Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, you know), and give one or two specific reasons or details. Keep to max 4–5 sentences and use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer an effortless, casual style such as baggy jeans, a loose shirt and a cap. I choose these clothes because they are comfortable and protect me from the sun. For example, the cap keeps my face shaded during long walks, and lightweight fabrics help me stay cool.

제안: Avoid irrelevant details and fillers; answer directly and support with a clear reason. Replace vague phrases ("cup of coffee and stuff") with specific details and use a linking word (because/so) to explain your choice.

예시: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they suit my daily routine. For instance, I often wear baggy jeans and lightweight shirts since they allow ease of movement and keep me cool when I walk around the city.

제안: Clarify vocabulary and avoid hesitation. Use precise words (e.g., "soft breathable fabric") and give a brief example. Keep sentences structured: topic sentence, reason, and an example with a linking word.

예시: Yes, I love wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and let me move freely. I especially prefer T-shirts made of soft, breathable cotton, since they are pleasant to wear all day. For example, a lightweight cotton T-shirt is my choice for both relaxing at home and casual outings.

제안: This answer is clear and relevant but reduce repetition and correct small phrasing issues. Use varied vocabulary ("indecisive" is good) and add a brief linking reason to explain how you choose.

예시: Yes, I spend a fair amount of time choosing clothes because I'm indecisive about matching items. I typically spend about 20–30 minutes planning an outfit in my head so that the colors and styles will match when I try them on.

제안: Correct contradictions and organize ideas clearly: state the contrast with a linking word (whereas/while). Remove filler words and fix the mistaken repetition (weekdays/weekends). Provide one specific example of weekday and weekend outfits.

예시: Yes. On weekdays I usually dress more formally to reflect my profession, for example a smart shirt and trousers. Whereas on weekends I prefer casual clothes like jeans and a T-shirt so I can relax and feel comfortable.

제안: Use precise vocabulary and correct word choice (e.g., "feathers" not "fathers"). Be specific about colors and give a brief reason. Avoid rambling and fillers; one topic sentence plus one reason is enough.

예시: I prefer natural colors inspired by nature, such as olive green, sky blue and muted browns, because they feel calm and timeless. I avoid bright, trendy colors since they can look too flashy and go out of style quickly.

× Well, I'd usually go for a very, you know, uh, effortless look with baggy jeans and, uh, uh, very loose shirt with a cap on, you know, to avoid the very bad feeling of just, you know, enduring the scorching sun and all.

✓ Well, I usually go for a very effortless look with baggy jeans and a very loose shirt with a cap on to avoid the unpleasant feeling of enduring the scorching sun.

The sentence uses 'I'd usually' which can be conditional/modal but the speaker means habitual action, so use simple present 'I usually'. 'Very, you know, uh, uh' are disfluencies and removed for clarity. 'Very loose shirt' requires an article 'a'. 'Very bad feeling' is awkward; 'unpleasant feeling' is more natural. Remove redundant fillers and match present-tense habitual context.

× Well, I usually go for something that is very comfortable casually, like the daily walk in clothes.

✓ Well, I usually choose something that is very comfortable and casual, like clothes for daily walks.

The original uses 'comfortable casually' which mixes adjective and adverb incorrectly. Use 'comfortable and casual' (two adjectives) or 'casual and comfortable'. 'Daily walk in clothes' is ungrammatical; 'clothes for daily walks' is correct. Also 'go for' can remain but 'choose' is clearer.

× I'd say baggy jeans as I've experienced before and you know, a very lightweight shirt with a cup of coffee and stuff.

✓ I'd say baggy jeans, as I have worn before, and a very lightweight shirt, maybe with a cup of coffee.

'As I've experienced before' is odd for clothing; use 'as I have worn before' to indicate past experience relevant now (present perfect). 'With a cup of coffee and stuff' is colloquial; simplify to 'maybe with a cup of coffee.' Maintain present relevance.

