Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more concise and organize it with a clear topic sentence followed by 1–2 specific supporting points. Avoid listing too many similar ideas and correct minor word choice (jewelries → jewelry). Use a linking phrase to connect ideas.

예시: I usually wear linen clothes because they are comfortable and versatile. For example, a linen shirt pairs easily with sandals or jeans, so I can dress it up or down depending on the occasion.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence and then give one clear reason with a linking word. Remove repetition and improve phrasing (e.g., 'I won't be anxious about whether I'm wearing the right clothes').

예시: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they make it easier to move around. For instance, when I have errands or a busy day, casual clothes help me focus on tasks rather than worrying about my outfit.

제안: Combine the points into a single organised response and avoid repeating the same reason. Use a linking word to connect the reasons and provide a brief specific example.

예시: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and breathable, and they also make me feel more confident. For example, a cotton T-shirt helps me stay cool during summer and hides any areas I feel self-conscious about.

제안: Give a concise topic sentence and then provide a specific reason or brief example. Avoid repeating 'I think' and tighten phrasing to sound more natural.

예시: Yes, I spend quite a bit of time choosing clothes because I want to look presentable. For example, before going out I usually try on two or three outfits to make sure I look neat and appropriate for the occasion.

제안: Answer directly and then give a concise reason with a clearer expression (use 'many different styles' rather than 'a multitude of styles'). Consider adding a brief example to clarify.

예시: Not really — I tend to wear similar outfits during the week and at the weekend because I don't own many different styles. For instance, I usually rotate a few casual tops and jeans regardless of the day.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and give two specific, well-linked reasons. Remove filler words like 'umm' and avoid redundant phrasing (different colors/colours).

예시: I especially like white clothing because it looks clean and versatile. For example, a white shirt can stand out in photos, and it pairs well with jeans, skirts, or shorts.

× I usually wear linen clothes because they are comfortable and they are easy to match with jewelries, shoes and bags as well as they go well with any occasion and any weather.

✓ I usually wear linen clothes because they are comfortable and easy to match with jewelry, shoes, and bags, and they go well with any occasion and any weather.

'Jewelries' is incorrect; the uncountable noun 'jewelry' or the plural 'pieces of jewelry' should be used. Also, 'they are easy to match with' can be streamlined to 'easy to match with' to avoid repetition. Use of commas and 'and' improves flow. Suggestion: Use 'jewelry' (uncountable) or 'pieces of jewelry' if you need plural count.

× I prefer to wear comfortable clothes, comfortable and casual clothes because moving outside, moving with a lot of things to do will be easier and I won't be anxious enough to think if I'm wearing the right clothes.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable, casual clothes because going out and being busy will be easier, and I won't be anxious about whether I'm wearing the right clothes.

Redundant repetition 'comfortable clothes, comfortable and casual clothes' should be condensed. 'Moving outside, moving with a lot of things to do' is awkward; use 'going out and being busy'. 'Anxious enough to think if' is unidiomatic; use 'anxious about whether'. Maintain correct verb forms and natural phrasing. Suggestion: Remove repetition and use 'about whether' for indirect yes/no clauses.

× I do like wearing T-shirts because they cover my armpits whenever I feel anxious about it.

✓ I do like wearing T-shirts because they cover my armpits when I feel anxious about them.

Pronoun reference: 'it' refers to 'armpits' (plural), so use 'them'. 'Whenever' is acceptable, but 'when' is more natural here. Suggestion: Match pronoun number to its antecedent and prefer 'when' for simple temporal clauses.

× Yes, I do think that I spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I think that whenever I'm going out, I need to look good and presentable to other people.

✓ Yes, I do think I spend a lot of time choosing clothes because whenever I go out, I need to look good and presentable to other people.

Redundant 'that' and repeated 'I think' can be removed for clarity. Use simple present 'go out' for habitual actions rather than present continuous 'I'm going out'. Suggestion: Remove unnecessary words and use simple present for habits.

× I do not think that I wear different styles of clothes on weekdays and weekends because I do not have a multitude of styles of different clothes that I could wear.

✓ I do not think I wear different styles of clothes on weekdays and weekends because I do not have a wide variety of clothes to choose from.

'A multitude of styles of different clothes' is wordy and awkward. Use 'a wide variety of clothes' or 'many different styles'. Also remove unnecessary 'that' for conciseness. Suggestion: Prefer concise phrases like 'a wide variety of clothes' or 'many different styles'.

× Aside from different colors, I really like white because it stands out, it looks clean, and it can be paired with different types of umm, jeans or skirts or even shorts.

✓ Aside from other colors, I really like white because it stands out, looks clean, and can be paired with jeans, skirts, or even shorts.

'Aside from different colors' is unclear; 'aside from other colors' is better. 'Different types of umm, jeans or skirts or even shorts' is redundant and contains filler 'umm'. Remove filler and unnecessary words and use commas for lists. Suggestion: Eliminate fillers and streamline lists: 'jeans, skirts, or shorts'.