Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and expressive, but a little long and slightly repetitive. Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating the same idea (e.g. ‘power color’ and ‘helps me feel confident’ are similar), and use one supporting detail with a linking phrase. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer fancier, bolder clothes because they reflect my personality. For example, I often choose red items since that color boosts my confidence and makes me feel more noticeable when I enter a room.

제안: Good contrast between daily choice and occasional preference. Improve cohesion by using linking words (e.g. 'however' used correctly) and correct minor grammar (remove repeated 'the', plural agreement: 'dresses'). Make sentences more concise and limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: It depends, but on a daily basis I prefer casual clothes because the hot Philippine weather makes tight or heavy clothing uncomfortable. However, I like wearing smart clothes such as blazers or dresses for formal events.

제안: Your idea is clear but repetitive (saying 'matches with anything' twice). Use one clear reason and add a brief example. Fix phrasing ('matches almost any style', 'easy to wear'). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they match almost any style and their light, breathable fabric is ideal in hot weather. For example, I often pair a plain T-shirt with jeans or a skirt for a quick, comfortable outfit.

제안: Content is relevant and structured but has small clarity issues ('jeans and clothes' is unclear). Use a clear topic sentence, then give specific examples and link them. Correct vocabulary and be concise.

예시: It depends on the occasion. For school I usually don't spend much time choosing clothes because of a simple dress code—jeans, T-shirts and shoes. However, I spend a lot more time picking an outfit for special events like parties or interviews.

제안: Clear comparison—good. Improve fluency by tightening phrasing and using a linking word like 'whereas' or 'while'. Reduce redundancy ('go around the house or lay down' can be simplified).

예시: Yes. On weekdays I usually wear smart-casual clothes so I can work comfortably and look presentable, whereas on weekends I prefer very comfortable outfits for relaxing at home.

제안: Good reasons (skin tone, mood) but repetitive ('brightens my look' and 'brightens my complexion' overlap). Start with a direct statement, then give one or two specific reasons and a brief example. Use clearer phrasing: 'autumn colors' and avoid repeating 'more'.

예시: I prefer red and other autumn colors because they suit my skin tone and make me feel more confident. For instance, wearing burnt orange or deep red often brightens my face and lifts my mood.

× I prefer fancier clothes, something that is more bold which correlates to my personality more, and apart from that something that involves a color red because I love it and it is my power color which helps me to feel more confident whenever I step into the room.

✓ I prefer fancier clothes, something bolder that reflects my personality more, and besides that something that includes the color red because I love it; it is my power color and helps me feel more confident whenever I enter a room.

Use of comparative/adjective forms: 'more bold' is incorrect — the correct comparative form is 'bolder'. 'Correlates to my personality' is awkward; use 'reflects my personality'. 'Involves a color red' is ungrammatical; use 'includes the color red' or 'that is red'. 'Whenever I step into the room' is acceptable but 'enter a room' is more natural. Suggestion: use correct comparative adjectives and choose verbs that naturally collocate with 'personality' (reflect) and 'color' (include).

× It depends but on a daily basis I do prefer to wear casual clothes because in the Philippines the the weather is really hot so wearing something tight or thick is going to be hard.

✓ It depends, but on a daily basis I prefer to wear casual clothes because in the Philippines the weather is really hot, so wearing something tight or thick is uncomfortable.

Errors: duplicate 'the the' and awkward phrase 'going to be hard' for clothing discomfort. 'Do prefer' is unnecessary emphasis; simple 'prefer' is natural. Replace 'going to be hard' with 'uncomfortable' or 'difficult' depending on intended meaning. Also add comma for clarity. Suggestion: remove duplicate words and use appropriate adjectives to describe comfort.

× However, smart clothes such as Blazers or dress is something that I do prefer to wear.

✓ However, smart clothes such as blazers or dresses are something I prefer to wear.

