Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid fillers ("uh"). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples of items or styles and a brief reason. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer simple, classic and conservative clothes because they look elegant and timeless. For example, I often choose plain knit sweaters and tailored trousers, which are comfortable yet smart, so I can feel confident without standing out.

제안: Avoid repetition and awkward phrasing. Give one clear reason and a concise example. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to make your explanation coherent.

예시: I prefer smart clothes because, as a student with responsibilities, I need to appear professional. For instance, I usually wear a blazer or a neat shirt when I have presentations or meet others, so I create a good impression.

제안: Avoid contradictory phrases and tighten structure. Begin with a direct answer, then support it with a brief reason and a specific example of what you wear instead.

예시: Not really — I tend to avoid T-shirts because I want to set a professional example. Instead, I usually wear polo shirts or long-sleeve button-downs, which look smarter yet remain comfortable.

제안: Provide one specific detail about how you choose clothes to make the answer more vivid. Use a linking word to add the detail and keep the response short.

예시: Yes, I do, because I care about looking presentable. For example, I often plan outfits the night before and consider color coordination and fit to ensure I look neat.

제안: Remove filler words and add a short specific example of weekend styles. Keep it two sentences: one direct answer and one supporting detail with a linking word like "however" or "but".

예시: Yes. During weekdays I wear a uniform for school, but on weekends I dress more casually — for example, I like to wear jeans and casual shirts when I go out with friends.

제안: Be concise and avoid fillers; correct capitalization ("navy blue"). Start with a short topic sentence stating preferred colors, then add a brief reason and one example of an outfit using those colors.

예시: I prefer darker shades such as maroon and navy blue because they suit my skin tone. For example, I often wear a navy blazer with a maroon sweater underneath to create a flattering contrast.

× I consider myself as simple, classy and conservative, so I like to wear simple clothes.

✓ I consider myself simple, classy, and conservative, so I like to wear simple clothes.

Remove the preposition 'as' after 'consider myself' because the correct structure is 'consider myself + adjective'. Also add a comma before the final item in the list (Oxford comma) for clarity.

× Not that loud for people to see, but uh, light and soft.

✓ Not too loud for people to notice; instead, light and soft.

Use 'too' rather than 'that' to convey degree. Replace 'for people to see' with 'for people to notice' for natural phrasing, and use a clearer connector like 'instead' or a semicolon to join the ideas.

× As a student, I have to be presentable and smart looking, so I prefer smart clothes, especially that a lot of people look up on me and I am quite an influential person so I prefer smart clothes.

✓ As a student, I have to be presentable and smart-looking, so I prefer smart clothes, especially because a lot of people look up to me and I am quite an influential person.

Use the adjective form 'smart-looking' with a hyphen. Replace the incorrect connector 'that' with 'because' to introduce the reason. Use the correct preposition 'look up to' rather than 'look up on'. Also avoid repeating 'so I prefer smart clothes' twice.

× To be completely honest, I actually avoid T-shirts although it is simple.

✓ To be completely honest, I actually avoid T-shirts although they are simple.

T-shirts is plural, so the pronoun and verb must agree: use 'they are' rather than 'it is'.

× But as someone who younger students look up on, I prefer professional clothes such as shirts with polo or long sleeve with polo.

✓ But as someone whom younger students look up to, I prefer professional clothes such as polo shirts or long-sleeved shirts with a polo collar.

Use 'whom' as the object of the relative clause and the correct preposition 'look up to'. 'Shirts with polo' is unnatural; use 'polo shirts' or 'long-sleeved shirts with a polo collar'. Also use hyphen in 'long-sleeved'.

× Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes as I like to be particular with what I wear and I like to be presentable in front of other people.

✓ Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I like to be particular about what I wear and I like to be presentable in front of other people.

Use 'particular about' rather than 'particular with' when talking about preferences. Also 'because' fits better than 'as' to show reason in spoken answers, though 'as' is not strictly incorrect.

× Since I am a student, during my weekdays I only wear uniforms.

✓ Since I am a student, on weekdays I only wear a uniform.

Use 'on weekdays' rather than 'during my weekdays' for natural phrasing. Use 'a uniform' or 'uniforms' consistently depending on meaning; singular 'a uniform' is common when referring to the standard daily outfit.

× However, during the weekends I do uh, wear different styles of clothes since I like to go out and spend time.

✓ However, on weekends I do wear different styles of clothes since I like to go out and spend time with friends.

Use 'on weekends' instead of 'during the weekends'. The filler 'uh' should be omitted in written correction. Add a clear object for 'spend time' (for example, 'with friends') to complete the idea; the verb form 'do wear' is acceptable for emphasis.

× It actually took me quite a long time to find the right palette for my skin tone.

✓ It actually took me quite a long time to find the right palette for my skin tone.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed.

× However, now that I have found the right palette, I like to wear maroon, Navy blue, and uh, colors that are quite darker for my skin to shine.

✓ However, now that I have found the right palette, I like to wear maroon, navy blue, and other darker colors that make my skin stand out.

Use lowercase 'navy blue' (no capital N). Replace 'colors that are quite darker' with 'other darker colors' (do not use 'quite' with comparative 'darker' in this context). 'Make my skin stand out' is a more natural expression than 'for my skin to shine'.