Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid filler words. Make the answer concise and include a brief reason or example. Use correct grammar (e.g. 'a very girly outfit' → 'very girly outfits'). Keep to 1–3 sentences.

예시: I usually wear very girly outfits, especially for parties and gatherings with my friends, because I enjoy dressing up and feeling feminine.

제안: Answer directly and avoid repeating words. Use linking words to contrast choices (e.g. 'but' or 'however') and finish the sentence clearly. Limit to two sentences.

예시: I prefer casual, comfortable clothes for everyday life, but if I have work or a special event I choose smarter, more formal outfits.

제안: Be concise and remove hesitations. Use one clear sentence with a supporting reason. Correct grammar (e.g. 'even under my abaya because they are very comfortable').

예시: Yes, I love wearing T-shirts and I wear them every day, even under my abaya, because they are very comfortable.

제안: Give a direct answer plus a specific detail and use linking words. Reduce fillers and combine sentences to be more fluent.

예시: Yes, I often spend time choosing clothes because I try to match pieces carefully; sometimes it takes me about half an hour to decide on an outfit.

제안: Answer clearly and use contrasting linking words. Give specific examples but avoid hesitation. Keep to two sentences max.

예시: Yes. On weekdays I usually wear comfortable clothes like sweatpants and T-shirts, but on weekends I prefer fancier dresses and going-out outfits.

제안: Respond directly and structure the answer with a brief explanation. Use linking words like 'however' and avoid fillers. Be specific about which colours you mean.

예시: I generally prefer dark colors, especially for outerwear in winter; however, I choose lighter colors like pastels for my pajamas.

× Normally I like to wear a very girly outfits, uh, especially for parties or uh, gatherings with my girlfriends.

✓ Normally I like to wear very girly outfits, especially for parties or gatherings with my girlfriends.

The article 'a' is incorrect before the plural noun 'outfits'. Use no article before a plural general noun. Remove 'a' to make it grammatically correct.

× No, I prefer to wear casual and comfy clothes for my everyday life.

✓ I prefer to wear casual and comfortable clothes in my everyday life.

Beginning with 'No' is unnecessary and causes confusion. 'Comfy' is informal; 'comfortable' is more appropriate. Use the preposition 'in' with 'everyday life' for natural phrasing.

× But if I have a if I have work or a party or something I would definitely choose the other option which is more smart and.

✓ But if I have work or a party, I would definitely choose the other option, which is smarter and more formal.

The sentence has repetition ('if I have a if I have') and an unfinished comparative ('more smart and.'). Remove the repeated phrase, add commas for clarity, and use 'smarter and more formal' to complete the comparison.

× I wear T-shirts every day, even under my abaya is, is very comfortable and umm, it's sort of my favorite, uh, type of clothes and umm, yeah, I, it's something that I wear daily.

✓ I wear T-shirts every day, even under my abaya; they are very comfortable and they're sort of my favorite type of clothing, so it's something I wear daily.

The original has a clause error ('under my abaya is, is') and incorrect plural/phrase 'type of clothes'. Use 'they' to refer to T-shirts, use 'type of clothing' (uncountable) rather than 'type of clothes', and simplify to avoid repetition.

× So I sometimes take half an hour trying to choose.

✓ Sometimes I take half an hour to choose.

The original 'So I sometimes take half an hour trying to choose' is understandable but wordy. Use 'take half an hour to choose' for a more natural present tense habitual statement and remove the unnecessary 'So'.

× I like to choose comfortable clothes, umm, sweatpants, T-shirts, pajamas when I'm at home.

✓ I like to choose comfortable clothes, such as sweatpants, T-shirts, and pajamas when I'm at home.

List items need a linking phrase like 'such as' and commas; add 'and' before the last item for correct list punctuation. This improves clarity.

× But for the weekends I always go with more fancy dresses and umm, outside clothes.

✓ But on weekends I always wear fancier dresses and outdoor clothes.

Use 'on weekends' (not 'for the weekends'), 'fancier' is the comparative form of 'fancy', and 'outdoor clothes' is a more natural phrase than 'outside clothes'. Also use 'wear' rather than 'go with' for clothes.

× I personally prefer umm uh dark colors, especially in the winter and umm for my outside clothes.

✓ I personally prefer dark colors, especially in winter and for my outdoor clothes.

Remove filler words; use 'in winter' or simply 'winter' without 'the'. Use 'outdoor clothes' instead of 'outside clothes' for natural English.

× But normally when I am choosing A pajama I would choose umm lighter colors.

✓ But normally when I'm choosing a pajama I would choose lighter colors.

The article 'A' should be lowercase 'a' in the sentence. Also 'pajama' could be singular or plural depending on meaning; if referring to a set, 'a pajama' is acceptable but 'pajamas' is more common: 'choosing pajamas, I would choose lighter colors.'