Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Avoid repetition (e.g., “office style” repeated) and refine word choice (use “prefer” and mention examples).

예시: I prefer smart, office-style clothing because I spend most of my day at work. For example, I usually wear tailored suits or skirts with blouses since they look professional and are comfortable for long office hours.

제안: Give a direct answer and support it with a concise reason. Remove filler phrases and repeated ideas. Use linking words like because or so to connect ideas and provide a clear reason why you prefer smart clothes.

예시: I prefer smart clothes because I value a polished appearance. For example, wearing tailored shirts and blazers makes me feel confident and more professional at work.

제안: Keep the answer natural and correct minor grammar and word choice errors. Use one or two specific examples and linking words (e.g., for example, also). Avoid redundancy like “go out outside.”

예시: Yes. For example, I wear T-shirts when I exercise because they are comfortable and breathable. I also often wear a T-shirt with jeans for quick trips to the shop because it’s simple and practical.

제안: Reduce hesitation and organize the reply: state a clear topic sentence, then explain with a specific reason and an example. Replace fillers with fluent phrases and correct grammar (e.g., “I spend a lot of time choosing clothes because…”).

예시: Yes, I often spend quite a bit of time choosing my clothes because I like my outfits to match. For instance, I sometimes spend an hour coordinating shoes, accessories and colors before an important meeting.

제안: Be concise and correct grammar (“depends on the day”). Provide a clear contrast with linking words like “whereas” or “but” and avoid repetition. Use one solid example for each situation.

예시: Yes, it depends on my plans. If I have to go to the office or university, I wear office-style clothes like blouses and slacks, whereas on my days off I usually wear jeans and T-shirts for comfort.

제안: Give a direct answer and clarify awkward phrasing. Explain why you choose certain colors and give a concrete example. Avoid vague statements like “all of us know.”

예시: It depends on my mood. If I want to look expressive I choose bright colors like red because it draws attention and makes my outfit stand out; otherwise I prefer neutral tones like navy or gray for a professional look.

× To be honest, I really like fashion clothes and the clothes connected with the office lifestyle, office style because I usually go to work and I spend more time at the office, that's why I prefer to wear such clothes like the suits, skirts with shirts.

✓ To be honest, I really like fashionable clothes and clothes connected with the office lifestyle because I usually go to work and spend most of my time at the office; that's why I prefer to wear suits, skirts, and shirts.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and redundancy ('fashion clothes', 'office lifestyle, office style', 'such clothes like'). This is a sentence structure error: use 'fashionable clothes' (correct adjective form), combine clauses with conjunctions and punctuation, remove redundant words, and list items in parallel form ('suits, skirts, and shirts'). To improve, use concise noun phrases, correct adjective forms, and parallel lists.

× To be honest, I tend to wear smart clothes because I really appreciate and I really like, I want to like stylish and I think that smart clothes it is about the style.

✓ To be honest, I tend to wear smart clothes because I appreciate stylish clothing and I think smart clothes are about style.

The original has pronoun and subject problems ('smart clothes it is about the style') and redundant wording. This is primarily incorrect use of pronouns and sentence structure: replace 'it is' with the plural verb 'are' to agree with 'clothes', eliminate repeated phrases, and use 'stylish clothing' for clarity. Improve by ensuring subject-verb agreement and removing repetition.

× Yes I do. For instance, when I go out outside to do my sport, I usually wear T-shirts.

✓ Yes, I do. For instance, when I go out to do sport, I usually wear T-shirts.

'Go out outside' is redundant and 'do my sport' is nonstandard; this is an incorrect use of prepositions and collocations. Use 'go out' or 'go outside' (not both) and 'do sport' or 'exercise' without 'my'. Improve by using idiomatic prepositions and collocations: 'go out to exercise' or 'go outside to exercise'.

× Moreover, when I need to go to the shop, it is the the overage outfit that I could wear T-shirts and jeans most of the time.

✓ Moreover, when I need to go to the shop, I usually wear T-shirts and jeans.

The original contains unclear phrasing ('it is the the overage outfit that I could wear') and redundancy. This is a sentence structure error: simplify to a clear subject-verb-object pattern and remove duplicated words. Improve by using typical adverbs of frequency ('usually') and a direct statement.

× Yes, I really, uh, precise, uh, do uh, choosing the clothes most of the time.

✓ Yes, I'm quite particular; I spend a lot of time choosing clothes most of the time.

The original is disfluent and uses wrong verb forms ('do choosing'). This is a sentence structure error: use 'I'm quite particular' or 'I'm very precise' and the correct verb 'choose' or 'choosing' with appropriate auxiliaries ('spend time choosing'). Improve by removing filler sounds and using correct verb constructions.

× I, I spend a lot of time uh, to choosing the specific clothes because I want that all my outfits are matched together.

✓ I spend a lot of time choosing specific clothes because I want all my outfits to match.

Using 'to choosing' is incorrect; after 'spend time' use the -ing form ('choosing'). Also 'I want that' is nonstandard; use 'I want all my outfits to match.' This is an incorrect use of prepositions/verb patterns and sentence structure. Improve by using correct verb patterns and 'to' + base verb for purpose clauses when needed.

× That's why I could spend umm, an hour or more to choose the specific one.

✓ That's why I can spend an hour or more choosing a specific outfit.

Use 'can' not 'could' for ability in present habit here; 'spend ... to choose' is incorrect — use 'spend ... choosing' or 'spend time choosing'. Also 'the specific one' is vague; use 'a specific outfit'. This is incorrect preposition/verb pattern use and modal choice. Improve by choosing the correct modal and gerund form.

× Yes, I could say that it depends of the day and the plans that I have.

✓ Yes, I would say that it depends on the day and the plans I have.

Use 'depends on' not 'depends of'; also 'could say' is okay but 'would say' is more natural here. This is an incorrect use of prepositions. Improve by learning common verb-preposition collocations like 'depend on'.

× For instance, if I need to go in office or at the university, I prefer to wear to wear to wear clothes related to the office style.

✓ For instance, if I need to go to the office or to university, I prefer to wear clothes related to the office style.

Use 'go to the office' and 'go to university' rather than 'go in office' or 'at the university'. Also remove repeated 'to wear'. This is incorrect use of prepositions and sentence structure. Improve by using 'go to' with places and remove repetition.

× But when I have day offs, I can wear just jeans and T-shirts.

✓ But when I have days off, I can just wear jeans and T-shirts.

'Day offs' is incorrect pluralization; correct phrase is 'days off'. This is a singular and plural issue. Improve by learning fixed plural expressions ('days off').

× To be honest, it depends on my mood because if I want to look expressive, I'm bright.

✓ To be honest, it depends on my mood because if I want to look expressive, I choose bright colors.

'I'm bright' is incorrect for expressing choice of appearance; present simple 'I choose' fits habitual or immediate choices. This is a present tense / word choice issue: use a verb that indicates selection of colors. Improve by using 'choose bright colors' or 'I wear bright clothes'.

× I try to choose such colors as red because all of us know that red is really common way that highlights my appearance.

✓ I try to choose colors like red because, as everyone knows, red is a common color that highlights appearance.

The original misuses 'such colors as' awkwardly and 'common way' is incorrect noun choice; pronoun 'all of us know' is okay but 'as everyone knows' is more natural. This is incorrect use of pronouns and noun choice; revise to use 'colors like' and 'color' rather than 'way'. Improve by using correct collocations and natural phrases.