Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は主題（カジュアルな服装）を示しているが、発話の流暢さと正確さ、文法と語順に問題がある。冗長なフィラー（uh, I I）を減らし、単数・複数や冠詞（a new pair of jeans / blue jeans）の使い方を直す。具体的な理由や状況（いつ・どのように着るか）を1〜2文で付け加えると良い。例：主文→補足（理由・例）という構造で、全体を3文以内に収めること。

예시: I prefer casual clothes such as jeans and jackets. I recently bought a new pair of blue jeans, which I often wear on weekends because they are comfortable and easy to match.

제안: 主旨は伝わるが、文法（冠詞・形容詞の順序・否定表現）と流暢さが不十分。理由を述べる際は接続詞（because / although）を使って論理的につなぐ。不要な繰り返しを避け、1文目で選択を明確にし、2文目で理由を簡潔に述べる。さらに対比を示すなら 'although' を用いる。

예시: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because I like wearing jeans that allow me to move freely. Although smart clothes look neat, they can feel restrictive for daily activities.

제안: 肯定は明確だが、話が散らかっており時制・語順の誤りが多い（make → design / I design T-shirts / I designed）。情報を整理して、いつ・どのようにデザインするかを具体的に述べる。過去の行動は過去形で簡潔に述べ、詳細は1文で補足する。

예시: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts and I also design them. For example, I designed a painted T-shirt last week when I visited Uniqlo to get inspiration.

제안: 回答は肯定だが、曖昧で繰り返しが多く、内容が具体性に欠ける。『より良い服を選ぼうとする理由』や『どのくらい時間をかけるか』を数や例で示すと良い。文を整理して1〜2文で理由と頻度を述べる。

예시: Yes, I often spend quite a lot of time choosing clothes because I want them to fit well and look good. For instance, I usually spend about 15–20 minutes deciding what to wear each morning.

제안: 意図は理解できるが、文法（時制・語順・語彙）と語の選択が不正確（CRO / smart cross 意味不明）で、説明が不明瞭。まず主文で違いを明確に伝え、次に具体例（平日は制服やきれいめ、週末はカジュアルなど）を示す。時制は現在形を使用する。

예시: Yes, I wear different styles. On weekdays I usually wear smart or neat clothes for school, but on weekends I prefer casual outfits like jeans and T-shirts.

제안: 好みは伝わるが、表現が不自然で繰り返しがある（fresh fresh）、語彙選択と語順に改善が必要。理由は簡潔かつ具体的に（blue makes me feel calm / suits me）述べ、最後の文は不要な語を削る。

예시: I prefer blue clothing because the color feels calm and fresh to me. It suits most of my other clothes, so I often choose blue items when I shop.

× I like to wear the casual clothes, uh, be such as jeans and jackets.

✓ I like to wear casual clothes, such as jeans and jackets.

The definite article 'the' is incorrect before a general plural noun 'casual clothes'. Remove 'the' and use 'such as' without 'be' to give examples. Suggestion: omit unnecessary articles when talking about things in general; use 'such as' for examples.

× Uh, especially I I recently have bought a new jeans or blue color.

✓ Especially, I recently bought a new pair of jeans that are blue.

'Jeans' is a plural noun that requires 'a pair of' when singular; 'new jeans' can be used but 'a new jeans' is incorrect. Use simple past 'bought' for a completed action. Also 'or' was incorrect; specify color with 'that are blue'. Suggestion: use 'a pair of jeans' or plural 'new jeans' without 'a' and use appropriate tense.

× I prefer to wear a comfortable casual clothes.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable, casual clothes.

Combining the article 'a' with the plural noun 'clothes' is incorrect. Remove 'a' and use a comma between adjectives. Suggestion: do not use 'a' with plural nouns; use singular noun if needed (a comfortable, casual outfit).

× Comfortable and casual clothes because I I like jeans.

✓ I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because I like jeans.

