Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify and correct unclear phrases and keep answer concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid vague or incorrect expressions (e.g. “MMM Wednesday” unclear). Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer minimalistic clothes, mainly in black and white. For example, I often choose simple designs and neutral tones because bright colors feel too harsh for my eyes.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, then one clear reason and an example. Improve grammar (e.g. "traditional activities" not "a traditional activities") and use linking words like "but" or "however" to show contrast.

예시: It depends on the occasion. I usually wear casual clothes on weekends because I want to relax, but I wear formal clothes to conferences or traditional ceremonies in Thailand.

제안: Make a clear, concise statement and remove confusing words like "oversight clothes." Use one or two specific supporting details and correct grammar (e.g. "they show" not "it's show").

예시: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are casual and make me feel relaxed and easygoing. I also enjoy dresses occasionally for more formal or feminine occasions.

제안: Begin with a direct answer, then explain briefly why using linking words like "because" or "so." Fix small grammar issues and avoid repeating the same idea.

예시: Not really, I don't enjoy window shopping so I usually buy clothes online. Because I shop online and make quick decisions, I rarely spend a long time choosing items.

제안: Answer directly and simplify. Explain job requirements clearly and contrast weekday vs weekend clothes with one linking word such as "however." Correct awkward phrases (e.g. "even I'm a female" unnecessary) and unclear words like "oversight T-shirt."

예시: Yes. Because I work in academia and sometimes at the police academy, I usually wear formal clothes such as suits during weekdays. However, on weekends I prefer casual outfits like T-shirts and jeans.

제안: Be clear and coherent: state current preference, mention past preference, and give a concise reason. Avoid unclear phrases like "everything shipped" and "3 cast." Use specific vocabulary and one linking word such as "because" or "since."

예시: I prefer white and cream clothing now. I used to wear a lot of black, but after spending over four years in a different environment, my style changed to lighter, more neutral colors because they feel fresher and more suitable for my daily life.

× I love to wear minimalistic clothes because I feel like colorful clothes irritated my eyes.

✓ I love to wear minimalist clothes because I feel like colorful clothes irrit my eyes.

'minimalistic' is less common than the adjective 'minimalist' to describe clothing. The verb tense 'irritated' suggests past; the context is general, so present simple 'irritate' is correct. Use 'irritate my eyes' for habitual states.

× I think myself more like MMM Wednesday because I love black and white and maybe a little bit of a tone colour on clothes.

✓ I think of myself as more of a minimal, monochrome person because I love black and white and maybe a little bit of muted color in my clothes.

The phrase 'I think myself' is incorrect; use 'I think of myself as' or 'I consider myself'. 'MMM Wednesday' is unclear; I replaced with a clear description. 'Tone colour' is unclear; 'muted color' or 'a bit of color' is natural. Use consistent noun phrases.

× It depends on situations.

✓ It depends on the situation.

Use singular 'the situation' or plural 'situations' with an article; 'depends on situations' is awkward. 'It depends on the situation' is the natural present simple expression.

× I would rather wear casual clothes on my weekend and maybe some holidays.

✓ I prefer to wear casual clothes on weekends and sometimes on holidays.

'Would rather' is not necessary when stating a general preference; use present simple 'prefer'. 'My weekend' should be plural 'weekends' for habitual action. 'Maybe some holidays' -> 'sometimes on holidays' is clearer.

× And I would prefer to wear formal clothes from any formal gathering like a conference or maybe a traditional activities in Thailand.

✓ And I would prefer to wear formal clothes for any formal gathering, like a conference or traditional activities in Thailand.

Use 'for' to indicate purpose or occasion, not 'from'. 'a traditional activities' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'traditional activities' or 'a traditional activity'.

× I love so wearing T-shirts is very casual and it's show that I'm easy going and I also feel like I love more of oversight clothes because it's helped me become much more comfortable with my own self.

✓ I love wearing T-shirts because they are very casual and they show that I'm easygoing. I also prefer oversized clothes because they help me feel much more comfortable with myself.

Remove extraneous 'so'. 'T-shirts is' should be 'T-shirts are' (plural). 'it's show' -> 'they show'. 'easy going' -> 'easygoing' as one word. 'I love more of oversight clothes' is unclear; 'prefer oversized clothes' is likely intended. 'it's helped' should be 'they help' to match plural and present habitual meaning.

× Like I also love some dress as well but it's not a.

✓ I also like dresses, but not very often.

Original is fragmented and unclear. 'Some dress' -> 'dresses' (plural) and finish the thought. 'it's not a' is incomplete; provide a complete clause such as 'but not very often' to express limited preference.

× I don't love window shopping so I don't spend lots of time choosing clothes.

✓ I don't like window shopping, so I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes.

Use 'like' instead of 'love' for preference nuance if intended; 'lots of time' is informal—'a lot of time' is standard. Keep negative contraction 'don't' consistent.

× I prefer online shopping so that why I spend less time shopping on clothes.

✓ I prefer online shopping, so that's why I spend less time shopping for clothes.

Insert 'that's' to form 'that's why'. Use 'shopping for clothes' rather than 'shopping on clothes'.

× But more like I think I feel something I like I just buy it immediately.

✓ If I see something I like, I usually buy it immediately.

Original sequence is awkward. Use a conditional 'If I see something I like' to express the habit, and 'usually' to indicate frequency.

× Definitely it's in my job, it's more of academia and amateur at the police Academy.

✓ Definitely; in my job, I work more in academia and I am also an amateur at the police academy.

Original is fragmented and ungrammatical. Clarify roles: 'in my job' needs a verb phrase. 'Police Academy' should be lowercased 'academy' unless a proper name; 'amateur at' is odd but preserved with 'also an amateur' to indicate nonprofessional involvement.

× I would say that on my weekdays I wear lots of formal clothes like suit and tie even I'm a female and on my holidays, maybe on my weekends I would do more like casual clothes like oversight T-shirt and maybe some.

✓ I would say that on weekdays I wear a lot of formal clothes, like suits and ties, even though I'm female. On holidays or weekends I wear more casual clothes, like oversized T-shirts.

Subject-verb and number agreement: 'lots of formal clothes like suit and tie' needs plural 'suits and ties' or 'a suit and tie'. 'even I'm a female' should be 'even though I'm female'. 'would do more like casual clothes' is awkward; use 'wear more casual clothes'. 'oversight' -> 'oversized'.

× I love white on clothes.

✓ I like wearing white clothes.

'Love white on clothes' is unnatural. Use 'like wearing white clothes' or 'I love white clothing'.

× I would say that in the past I love to wear black color.

✓ I would say that in the past I loved to wear black.

When referring to a past habit, use past tense 'loved' rather than present 'love'. 'black color' is redundant; 'black' suffices.

× However everything shipped because I was 3 cast for more than four years already so it effect on my personal cover.

✓ However, everything changed because I was stationed at a place for more than four years, so it affected my personal color preferences.

Sentence is unclear and uses wrong verbs: 'shipped' likely intended 'changed'. 'I was 3 cast' is unintelligible; I interpreted as 'stationed' or 'based'—confirm with the speaker. Use past tense 'changed' and 'affected' for past events. 'personal cover' unclear; likely 'personal color' or 'style'.

× It turned out to be cream and white because it's.

✓ It turned out to be cream and white.

Original ends with an incomplete clause 'because it's.' Remove the unfinished fragment to make a complete sentence. If an explanation is needed, supply a full clause (e.g., 'because it's more comfortable').