Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct minor grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason. Avoid unclear brand or abbreviation unless explained. Use linking word for coherence.

예시: I like wearing linen clothes in summer because they are lightweight and breathable. For example, a loose linen shirt keeps me cool on hot days and dries quickly when I sweat.

제안: Give a direct answer first, then explain briefly with a clear reason using linking words. Reduce hesitation and repetition; finish within two to three sentences.

예시: I prefer to wear smart clothes because people often judge others by their appearance. For example, wearing a neat shirt and trousers helps me make a professional impression at interviews or meetings.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific supporting detail. Avoid vague phrases like "kinds of clothes that I could assess." Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts, especially in summer, because they are comfortable and easy to wash. For instance, I often wear cotton T-shirts for casual outings or exercise.

제안: Answer directly and give two clear factors you check (e.g., fabric and fit). Remove filler words and finish the sentence. Use linking words to structure the response.

예시: Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I pay attention to fabric and fit. For example, I check whether the fabric is breathable and whether the cut suits my body shape before buying.

제안: Give a concise direct answer and clarify meaning (you said "cold clothes" — likely meant "similar clothes"). Use one supporting reason and avoid repetition.

예시: Not really. I usually wear similar styles on weekdays and weekends because I prefer comfortable casual clothes most of the time. For example, I often wear jeans and a simple shirt whether I'm at work or relaxing at home.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence listing preferred colours, then give a short reason why you like them. Avoid hesitations and unclear closing sentence.

예시: I like neutral colours such as beige, white, black and navy, and sometimes olive green because they are versatile and easy to match. For example, a navy jacket can be paired with many shirts for different occasions.

× I prefer linen in summer, specifically UMM because it is quite a cool and light which is really comfortable to wear.

✓ I prefer linen in summer, specifically UMM, because it is quite cool and light and really comfortable to wear.

The sentence uses 'a cool and light' incorrectly; 'cool' and 'light' are adjectives and should not be preceded by 'a' when used together without a noun. Also the relative connector 'which' is unnecessary and awkward. Use 'and' to connect adjectives and add a comma before 'because' for clarity. Suggestion: list adjectives directly (cool and light) and join with 'and'.

× I prefer to wear smart clothes often they, they, people used to play, uh, treat people, uh, based on their outfit and which, the reason why the people act like that is they, uh.

✓ I prefer to wear smart clothes because people often treat others based on their outfit.

The original is fragmented, repetitive and contains filler words. This is a sentence structure issue: combine the idea into a single coherent sentence with a clear subject and verb. Remove disfluencies ('they, they, uh') and use 'because' to show reason. Suggestion: state the main point succinctly: 'I prefer to wear smart clothes because people often treat others based on their outfit.'

× Yeah, I like to wear T-shirts, specifically in summer because it is quite common. Kinds of clothes that I could assess, yeah.

✓ Yes, I like to wear T-shirts, especially in summer because they are quite common.

The second fragment 'Kinds of clothes that I could assess, yeah.' is incomplete and unclear, causing a sentence structure error. Also 'it is quite common' mismatches the plural subject 'T-shirts' so change to 'they are'. Suggestion: remove the fragment and match subject and verb number: 'T-shirts ... they are.'

× I really, I spend time to choose my clothes because I should check the, uh, fabric, what fabric used and it is good design or something like that.

✓ I really spend time choosing my clothes because I check the fabric, what fabric is used, and whether it has a good design.

'Spend time to choose' is less natural; use 'spend time choosing' (verb + -ing). 'What fabric used' is missing auxiliary 'is'. Also 'it is good design' needs 'whether it has a good design' or 'if it is well designed'. Suggestion: use 'spend time choosing' and include 'is' after 'fabric' and a phrase like 'whether it has a good design.'

× So I really concerned a lot of things, which makes a lot of.

✓ So I am really concerned about a lot of things, which causes me to worry a great deal.

'I really concerned' misses the verb 'am' and requires the preposition 'about' after 'concerned'. The phrase 'which makes a lot of' is incomplete. Suggestion: use 'I am concerned about' and complete the clause: 'which causes me to worry a great deal.'

× Hmm not really. I wear cold clothes not depends on what weekends or weekday. I constantly wear same clothes as week or weekday, weekend or weekdays.

✓ Not really. I wear the same clothes whether it is a weekend or a weekday. I usually wear similar clothes during the week and at weekends.

Several pronoun and structure issues: 'not depends on what weekends or weekday' is incorrect; use 'whether it is a weekend or a weekday.' 'I constantly wear same clothes as week or weekday' is ungrammatical and missing articles/adverbs. Suggestion: use 'the same clothes' and 'whether' to present the contrast, and 'usually' or 'constantly' to indicate frequency.

× I like such colors like beige or white, black and Navy, something like that, or olive green.

✓ I like colors such as beige, white, black, navy, and olive green.

'Such colors like' is redundant; use either 'such as' or 'like'. Capitalization: 'Navy' as a color should be lowercase 'navy'. Also list items cleanly with commas and 'and' before the last item. Suggestion: use 'colors such as' and lowercase color names.

× Uh, the colors do not really, uh, pop into your mind, yeah.

✓ These colors do not really stand out or pop to the eye.

'Pop into your mind' is awkward for visual prominence; use 'stand out' or 'pop to the eye'. Also 'the colors do not really pop into your mind' has misplaced adverb and unclear subject. Suggestion: rephrase to 'These colors do not really stand out' for clarity.