Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words like "for example" and avoid filler words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I like to dress according to the occasion and my mood. For example, I usually wear traditional Indian clothes to weddings, while for a casual lunch or dinner I prefer a simple dress. This way I feel comfortable and appropriate for each event.

제안: Give a direct answer first and then briefly explain the reason. Remove hesitations and unnecessary repetition. Use a linking word like "however" to contrast seasons.

예시: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes in summer, but I dress smartly in winter. However, when I need to attend formal events I always choose smart attire because it looks more appropriate and keeps me warm.

제안: Answer directly and then give two concise reasons. Avoid filler words and finish the sentence clearly. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I love wearing T-shirts, especially in summer. They are lightweight and comfortable, and they keep me cool during hot days.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and complete your thought. Avoid repetition and trailing off. Offer a brief example of when you spend more time choosing clothes.

예시: Yes, I do spend time choosing clothes because I am quite fussy about my appearance. For instance, I try on several outfits before attending weddings to make sure I look appropriate and feel confident.

제안: Start with a clear statement about the general pattern, then give one contrasting example. Reduce wordiness and correct minor grammar (e.g., "formal" vs "smart").

예시: Yes, my style changes depending on plans. On weekdays I usually wear casual clothes for remote work, but on weekends I dress up—for example, I wear smart outfits for parties or family lunches.

제안: Be specific about which colours you prefer and why. Remove fillers and avoid unfinished sentences. Give one or two concrete examples of colours and the feelings they evoke.

예시: I enjoy wearing bright colours because they make me feel cheerful. For example, I often choose yellow or turquoise when I want to feel energetic, while I wear navy or grey for a more professional look.

× I love wearing different kinds of clothes to different kinds of occasions and it also depends upon my mood.

✓ I love wearing different kinds of clothes on different kinds of occasions, and it also depends on my mood.

Use 'on' for occasions (preposition error) and prefer 'depends on' (correct preposition). Also change 'depends upon' to 'depends on' for natural usage; add comma before conjunction for clarity.

× For example, if I'm going for an occasion where it's a wedding function, I would definitely opt for Indian clothes.

✓ For example, if I'm going to an occasion like a wedding, I will definitely opt for Indian clothes.

Conditional with present progressive 'I'm going' and 'would' is mixed. Use 'will' to match real future plan. Also 'where it's a wedding function' is wordy; 'like a wedding' is natural.

× But if it's a lunch or a dinner, so I will wear a dress or something.

✓ But if it's a lunch or a dinner, I will wear a dress or something.

Using both 'but' and 'so' is redundant and ungrammatical. Remove 'so' to keep a single conjunction and correct sentence structure.

× During summer time, I would usually go in for summer clothing, uh, casual clothing.

✓ During summertime, I usually choose summer clothing, casual clothing.

'Go in for' is informal and awkward here. Use 'choose' or 'prefer'. 'During summertime' is one word and fits better; remove filler words.

× Whereas if it is winter time, I would definitely dress very, uh, smartly and uh, because during summers I feel easy and breezy clothing works.

✓ Whereas in winter I dress very smartly, because in summer I find light, breezy clothing works best.

Streamline tense and adverb placement: 'in winter' and 'in summer' are correct prepositional phrases. Remove unnecessary fillers and use 'works best' to complete the comparative idea.

× I love wearing T-shirts. In fact, in summers the only thing that I wear is definitely, uh, T-shirts all summer long.

✓ I love wearing T-shirts. In fact, in summer the only thing I wear is T-shirts all summer long.

Use 'in summer' (not 'in summers') for habitual seasonal statements. Remove redundant words 'the' and 'definitely' for clarity.

× Umm, because they are easy to wear, they are breezy, they are very comfortable on the skin and I would rather go.

✓ They are easy to wear, breezy, and very comfortable on the skin, so I prefer them.

Original fragment begins with 'because' creating a sentence fragment. Replace with a full sentence and use 'prefer them' to complete thought.

× I think I spend I do spend time choosing clothes, making trials because I am very fussy when it comes to different kinds of clothing and I usually do not like people choosing clothes for me so I.

✓ I do spend time choosing clothes and trying them on because I am very fussy about clothing, and I usually do not like other people choosing clothes for me.

Remove repetition 'I think I spend I do spend' and complete the trailing fragment 'so I.' Use 'trying them on' for clarity and 'fussy about' is the correct preposition. Finish the sentence logically.

× If during weekends I am going for a party or lunch so definitely I would be wearing something that is formal.

✓ If during the weekend I am going to a party or lunch, I would definitely wear something formal.

Use 'during the weekend' or 'on weekends' for habitual time; 'going to' is correct verb phrase; remove redundant 'so' and simplify 'wear something formal.'

× Otherwise during peak days I am usually in my casual attires even if I am working because it's remote work so I wear something that is comfortable.

✓ Otherwise, on weekdays I usually wear casual clothes even if I am working because it's remote work, so I wear something comfortable.

'During peak days' is unclear; 'on weekdays' is appropriate. Use 'casual clothes' (not 'attires') and place adverbs and clauses for clarity.

× I love different kind, different colours of clothes.

✓ I love different kinds and different colours of clothes.

Use plural 'kinds' to match 'different' (singular/plural agreement) and add 'and' to join parallel nouns.

× In fact, I feel that umm, the more colour I wear on my body, the more happier happi, the happier I feel actually.

✓ In fact, I feel that the more colour I wear, the happier I feel.

Use comparative structure 'the more... the happier...' Avoid double comparative 'more happier' which is incorrect. Remove fillers and redundant words.

× And uh, this is what depicts my mood, if I will.

✓ This shows my mood.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear ('if I will' is incorrect). Replace with a simple, grammatical clause 'This shows my mood.'