Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 注意时态和句子结构的正确使用，避免冗长和重复。回答时先给出主题句，然后用1-2句具体细节支持。使用连接词使表达更连贯，例如 "when I was a child", "because" 或 "for example"。注意发音和单词形式（如 draw → drew, prize → praised）。

예시: Yes, I used to make paper crafts when I was a child. For example, I drew portraits and painted famous pictures, and my teachers often praised my work because I paid attention to facial details. As a result, I felt proud and kept practicing to improve my skills.

제안: 回答要更清晰、有条理，明确表达观点并给出原因。避免语法错误与不完整的句子。先回答问题（Yes/No），然后用1-2句说明原因并举例。注意单复数和动词形式（skill → skills, write → writing）。

예시: Yes, I still write physical letters sometimes. I find that writing by hand helps me improve my handwriting and thought organization, whereas most people now use phones to type messages. For instance, I write letters to relatives on special occasions.

제안: 注意语法和表达清晰度，使用更自然的连接词如 "some people... while others..."。给出具体例子或简短比较，避免模糊不完整的句子。改正主谓一致和代词用法。

예시: It depends on the person. Some people prefer typing on computers or phones because it's faster, while others keep handwritten letters for sentimental reasons or because they enjoy calligraphy. For example, older family members often treasure letters from relatives.

제안: 回答要简洁并注意时态一致。先回答（Yes/No），然后说明原因并给出具体情境。避免重复词和不完整结尾。使用短句并注意冠词和动词形式。

예시: Yes, I always carry a small notebook and a pen when I go out. I like to sketch scenes or jot down ideas while hanging out with friends, and it's convenient for recording beautiful landscapes quickly.

제안: 注意时态（过去时）和动词形式（draw → drew, drawed → drew），避免句子碎片。先做直接回答，然后用一两句具体描述你做了什么并举例。控制在最多5句内。

예시: As a child, I loved drawing on paper. I drew portraits of classmates and simple landscapes from different countries, and my teachers often praised my work, which encouraged me to keep practicing.

× I really love drawing when I was a child and I think it's a good way to express my mind and ideas through the paper.

✓ I really loved drawing when I was a child, and I thought it was a good way to express my thoughts and ideas on paper.

句子中包含过去时间状语“when I was a child”，叙述应使用过去时（而不是现在时“love/think”）。另外“express my mind and ideas through the paper”用词不自然，改为“express my thoughts and ideas on paper”更地道。建议：遇到表示过去的时间短语时，主句同时用过去时；使用常见搭配“on paper/express thoughts”。

× Actually, I paint a lot of famous pictures and portraits among different people and they are prized by the teacher and my classmates, so I'm really proud of my skills.

✓ Actually, I painted a lot of famous pictures and portraits of different people, and they were praised by my teacher and classmates, so I was really proud of my skills.

句中时间背景为过去（与前句“when I was a child”相关），谓语应使用过去式“painted”。“prized”用法不当，应改为“praised”（表扬）。主句时态需与上下文一致。建议：根据上下文时态统一动词时态，注意区分类似单词意义（prize/praise）。

× I always write physical letters to enhance my writing skills at that moment with the technology developer firstly and quickly many people use the phone to write and type, but actually I think that writing is an important skills that we didn't and can.

✓ I used to write physical letters to improve my writing skills, because with technological development many people quickly use phones to text, but I think writing is an important skill that we shouldn't lose.

原句时态混乱并有词汇错误。“at that moment”与一般现在时不符，应使用过去习惯“used to”。“technology developer”应为“technological development”。“writing is an important skills”中“skills”应为不可数名词“skill”。最后部分不完整且错误，改为“we shouldn't lose”更明确。建议：保持句子逻辑和时态一致，注意名词单复数和固定搭配。

× Well, it's depend on different people.

✓ Well, it depends on different people.

主语“it”与动词“depend”在三单人称时需加-s，正确为“depends”。建议：注意主语与动词的三单人称一致。

× For some of people they may prefer to type on the computer or laptop so they didn't use the pen to write down on the letter.

✓ Some people may prefer to type on a computer or laptop, so they don't use a pen to write letters.

“For some of people”不自然，改为“Some people”。时态应与一般事实现在时一致，使用“don't”而不是“didn't”。“write down on the letter”冗余且不地道，改为“write letters”。建议：使用自然表达“some people”；事实陈述用一般现在时；简化搭配。

× But actually for another person that they may love the calligraphy and they prefer the writings give them.

✓ But some people may love calligraphy and prefer handwritten letters.

“another person that they”结构错误且不通顺，应改为“some people”或“others”。“the writings give them”含义不清，改为“handwritten letters”。建议：用清晰主语并用常见表达“handwritten letters/calligraphy”。

× Yeah, definitely, because I was really interested in painting some new pictures when I was hang out with my close friends.

✓ Yeah, definitely, because I was really interested in painting new pictures when I hung out with my close friends.

“hang out”为不定式/原形，过去时应为“hung out”。整个描述为过去时要保持一致。建议：把表示过去的动作用相应的过去式。

× I will always carry out with a small pen and a paper book.

✓ I always carry a small pen and a notebook with me.

“carry out with”错误搭配，应为“carry ... with me”或者“carry with me”。“a paper book”不自然，改为“a notebook”。时态用一般现在表示习惯。建议：使用正确短语“carry ... with me”并选用自然名词。

× I actually I think they are possible and convenient for me to carry out and I will always use them to record the beautiful landscape and.

✓ I think they are practical and convenient for me to carry, and I always use them to record beautiful landscapes.

句子结构重复“I actually I think”冗余。“possible and convenient”搭配不当，改为“practical and convenient”。“carry out”不当，去掉“out”。结尾不完整，改为复数“landscapes”。建议：避免冗余表达，使用合适形容词并完整表述名词形式。

× When I was a child, I always used paper to drawing some pictures as I said before, and all the pictures I drawed are priced by my teacher and my close friends.

✓ When I was a child, I always used paper to draw pictures, and all the pictures I drew were praised by my teacher and my close friends.

“to drawing”应为动词原形“to draw”或直接“draw pictures”。“drawed”是错误的过去式，正确为“drew”。“are priced”用词错误，应为“were praised”。时态应为过去。建议：注意不规则动词过去式（draw→drew），保持时态一致，选择正确词汇（praise）。

× Because I not only draw the portrait of different people, I will also draw some simple landscapes of different countries and.

✓ Not only did I draw portraits of different people, but I also drew simple landscapes of different countries.

句子开头用Because不合适且结构不完整；使用“not only... but also...”结构更恰当。同时时态用过去式“drew”。句尾多余“and”需删除。建议：使用完整的并列连接结构并保持时态一致。