Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitations and repetition; give one clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and correct small grammar errors (e.g., “easy to wear every day,” “I prefer casual clothes”). Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

예시: I prefer simple, casual clothes such as shorts, trousers and sneakers because they are comfortable and practical for everyday life. For example, I usually wear sneakers when I go out with friends because they let me walk around easily and feel relaxed.

제안: Avoid repeating the same idea; state your preference once, then give two concise reasons using linking words (because, when). Correct subject-verb and phrasing (e.g., “They make me feel…”). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes rather than smart clothes because they allow me to move easily and feel relaxed. When I go to school or meet friends, casual outfits help me stay comfortable throughout the day.

제안: Be grammatically precise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., I prefer shirts to T-shirts), then give specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (because, so, for example). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer wearing loose shirts to T-shirts because they are more comfortable for long periods of work. For example, a baggy cotton shirt keeps me cool and allows me to move freely during long shifts.

제안: Give a direct answer first (No or Not usually), then explain briefly with a clear reason and finish the sentence about exceptions. Avoid unfinished sentences. Use correct vocabulary and structure (e.g., “I usually don’t spend much time choosing clothes because I wear a basic outfit, but I put more thought into clothes for parties”).

예시: No, I don't usually spend much time choosing clothes because I wear a basic outfit for work most days. However, I do plan my clothes carefully for festivals and parties when I want to look special.

제안: Clarify the contrast between weekdays and weekends. Start with a clear statement (Yes/No), then give specific examples of what you wear on workdays vs weekends using linking words (for example, while, but). Avoid unclear words and correct terms (e.g., “clothes,” specify garments).

예시: Generally I wear similar casual styles on both weekdays and weekends, but on workdays I usually wear an abaya with a T-shirt underneath for comfort. On weekends I prefer shorts and light shirts for relaxing at home or going out with friends.

제안: Be concise and avoid repeating connectors (but, however). State your general preference, give seasonal reasons and an example for special occasions. Use precise vocabulary (energetic). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: It depends on the season: in summer I prefer light colours such as pale grey, soft yellow or mint green because they feel refreshing and cooler. For parties I often choose brighter colours to create a livelier look.

× I like to wear the simple and casual clothes such as shorts, trousers and sneakers.

✓ I like to wear simple, casual clothes such as shorts, trousers, and sneakers.

The article 'the' is unnecessary before general adjectives describing a category; adjectives should be ordered without 'the' here and commas separate coordinate adjectives. Also use a serial comma for clarity.

× Uh, I think that they are more comfortable and uh, uh, easy to wear everyday.

✓ I think they are more comfortable and easy to wear every day.

Reduce filler words and separate 'every day' (two words) meaning each day. 'Easy' should be 'easy to wear' which is correct; remove repeated 'uh' and 'that' is optional.

× Uh, and it's simple and good for hanging out with friends and families for prefer the casual and simple clothes to wear.

✓ They are simple and good for hanging out with friends and family, so I prefer casual, simple clothes to wear.

Original sentence is fragmented and redundant. 'Families' should be 'family' when referring to one's family in general. Rearranged to make clear subject and verb and to use 'prefer' correctly with an object.

× Yes, I prefer to wear the comfortable and casual clothes all of the time because they are more comfortable and easy to move all around and whenever I go to school and hanging with friends I I choose to prefer the simple and casual clothes It's make me feel so fresh and comfortable and.

✓ Yes, I prefer to wear comfortable, casual clothes most of the time because they are more comfortable and allow me to move around easily. Whenever I go to school or hang out with friends, I choose simple, casual clothes because they make me feel fresh and comfortable.

Removed redundant 'the' before general nouns, fixed verb forms ('allow me to move', 'hang out'), removed duplicate words, corrected 'It's make' to 'they make', and improved sentence flow. Use 'most of the time' instead of 'all of the time' if intended; kept consistent plural pronoun 'they' with 'clothes'.

× Actually I like to wear shirts rather than T-shirts.

✓ Actually, I prefer to wear shirts rather than T-shirts.

Using 'prefer' is more natural than 'like ... rather than' in this contrast. Added comma after 'Actually'.

× The shirts or different type like loose shirt, baggy shirts, they make me feel for easy and comfortable when I want to work.

✓ The shirts are different types, such as loose shirts and baggy shirts; they make me feel relaxed and comfortable when I work.

Fixed 'or' to 'are', clarified plural forms, replaced 'for easy' with 'relaxed' or 'comfortable', and corrected structure. Use semicolon or two clauses for clarity.

× So using these type of shirts I working for a long hours.

✓ So using these types of shirts, I can work for long hours.

Correct plural 'types', add 'can' to express ability, change 'working' to 'work', and 'long hours' without 'a'.

× So I prefer the shirts rather than T-shirts like make me feel more comfortable, comfortable.

✓ So I prefer shirts rather than T-shirts because they make me feel more comfortable.

Removed duplicate 'comfortable' and unnecessary 'the' before plural general noun; added 'because' to link reason.

× Not actually spending a lot of time, uh, for choosing lots uh, in my normal teen, uh, when I go to my job, I don't spend too much time to choose the clothes because I used to wear a BIA under any shirt, uh, any clothes or T-shirt.

✓ I don't actually spend a lot of time choosing clothes in my normal routine. When I go to work, I don't spend much time choosing clothes because I usually wear a basic layer under any shirt or T-shirt.

Reordered for clarity, removed fillers, corrected 'used to' to 'usually' for habitual present, clarified 'BIA' to 'basic layer' if intended (original unclear) and fixed infinitive use.

× But however, when I want to go for a festival or parties.

✓ However, I choose differently when I go to a festival or a party.

Original is a fragment. Made a complete sentence and chose singular/plural consistency 'a festival or a party' or 'festivals or parties'.

× I wear the same style of claws in week days or weekends, but whenever I, uh, went to my job, uh, in working days like weekdays, uh, I used to wear the abaya under T-shirts that make me feel so comfortable.

✓ I wear the same style of clothes on weekdays and weekends, but when I go to work on weekdays, I usually wear an abaya under T-shirts because it makes me feel comfortable.

Fixed 'claws' to 'clothes', 'week days' to 'weekdays', corrected tense to present 'go'/'wear' for habitual actions, used 'an abaya' and 'it makes' for agreement.

× But on the other hand, uh, I wear the same type of clothes like shorts and frozen ETC.

✓ On the other hand, I also wear the same types of clothes, like shorts and trousers, etc.

Replaced 'frozen' (likely incorrect) with 'trousers' or appropriate item; removed filler, corrected 'type' to 'types' for plural examples, and used 'etc.' properly.

× It depends actually.

✓ It depends, actually.

Added comma for natural speech pacing.

× I like the light colours in summer like light grey, light yellow or green.

✓ I like light colours in summer, such as light grey, light yellow, and light green.

Removed 'the' before general preference, added commas and 'such as' to introduce examples, and made 'green' explicitly 'light green' for parallelism.

× But however these colours are so refreshing and make me feel more energetical.

✓ These colours are refreshing and make me feel more energetic.

Remove redundant 'but however'; use 'energetic' (adjective) not 'energetical' and avoid redundancy 'so refreshing' can be 'refreshing'.

× However, at the parties or festival I like to use the bright colours or also the light colours.

✓ At parties or festivals, I like to wear bright colours, but I also sometimes wear light colours.

Made plural 'parties or festivals', used 'wear' instead of 'use', and clarified contrast with 'but' and frequency 'sometimes' for natural expression.