Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “I usually wear dresses and skirts.”), avoid fillers and repetition, and give one or two specific reasons or examples. Keep answers under five sentences and use linking words (e.g., ‘however’, ‘because’) to connect ideas.

예시: I usually wear dresses and skirts because they make me feel feminine and comfortable. However, for everyday activities I often choose pants and short-sleeve shirts because they are practical and easy to move in. For special occasions I prefer flowy dresses with simple accessories.

제안: Provide a clear direct answer first, then add one or two specific conditions and examples. Remove hesitations and repeated words. Use linking words like ‘when’ and ‘but’ correctly and clarify phrases such as ‘fashion eye’ with concrete terms.

예시: It depends on the occasion. When I’m going to a casual place, I prefer comfortable clothes like jeans and trainers, but for events or meetings I choose smart outfits such as a blouse and tailored trousers because they look more professional.

제안: Answer directly and avoid vague phrases. Use correct prepositions and plural forms, and add a brief specific example of the types you like. Keep it to two or three sentences maximum.

예시: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts, especially plain short-sleeve ones. They are comfortable for daily wear and I pair them with jeans or a skirt to create a casual yet stylish look.

제안: Be more concise and avoid informal contractions and fillers. Start with a clear statement about how much time you spend, then give one or two specific reasons and an example of what makes it time-consuming (e.g., matching colors or accessories).

예시: Yes, I often spend about an hour picking an outfit because I like to look different each time. For example, I try several combinations of tops, bottoms and accessories until I find a look that feels unique and coordinated.

제안: Give a direct contrast between weekdays and weekends using linking words such as ‘while’ or ‘whereas’. Avoid repetitions and correct word choices (e.g., ‘wear’ not ‘work’). Provide one specific example of an outfit for each period.

예시: Yes, I do. During weekdays I wear comfortable and practical clothes like a sweater and trousers for work or school, whereas on weekends I choose more fashionable outfits, such as a dress or a stylish jacket for meeting friends.

제안: Give a clear statement about your favourite colours, avoid confusing phrasing and repetitions, and explain briefly why you like them with a specific effect (e.g., ‘they suit my complexion’ or ‘they make me feel cheerful’). Use correct nouns and adjectives.

예시: I usually prefer white shirts and blue jeans because they are versatile. I also love yellow and pink clothes because these bright colours make me feel cheerful and stand out in a crowd.

× That's a very good question.

✓ That's a very good question.

No grammatical change needed; sentence is correct. (Included for completeness.)

× I usually like to wear dresses and skirts because I just feel like I'm more feminine when I wear them.

✓ I usually like to wear dresses and skirts because I feel more feminine when I wear them.

Redundant use of 'just' and 'I'm' in 'I just feel like I'm more' is unnecessary and wordy in present simple context. Use 'I feel' for a simple present habitual state. Suggestion: simplify to 'I feel more feminine when I wear them.'

× Uh, but usually I wear, uh, pants with, uh, short sleeve shirts for like the normal day, But like, I usually love to wear dresses because, you know, I, I think they were.

✓ But usually I wear pants with short-sleeved shirts on a normal day. However, I usually love to wear dresses because I think they suit me.

Original sentence has disfluencies (fillers like 'uh' and 'like'), punctuation problems and an incorrect ending 'I think they were' which is ungrammatical (past tense 'were' doesn't fit). Use 'short-sleeved' (adjective) and 'on a normal day', and replace 'they were' with 'they suit me' or 'they look good on me.' Remove fillers for clarity.

× It actually depends about my mood.

✓ It actually depends on my mood.

Use the correct preposition 'depends on' not 'depends about'. 'Depends on' is the fixed collocation with 'depend.'

× When I feel like the the the the place that I'm going to needs a comfortable clothes, I would wear comfortable clothes.

✓ When I feel like the place I am going to needs comfortable clothes, I wear comfortable clothes.

Multiple issues: repeated 'the' (disfluency), wrong article 'a comfortable clothes' (plural noun 'clothes' does not take 'a'), and conditional/modal mismatch: use present simple 'I wear' for habitual action rather than 'I would wear.' Suggestion: remove extra 'the', drop 'a', and use 'wear'.

× But when I feel like I'm in a good mood, I go pick my clothes in a good way.

✓ But when I'm in a good mood, I choose my clothes more carefully.

Phrase 'go pick my clothes in a good way' is unidiomatic. Use 'choose' for selecting clothes and 'more carefully' to convey improved selection. Use present simple for habitual actions.

× I wear something that I make from my fashion eye.

✓ I wear clothes that reflect my sense of fashion.

'Make from my fashion eye' is unidiomatic and unclear. Use 'reflect my sense of fashion' or 'match my fashion sense.' This corrects word choice and sentence clarity.

× Yeah I do like but it depends of the type of the shirts.

✓ Yes, I do, but it depends on the type of shirt.

Use 'depends on' not 'depends of.' Also 'the shirts' should be 'shirt' or 'the shirt type' — 'type of shirt' is natural. Add commas for clarity.

× I prefer wearing a short sleeve shirts because it makes me feel more comfortable and makes me feel like more fashionable.

✓ I prefer wearing short-sleeved shirts because they make me feel more comfortable and more fashionable.

'A short sleeve shirts' mixes singular article with plural noun; use plural 'shirts' or singular 'a short-sleeved shirt.' Also 'short-sleeved' should be hyphenated adjective. Use 'they make' to agree with plural subject and 'more fashionable' without 'like.'

× Yeah, actually every time I wanna go out, I spend like an whole hour choosing what I'm gonna wear because I think it's something difficult because every time I go out I love to look different, I love to look special.

✓ Every time I want to go out, I spend about an hour choosing what I'm going to wear because I find it difficult; I always want to look different and special.

Replace colloquial 'wanna' and 'gonna' with 'want to' and 'going to.' Use 'about an hour' rather than 'an whole hour' ('whole' needs to follow 'a' as 'a whole hour' but 'about' is more natural). Combine clauses and correct punctuation; use 'I find it difficult' instead of 'it's something difficult.'

× So it actually takes a lot of time for me to choose the clothes, the right outfit for the the hangout.

✓ So it actually takes a lot of time for me to choose the right outfit for the hangout.

Remove redundant 'the clothes' and duplicated 'the'. Use 'the right outfit' (singular) which fits context. Eliminate repetition.

× Actually, yeah, I do because and like weekdays I usually work wear something more comfortable for the work, for the school and these things and and weekends I usually work something like fashionable something for for the hangout.

✓ Yes, I do. On weekdays I usually wear something more comfortable for work or school, and on weekends I usually wear something more fashionable for hanging out.

Original has pronoun and verb confusion ('work wear'), repeated fillers, and incorrect preposition 'for the school'. Use 'wear' as main verb, 'for work or school', and 'for hanging out' or 'for a hangout.' Remove duplicates and clarify.

× I prefer white shirts and jeans, but like for the but like I actually do love so much that yellow clothes and the pink clothes because the color the these two colors gave me a good wipe.

✓ I prefer white shirts and jeans, but I also really love yellow and pink clothes because these two colors give me a good vibe.

Multiple problems: remove duplicated fillers, use 'love yellow and pink clothes' (not 'that yellow clothes'), plural article misuse 'the pink clothes' unnecessary, and wrong noun 'wipe' should be 'vibe.' Use present simple 'give' to match habitual preference.