题：1) "thinking the love" 不符合英语搭配，正确应为 "thinking of the person" 或类似表达，用介词 "of" 表示想到某人；2) 句末出现冗余的介词 "to"（"to whom I write to"），在使用带有介词的关系代词结构时应去掉句末的介词，改为 "to whom I write" 或更口语的 "who I write to"。建议：使用固定搭配 "think of someone"，并避免在使用 "to whom" 结构时重复加 "to"。

× Well, I wouldn't say that people still have this habit because as the development of technology and social media, people tend to type umm with their phones or laptops.

✓ Well, I wouldn't say that people still have this habit, because with the development of technology and social media, people tend to type with their phones or laptops.

句中连词或连接结构使用不当："because as the development of..." 结构混用导致句子不通顺，应选用一个介词短语来引出原因，例如 "with the development of..."。同时，口语填充词 "umm" 在书面或改正后应去掉或放在明显标注处。建议：使用 "with the development of" 来说明随技术发展而发生的变化，并移除多余填充词以使句子更清晰。

× No, I don't think it's convenient for me to carry papers or pens when I'm hanging out. I would carry my phone or laptop if I need.

✓ No, I don't think it's convenient for me to carry paper or pens when I'm hanging out. I would carry my phone or laptop if I need to.

存在情态动词/省略结构问题：1) 名词 "papers" 换为不可数或一般复数用法更自然应为 "paper" 或 "papers" —此处两者均可，但常用搭配为 "paper or pens" 改为单数 "paper" 更常见；2) 句尾 "if I need" 省略了不定式 "to"，在这种条件句中应为 "if I need to"（意为“如果我需要的话”）。建议：补全不定式 "to" 以形成完整条件结构，并选用更自然的名词单复数形式。

× When I was a child, I would say that I loved drawing with the paper, but not writing or making handicraft because I'm not and I'm not really good at art.

✓ When I was a child, I would say that I loved drawing on paper, but not writing or making handicrafts because I wasn't really good at art.

句中时态和名词形式不正确：1) 描述过去习惯或喜好时，应使用过去时态，句中后半部分 "because I'm not" 应改为过去时 "I wasn't" 与前文一致；2) 介词搭配错误：应为 "drawing on paper" 而不是 "drawing with the paper"；3) 名词 "handicraft" 在此应使用复数或不可数形式 "handicrafts" 表示多种手工活动。建议：把与过去时间点一致的动词改为过去时，使用正确介词 "on" 描述在纸上绘画，并把 "handicraft" 改为复数。