Errors: capitalization ('Blazers' should be lowercase). Number agreement: 'blazers or dress is' mixes plural and singular; both items should match and the verb must agree: 'blazers or dresses are'. 'Do prefer' is unnecessary. Suggestion: match noun numbers and use correct subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, I do like to wear T-shirts because it matches almost with any style and again, in this heat it is very useful to wear such clothing because of its light and airy fabric.

✓ Yes, I like to wear T-shirts because they match almost any style, and in this heat they are very useful because of their light, airy fabric.

Errors: subject-verb and pronoun agreement: 'T-shirts' is plural so use 'they' and 'match' not 'it matches'. Preposition 'match with' is unnecessary; use 'match any style' or 'match with' rarely. 'Such clothing' is vague; better to use 'they' and 'their' to refer to T-shirts. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number and remove unnecessary prepositions.

× Also, it is really just easy and simple to use that matches with anything.

✓ Also, they are really easy and simple to wear and match with anything.

Errors: pronoun and verb agreement: 'it is' refers to plural T-shirts — use 'they are'. 'To use' is odd for clothing; use 'to wear'. 'That matches' should agree in number: 'match with anything' or better 'match anything'. Suggestion: keep pronoun number consistent and choose verbs appropriate for clothing.

× It depends on the occasion and the purpose.

✓ It depends on the occasion and purpose.

Redundancy: 'occasion and the purpose' is redundant; 'occasion and purpose' or simply 'the occasion and the purpose' but cleaner to omit second article. Suggestion: simplify by removing unnecessary words.

× So for school purposes, I don't really spend that long preparing my clothes because there are some dress codes that we need to abide.

✓ For school, I don't really spend that long preparing my clothes because there are dress codes we need to follow.

Errors: 'for school purposes' is wordy — 'for school' is natural. 'Dress codes that we need to abide' is incomplete; the correct verb is 'follow' or 'abide by'. Suggestion: use correct verb collocations ('follow dress codes' or 'abide by dress codes').

× For example, we just have to wear jeans and clothes, shoes and T-shirts.

✓ For example, we just have to wear jeans, shoes, and T-shirts.

Errors: 'jeans and clothes, shoes and T-shirts' is redundant and unclear; 'clothes' is unnecessary. Use proper listing with commas and Oxford comma if desired. Suggestion: remove redundant word and list items clearly.

× Yes, I do think so because on weekdays I want to wear something more smart casual so that I am still able to do my work without any restriction, while on weekends I like to wear comfortable clothes to just go around the house or lay down.

✓ Yes, I think so because on weekdays I want to wear something more smart-casual so that I can still do my work without restriction, while on weekends I like to wear comfortable clothes to just hang around the house or lie down.

Errors: 'do think' unnecessary. 'More smart casual' should be 'more smart-casual' or 'smarter-casual'; use hyphen. 'Able to do my work' better as 'can still do my work'. 'Lay down' is incorrect reflexive/verb choice — 'lie down' is intransitive; 'lay down' requires an object. Suggestion: use correct verb (lie) and natural expressions ('hang around').

× I prefer clothes such as red or colors among autumn because it matches more with my skin tone and it also makes me feel more powerful and comfortable with what I'm wearing.

✓ I prefer clothes in red or autumn colors because they match my skin tone better and also make me feel more powerful and comfortable in what I'm wearing.

Errors: 'such as red or colors among autumn' is unidiomatic — use 'in red or autumn colors'. 'It matches' wrong number; 'clothes' plural -> 'they match'. 'Matches more with' should be 'match better with' or 'match my skin tone better'. Suggestion: ensure plural agreement and use idiomatic color phrases.

× Apart from that, I also prefer these colors because it brightens my look more and my complexion.

✓ Apart from that, I also prefer these colors because they brighten my look and improve my complexion.

Errors: pronoun agreement: 'these colors' is plural so use 'they' not 'it'. 'Brightens my look more and my complexion' is awkward; 'brighten my look and improve my complexion' is clearer. Suggestion: ensure pronoun number agreement and use parallel structure.