Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and add a clear topic sentence, then one specific supporting detail and a brief example. Avoid repetition (e.g., ‘comfortable’ repeated). Use a linking word to connect childhood preference to current habit.

예시: I prefer wearing long-sleeved tops because they are comfortable and versatile. For example, they keep me warm on cool mornings but are light enough in the afternoon, so I can stay comfortable throughout the day.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one specific reason and a short example. Reduce hesitation and correct minor grammar (e.g., 'it's it doesn't' → 'it doesn't'). Use a linking word like ‘because’ or ‘so’ to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they allow me to move freely. For instance, I wear breathable trousers and sneakers when I'm active, so I can exercise or commute without restriction.

제안: Be more concise and avoid run-on sentences. Give one or two clear reasons and a short example. Use linking words (for example, however) to add contrast or clarification.

예시: Yes, I like T-shirts because they keep me cool and allow free movement. For example, I often wear a T-shirt with a light jacket so I can adjust if it gets colder.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence followed by one specific reason and a brief example. Remove fillers like 'umm' and finish the thought instead of trailing off. Use a linking word such as ‘so’ or ‘for example’.

예시: No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes because I dislike wasting time. For example, when shopping I usually pick the first suitable item I see so I can finish quickly.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence, then contrast weekdays and weekends with linking words like ‘whereas’ or ‘while’. Remove hesitation and be specific about items and occasions.

예시: Yes, I wear different styles: on weekdays I wear professional outfits such as skirts and blazers for work, whereas at weekends I dress casually in trousers, T-shirts, and sneakers for relaxation or sports.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases and hesitations like 'umm'. Use linking words like ‘for example’ to present the scenario concisely.

예시: I prefer colorful clothes because they are more visible at night, which improves safety. For example, I wear bright jackets when walking after dark so drivers can see me more easily.

× It's not warm and it's not cold in them and I guess I've liked them since my childhood because it's just comfortable and beautiful looking outside.

✓ They are neither warm nor cold when I wear them, and I think I have liked them since my childhood because they are comfortable and look nice.

Mix of tense and sentence structure issues: 'It's not warm and it's not cold in them' is awkward; use plural 'they' to refer to 'long sleeves'. 'I guess I've liked them since my childhood' should be 'I think I have liked them since my childhood' (present perfect to link past to present) and match plural reference. Reword for natural English and correct pronoun agreement.

× I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes because it's it doesn't matter whether it's beautiful or not from the outside, it's more about comfort of your moving.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes because it doesn't matter whether they look nice from the outside; it's more about comfort when you move.

Pronoun reference and wording errors: 'it's it doesn't' is redundant. Use 'they' to refer to 'clothes'. 'Beautiful or not from the outside' is awkward; use 'look nice from the outside'. 'Comfort of your moving' is incorrect; use 'comfort when you move'.

× And uh, since I like to be active, it's better for me and my lifestyle.

✓ Since I like to be active, they suit me and my lifestyle better.

Sentence uses vague 'it's better for me' without clear subject. Replace with 'they suit me' referring to 'comfortable clothes' and place comparative 'better' correctly.

× Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they make me feel comfortable since they don't have sleeves and my body temperature is at a comfortable range, not too warm and not too cold and my hands and arms are free of clothing and that's why I can also put something on the T-shirt if it's cold for me.

✓ Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they make me feel comfortable: they have no sleeves, so my body temperature stays in a comfortable range and my arms are free, and if I get cold I can put something on over the T-shirt.

Run-on sentence and awkward gerund phrasing: 'they don't have sleeves' is fine but 'my body temperature is at a comfortable range' should be 'my body temperature stays in a comfortable range'. 'My hands and arms are free of clothing' is wordy; use 'my arms are free'. 'Put something on the T-shirt' is unnatural; use 'put something on over the T-shirt'. Break into clearer clauses.

× No, I actually don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I don't like wasting time doing so.

✓ No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes because I don't like wasting time on that.

Wordiness and repetition: 'actually' is unnecessary. Use 'don't spend much time' and 'wasting time on that' for natural phrasing.

× I usually prefer something that I see right when I enter any shop and umm.

✓ I usually choose the first thing I see when I enter a shop.

Incomplete sentence and awkward phrasing: 'prefer something that I see right when I enter any shop and umm' is unfinished. Make it concise and complete: 'I usually choose the first thing I see when I enter a shop.'

× Yes, I think I wear different styles of clothes because on weekdays when I go to work, I need more professional clothing, umm, including skirts and special Blazers.

✓ Yes, I think I wear different styles because on weekdays when I go to work I need more professional clothing, including skirts and blazers.

Unnecessary capitalization 'Blazers' should be lowercase. 'Special' is vague and unnecessary. Remove filler 'umm' and 'of clothes' is redundant after 'styles'.

× But on the weekends I like to be relaxed or I like to do some activities in sports, so I wear trousers, sneakers and some T-shirts with the jumper on.

✓ But on weekends I like to relax or do sports activities, so I wear trousers, sneakers and T-shirts with a jumper.

Preposition and word order errors: 'in sports' should be 'do sports' or 'play sports'. 'With the jumper on' is awkward; use 'with a jumper' or 'wear a jumper'. Remove extra 'some' before T-shirts.

× I like colorful clothes because people can see you from the long distance and for example, if you go somewhere for a walk at night, it's important that cars can see you so that there is no accident happening there.

✓ I like colourful clothes because people can see you from a long distance; for example, if you walk at night it's important that drivers can see you so there is no accident.

Preposition and word choice errors: 'from the long distance' should be 'from a long distance'. 'Go somewhere for a walk at night' is wordy—use 'walk at night'. 'Cars can see you' is better expressed as 'drivers can see you'. Remove passive 'there is no accident happening there' and simplify to 'there is no accident.'

× And especially just umm, color suit me. That's why I like them.

✓ Also, bright colours suit me, which is why I like them.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice: 'color suit me' should be 'colours suit me' (plural subject) and 'especially just umm' is filler. Use 'bright colours' or 'colourful clothes' for clarity and correct agreement.