Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitations and minor grammar slips; make the answer slightly more concise and use one clear linking phrase to connect reasons. Also replace fillers ("uh") and correct word order ("neutral colored" → "neutral-coloured" or "neutral colors").

예시: I prefer clothes that are both comfortable and classy. For example, I usually choose neutral-coloured long-sleeve shirts and slim trousers because they look neat yet allow me to move easily. Also, I often wear sneakers for practical reasons, especially as a full-time student who walks a lot.

제안: Avoid repetition and hesitations; construct one clear topic sentence and support it with a brief reason plus an example. Use correct grammar (e.g., "I add accessories to make my outfit look smarter").

예시: It depends on the occasion, but generally I like outfits that are both comfortable and smart. For instance, I often wear simple jeans and a shirt, but I add accessories like a watch or a scarf to make the look more polished.

제안: Keep sentences clear and correct grammar: avoid run-on sentences and unclear phrases ("my society is a bit unconventional"). Briefly explain social context then contrast with personal preference using linking words.

예시: I like wearing T-shirts, but mainly at home. In my community it’s less common for girls to wear casual T-shirts, so I usually choose more stylish outfits when I go out and reserve T-shirts for relaxing at home.

제안: Remove small hesitations and fix small grammar issues ("my any meetings" → "any meetings I have"). Use a concise topic sentence and one or two supporting details in logical order with linking words.

예시: Yes, I spend quite a bit of time choosing clothes, usually in the evening after university. I lay out different options according to the weather and any meetings I have, so I can save time in the morning.

제안: Avoid repetition ("all over the day all day"); make the contrast clearer with linking words like "whereas" or "however." Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

예시: It depends on my plans. If I go out with friends at the weekend I wear something more stylish, whereas on weekdays I prefer comfortable clothes like jeans and a T-shirt because I have classes throughout the day.

제안: Avoid fillers and choose precise adjectives ("neutral-coloured", "grey", "cream"). Explain briefly why those colours suit you with a clear linking phrase like "because" or "so" and avoid awkward phrasing like "obtrusive in society."

예시: I mostly prefer neutral-coloured clothes because I'm introverted and don't like to stand out. For example, I usually wear black, grey, or cream tones since they feel understated and versatile.

× I usually choose neutral colored, uh, long sleeve shirts and slim pants, and I often wear sneakers because they're practical for walking around all day.

✓ I usually choose neutral-colored long-sleeve shirts and slim pants, and I often wear sneakers because they're practical for walking around all day.

Use of adjectives that are compound should be hyphenated (neutral-colored, long-sleeve) because they modify a noun together. Also remove unnecessary comma before 'long-sleeve' and avoid filler 'uh' in written form. Hyphens clarify that the color and sleeve length describe the shirts.

× I'm a full time student, so I need to be comfortable with my clothes on.

✓ I'm a full-time student, so I need to be comfortable in my clothes.

Compound adjectives used before a noun should be hyphenated (full-time). Also the preposition 'in' is correct with 'comfortable' ('comfortable in my clothes'), not 'with ... on'. This makes the sentence natural and idiomatic.

× Well, it depends where I'm going to, but in general, I prefer to wear something comfortable and, uh, smart at the same time.

✓ Well, it depends on where I'm going, but in general I prefer to wear something comfortable and smart at the same time.

Use 'depends on' (correct preposition) and 'where I'm going' (no final 'to' needed). Remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary commas for smoother written expression.

× Uh, that I makes that it makes my, it looks a little smart.

✓ Uh, that makes my outfit look a little smarter.

Original has mixed and incorrect verb forms and pronouns. Use singular verb 'makes' with subject 'that', and follow with object 'my outfit' and verb 'look'. Use comparative 'smarter' to show improvement. Simplify to clear subject-verb-object order.

× I do like wearing T-shirt but mainly at home and my society is a bit unconventional for girls to wear them and I prefer clothes that looks more stylish and you when I go out so I usually save T-shirts for relaxing around the house.

✓ I do like wearing T-shirts but mainly at home, and in my society it is a bit unconventional for girls to wear them, so I prefer clothes that look more stylish when I go out. I usually save T-shirts for relaxing around the house.

Multiple issues: plural 'T-shirts' needed (plural form), use 'in my society' (preposition) and 'it is' to introduce the idea. Subject-verb agreement: 'clothes that look' (plural subject 'clothes' takes 'look', not 'looks'). Remove stray 'you' and break into two sentences for clarity. Use present participle 'wearing' correctly and adjust punctuation.

× I often lay out different options based on the weather and my any meetings I have so I don't have to rush in the morning.

✓ I often lay out different options based on the weather and any meetings I have so I don't have to rush in the morning.

The phrase 'my any meetings' is incorrect; use 'any meetings I have' or 'my meetings' but not both. Removing 'my' makes the quantifier 'any' work correctly.

× But on weekdays at university I prefer something comfortable like jeans and T-shirt because I have classes all over the day all day.

✓ But on weekdays at university I prefer something comfortable like jeans and a T-shirt because I have classes all day.

Use the article 'a' with singular countable noun 'T-shirt' ('a T-shirt'). Also 'all over the day all day' is redundant; correct idiom is 'all day'.

× Well, mostly I prefer neutral colored clothes because I'm quite an introverted person.

✓ Well, mostly I prefer neutral-colored clothes because I'm quite an introverted person.

Compound adjective 'neutral-colored' should be hyphenated when used before the noun. This clarifies meaning and conforms to adjective usage rules.

× I prefer not to be, uh, obtrusive in society, so I mostly wear something black, Gray, or creamy.

✓ I prefer not to be obtrusive in public, so I mostly wear black, gray, or cream-colored clothes.

'Obtrusive in society' is awkward; 'obtrusive in public' is more natural. Color words should be lowercase and 'cream-colored' or 'cream' fits better than 'creamy'. Specify 'clothes' or use color-adjective forms for clarity.