Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming your preferred clothes, avoid wrong word choices (e.g. 'cashier' and 'tissues') and reduce repetition. Add one specific detail about why you prefer them. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I usually wear casual clothes such as jeans and cotton T-shirts because they are comfortable and practical for daily activities. For example, my jeans are durable and my cotton T-shirts keep me cool on warm days.

제안: Give a direct answer, correct vocabulary (use 'casual' not 'cultural'), and provide one brief reason with a linking word. Avoid filler phrases like 'it is really OK.' Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer casual clothes to smart clothes because they are more comfortable and versatile. For instance, casual outfits are appropriate for meeting friends or running errands without feeling overdressed.

제안: Answer directly and avoid hesitations or repetitive phrases. Use linking words to add a specific example of styling. Keep within 2–3 clear sentences and avoid filler like 'I mean' or repeated 'so yeah.'

예시: Yes, I love wearing T-shirts, especially baggy ones, because they are comfortable and easy to style. For example, I often pair a baggy T-shirt with skinny jeans and sneakers for a relaxed look.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence and avoid unclear expressions ('brain surrounding'). Explain one specific reason and use linking words to organize ideas. Shorten and clarify the response to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I often spend a long time choosing clothes because I worry about looking stylish. For example, when I go out with friends I compare different outfits to decide which one suits the occasion best.

제안: Answer clearly and correct collocations ('casual' or 'smart-casual' instead of 'busy fit'). Use linking words to contrast weekday and weekend styles and give one specific example for each. Keep it concise.

예시: Yes. On weekdays I wear casual clothes like jeans and simple tops for classes, whereas on weekends I choose more feminine outfits such as blouses and skirts for parties or social events.

제안: Be precise and avoid incorrect metaphors ('penicillin person'). State your favorite colours directly and explain why with one clear reason. Use better vocabulary such as 'neutral' or 'classic' and avoid repetition.

예시: I prefer neutral colours like white, black and grey because they are versatile and easy to match. For example, a grey sweater pairs well with many outfits and looks neat for both casual and formal occasions.

× I usually like to wear cashier clothes like jeans and tissues because most of them are very comfortable to wear and also suitable for going out to everywhere in daily life.

✓ I usually like to wear casual clothes like jeans and T-shirts because most of them are very comfortable and suitable for going out in daily life.

The student used 'cashier' and 'tissues' incorrectly. 'Cashier' is a noun for a shop worker; the correct adjective is 'casual'. 'Tissues' (paper) was used instead of 'T-shirts'. Also 'to everywhere' is awkward; use 'in daily life' or 'when going out'. Simplify 'comfortable to wear' to 'comfortable'. Improve by learning common clothing vocabulary and collocations like 'casual clothes', 'T-shirts', and 'going out'.

× And of course especially I like to wear cotton T-shirts, they are very comfortable.

✓ And of course I especially like to wear cotton T-shirts because they are very comfortable.

Word order and punctuation are incorrect: 'especially I like' should be 'I especially like' and the run-on sentence needs a conjunction 'because' instead of a comma splice. Improve by placing adverbs (especially) close to the verb and avoid comma splices; use conjunctions or separate sentences.

× I prefer to wear comfortable and cultural clothes rather than smart clothes because as I said, casual clothes are really comfortable and it's nice or suitable to go to everywhere like meeting with friends or going out with families.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes rather than smart clothes because, as I said, casual clothes are really comfortable and suitable for going everywhere, like meeting friends or going out with family.

'Cultural clothes' is incorrect; the intended word is 'casual'. 'Go to everywhere' is ungrammatical; use 'going everywhere'. 'Meeting with friends' and 'going out with families' are unnatural: say 'meeting friends' and 'going out with family'. Also remove 'it's nice or' which is redundant. Improve by choosing correct adjectives and common collocations (go everywhere, meet friends, go out with family).

× They are very, I mean, in my perspective, they are really easy to style.

✓ They are, I mean, in my perspective, really easy to style.

The original repeats the subject 'they are' unnecessarily creating choppy phrasing; this is a sentence structure and agreement/duplication issue. Streamline by keeping a single verb phrase. Also 'in my perspective' is better phrased as 'in my opinion' or 'from my perspective'. Improve by avoiding redundant repetition and using natural stance phrases.

× Exactly because every time I am about to go out, I face the problems of brain surrounding about what to wear.

✓ Exactly: every time I am about to go out, I face the problem of overthinking about what to wear.

'Problems of brain surrounding' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'the problem of overthinking' or 'I have trouble deciding what to wear'. Also 'Exactly because' at the start is awkward; use 'Exactly:' or 'That's because'. Improve by using idiomatic expressions like 'overthinking' or 'trouble deciding'.

× Like for example when I am about to go out with my friends, I don't know what to wear.

✓ For example, when I am about to go out with my friends, I don't know what to wear.

'Like for example' is redundant; use either 'Like' or 'For example'. Improve by choosing one discourse marker and placing it at the sentence start: 'For example...'.

× So yeah, I take a lot of time of picking my clothes.

✓ So yeah, I take a lot of time picking my clothes.

'Take a lot of time of picking' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'take a lot of time (doing something)' or 'spend a lot of time picking'. Use the gerund 'picking' directly after 'take a lot of time' or use 'spend'. Improve by learning common verb patterns: 'take time doing' and 'spend time doing'.

× Yes of course, because on weekdays I have to go to my class and schools so I usually wear like jeans and a top like a busy fit.

✓ Yes, of course. On weekdays I have to go to my class and school, so I usually wear jeans and a top, like a busy outfit.

'My class and schools' is inconsistent (singular/plural); use 'class and school' or better 'class and school' or simply 'school'. 'A busy fit' is nonstandard; 'outfit' is the correct noun. Also punctuation: split into two sentences. Improve by using correct count nouns and common collocations 'busy outfit'.

× But on weekends I usually go out with my friends for activities or some parties so I wear some top and skirts that would be more girly.

✓ But on weekends I usually go out with my friends for activities or parties, so I wear tops and skirts that are more girly.

'Some top and skirts' is incorrect number agreement and article use; use 'tops and skirts'. 'Some parties' can be 'parties'. Also 'that would be more girly' is awkward; 'that are more girly' is natural. Improve by matching plural nouns and using appropriate relative clauses.

× I usually choose white, black and grey colours because I am like a penicillin person.

✓ I usually choose white, black and grey colours because I am a plain person.

'Penicillin person' is a misuse of vocabulary (penicillin is an antibiotic); likely intended 'plain' or 'minimalist'. Use appropriate adjective to describe style preferences. Improve by learning and checking word meanings to avoid false friends.

× So I usually choose the business tone colour and also I I like calm and dark colour.

✓ So I usually choose business-tone colours, and I like calm, dark colours.

'Business tone colour' is awkward; 'business-tone colours' or 'neutral/business colours' is better. Remove duplicated 'I'. Use plural 'colours'. Improve by using hyphenation for compound adjectives and matching plural forms.

× So yeah, these three are my mostly chosen colours.

✓ So yeah, these three are my most chosen colours.

'Mostly chosen' is incorrect; use 'most chosen' or more naturally 'my three favourite colours' or 'the colours I choose most often'. 'Most' is the correct adverb for superlative frequency. Improve by using standard expressions like 'favourite colours' or 'colours I choose most often'.