× I love wearing T-shirts which are very comfy, uh, and I could just feel myself in it.

✓ I love wearing T-shirts that are very comfy, and I can just feel myself in them.

Use 'that' for defining clauses with things; 'which' is acceptable but 'that' is clearer. 'Could' implies past ability; use 'can' for general present ability. 'Myself in it' is wrong because T-shirts plural so use 'them'. Also 'feel myself in them' is informal but acceptable.

× I don't have to sit in a special way or something.

✓ I don't have to sit in a special way or anything.

'Or something' is informal and vague; 'or anything' is idiomatic in negative contexts. The sentence structure is fine otherwise.

× I just could be me and feel free in that specific shirt.

✓ I can just be myself and feel free in that particular shirt.

Use 'can' for present general ability instead of 'could'. Use 'myself' rather than 'me' after a verb (reflexive pronoun for emphasis). 'Particular' is more precise than 'specific' in this context.

× Umm, I also like especially the ones that are made-up of loadable fabric, uh, ones that do not have any skeptical.

✓ I especially like the ones that are made of lightweight fabric and do not have any seams that irritate the skin.

'Made-up of' should be 'made of'. 'Loadable' is incorrect; likely 'lightweight'. 'Do not have any skeptical' is ungrammatical; perhaps intended 'do not have any rough seams' or 'do not cause irritation'. Clarify meaning and correct adjective usage.

× Yes, I would say so. I am quite indecisive and I would use really stare at the wardrobe for at least like 30 minutes straight, just trying to plan the whole outfit in my head so that hopefully when I try it on it's just like I had it in my head and they match.

✓ Yes, I would say so. I am quite indecisive and I really stare at the wardrobe for at least 30 minutes straight, planning the whole outfit in my head so that when I try it on it's just like I imagined and everything matches.

Mixing 'would use really stare' is incorrect; use simple present 'I really stare' for habitual action. Remove filler 'at least like'. 'I had it in my head' is past; use 'I imagined' to match intended meaning. 'They match' refers to 'outfit' (singular) so use 'everything matches' or 'it matches'.

× Yes, for most of it. During weekdays, I like to, uh, look more put together and more chic, something that really represents the, uh, profession that I work in.

✓ Yes, for the most part. During weekdays, I like to look more put together and chic, something that represents the profession I work in.

'For most of it' is incorrect idiom; use 'for the most part'. Remove filler 'uh'. 'That I work in' can be shortened to 'I work in' after 'profession'. Keep present tense and concise wording.

× So I often go for a more formal look. Whereas on weekdays, I weekends, I like to be myself and just enjoy whatever that feels comfortable to put myself in.

✓ So I often go for a more formal look. Whereas on weekends, I like to be myself and just wear whatever feels comfortable.

Original has 'Whereas on weekdays, I weekends,' which is garbled. Use 'weekends' for contrast. 'Enjoy whatever that feels comfortable to put myself in' is wordy and ungrammatical; simplify to 'wear whatever feels comfortable.' Maintain parallel structure.

× Well, I do like colors that just represent nature and the way, you know, birds look like because I like, I love how their fathers appear and it's a whole, you know, just an amazing, mesmerizing thing to actually, uh, look forward to.

✓ Well, I like colors that represent nature and the way birds look because I love how their feathers appear; it's a truly amazing, mesmerizing sight to look forward to.

Multiple errors: 'birds look like' should be 'birds look' or 'the way birds look'. 'Their fathers' is incorrect; likely 'their feathers'. Remove filler words and adjust adjectives: 'truly amazing, mesmerizing sight' is clearer. Keep present tense.

× However, I don't like the pop colors which match the trends.

✓ However, I don't like pop colors that follow trends.

Use 'that' for defining clauses with things. 'Match the trends' is acceptable but 'follow trends' is more natural. Remove definite article 'the' before 'pop colors' unless referring to specific colors.