Fragment beginning with adjectives lacks a main verb. Add subject and verb to form a complete sentence and avoid repetition of 'I'. Suggestion: connect clause to previous sentence or start with 'I prefer'. Use one 'I' only.

× Also smart crosses also good.

✓ Also, smart clothes are also good.

'Crosses' is likely a mispronunciation of 'clothes'; the sentence lacks a verb. Add 'are' and correct the noun to 'clothes'. Include commas and avoid repeating 'also'. Suggestion: use 'smart clothes are also good.'

× But I'm not I cannot move smoothly.

✓ But I cannot move smoothly in them.

Mixing 'I'm not' and 'I cannot' is redundant; use one modal 'cannot' and specify 'in them' to indicate clothes. Suggestion: choose a single negative modal verb and include a prepositional phrase for clarity.

× Yes, I like wearing T-shirts or always, uh, also I make the design of T-shirts.

✓ Yes, I like wearing T-shirts. I also design T-shirts.

Sentence is run-on and awkward. Use simple sentences: 'like wearing' is fine, but 'make the design of' is unnatural; use 'design'. Remove filler words and 'or always'. Suggestion: write concise sentences and use 'design' as a verb.

× Uh, I went to the Uniqlo yesterday.

✓ I went to Uniqlo yesterday.

Use simple past 'went' correctly. Article 'the' is not needed before proper store name 'Uniqlo'. Suggestion: omit 'the' before brand/store names unless the official name includes it.

× I make the T-shirt design, uh, about hierarchy T-shirts painted in T-shirts.

✓ I made a T-shirt design about graphic hierarchy and printed it on T-shirts.

Tense should match past action ('went yesterday'), so use 'made'. 'The T-shirt design' is vague; 'a' is better. Original phrase 'hierarchy T-shirts painted in T-shirts' is unclear — clarified as 'graphic hierarchy' and 'printed on T-shirts'. Suggestion: match tense, use 'a' for a single instance, and use clearer vocabulary.

× Uh, yes, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I, I try to choose better, better clothes.

✓ Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I try to pick better clothes.

Remove duplicate 'I' and repeated 'better'. 'Choose' and 'pick' both acceptable; use one. Present simple 'spend' and 'try' are correct. Suggestion: avoid repetition and simplify verbs.

× So I, I try to, uh, from time time.

✓ So I try to do this from time to time.

Original is fragmented and missing verbs and prepositions. Use the phrase 'from time to time' correctly and include the verb 'do' to indicate the action. Suggestion: learn fixed expressions and include necessary verbs.

× I wear different styles of clothes on weekends. Are we weekdays I I often went to the school with my friend.

✓ I wear different styles of clothes on weekends. On weekdays, I often go to school with my friend.

'Are we weekdays' is incorrect; should be 'On weekdays'. Tense inconsistency: use present simple 'go' for habitual action, not 'went'. Remove duplicate 'I'. Suggestion: use 'On weekdays' to indicate time and keep consistent present tense for habits.

× Then I usually wear the CRO clothes where the a smart cross is.

✓ Then I usually wear casual, smart clothes.

Original is unintelligible with incorrect 'CRO' and 'a smart cross'. Simplify to 'casual, smart clothes' or 'smart casual clothes' depending on meaning. Remove unnecessary articles. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary 'smart casual' and avoid stray articles.

× I like blue clothes because I love blue color, uh, looks like very uh, SU sweet and fresh fresh feeling for everyone.

✓ I like blue clothes because I love the color blue; it looks very sweet and gives a fresh feeling to everyone.

Missing article 'the' before 'color blue'. 'Looks like' incorrect; use 'it looks'. Repetition 'fresh fresh' removed. 'Gives a fresh feeling to everyone' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'the color blue' and proper subject pronoun 'it' when describing appearance.

× So I usually choose blue clothes and box at for.

✓ So I usually choose blue clothes and buy them for myself.

Original 'box at for' is incoherent. Likely intended 'buy them for' or 'stock up on them'. Use 'buy them for myself' to complete idea. Suggestion: ensure verbs are clear and include object pronouns.