Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words (uh), use correct nouns (e.g., pants, sneakers) and correct verb forms. Add one specific example and a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer casual clothes because they are comfortable and practical. For example, I often wear a loose shirt, jeans, and sneakers when I go out with friends. This style lets me move freely and feel relaxed, so I choose it most days.

제안: Correct grammar and pronunciation issues and use clearer linking phrases. Give a short reason and one specific situation as an example. Remove contractions or incorrect words (e.g., "come", "floats", "hack").

예시: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they make me feel relaxed and confident. For instance, when I go to school or hang out with friends, I usually wear jeans and a T-shirt so I can move freely and feel at ease.

제안: Use clear sentence structure and avoid hesitation. State your preference directly, then give a brief reason and a specific example. Correct phrases like "put T-shirts under my abaya" and finish the sentence. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts, especially loose or slightly baggy ones because they are comfortable during long hours. For work I usually wear a T-shirt under my abaya so I feel more comfortable while teaching.

제안: Reduce hesitation and organize ideas: start with a topic sentence 'It depends', then give two clear contrasting situations with linking words (e.g., 'but', 'however') and specific details. Fix unclear vocabulary and finish thoughts.

예시: It depends. When I go to work I don't spend much time choosing clothes because I usually wear a T-shirt and an abaya. However, for special events or festivals I spend more time planning outfits and accessories to look appropriate.

제안: Be concise and use linking words to contrast weekday and weekend choices. Correct grammar and avoid repetition. Provide one specific example of professional attire versus casual wear.

예시: Generally no, I wear similar clothes on weekdays and weekends. However, when I go to work as a teacher I wear more professional clothes, such as a blouse and tailored trousers, while on weekends I prefer casual jeans and a T-shirt.

제안: Avoid repetition and use precise vocabulary. Start with a clear statement of favourite colours, then give a reason and a brief contrast for special occasions. Remove repeated words and correct phrasing.

예시: I usually prefer light colours like sky blue, pale yellow, or mint green because they make me feel fresh and energetic. However, at parties and festivals I tend to wear brighter colours to look festive.

× I like to prefer casual clothes like shirts, clothes and sketches.

✓ I prefer casual clothes like shirts, shorts and sneakers.

The original sentence uses redundant or incorrect words: 'I like to prefer' combines two verbs unnecessarily; use either 'I like' or 'I prefer'. 'Clothes' is too general following 'shirts'; 'sketches' is incorrect word choice—likely meant 'sneakers'. Use parallel list items. Suggestion: say 'I prefer casual clothes like shirts, shorts and sneakers.'

× Uh, I think they make me feel comfortable and easy to wear everyday.

✓ I think they make me feel comfortable and are easy to wear every day.

'Easy to wear' describes the clothes and needs a verb link 'are'. 'Everyday' as an adjective means ordinary; the correct adverbial phrase is 'every day'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct word form.

× I it's simple and good for hanging out with friends and family.

✓ They are simple and good for hanging out with friends and family.

The original mixes subject and contraction incorrectly ('I it's'). The intended subject is 'they' (the clothes). Use correct pronoun and verb form: 'They are simple...'.

× It filled me so relaxed and easy to move around.

✓ They make me feel relaxed and make it easy to move around.

'Filled me so relaxed' is incorrect verb and past tense. Use 'make me feel relaxed' (present) for habitual statements. Also clarify that clothes make movement easy: 'make it easy to move around.' Maintain consistent present tense.

× I prefer come comfortable and casual floats all the time because they make me feel relaxed and more confident.

✓ I prefer comfortable and casual clothes all the time because they make me feel relaxed and more confident.

Multiple word choice errors: 'come' is unnecessary; 'floats' is incorrect for 'clothes'. Remove stray words and use correct noun 'clothes'. Keep simple present 'I prefer'.

× For example, when I go to school and hack out with friends, I choose practical outfit that let me move freely and feel at ease.

✓ For example, when I go to school and hang out with friends, I choose practical outfits that let me move freely and feel at ease.

'hack out' is a typo for 'hang out'. 'Outfit' should be plural 'outfits' to match general statement. 'Let' should be 'let' with plural subject 'outfits' requires 'let' (same), but ensure 'that let me' is correct. Use plural agreement and correct preposition/verb.

× I like to wear shirts, uh, to T-shirts such as loose or slightly baggy shirts that make me feel more relaxed and comfortable, uh, especially when I work for long hours.

✓ I like to wear T-shirts, such as loose or slightly baggy ones that make me feel more relaxed and comfortable, especially when I work long hours.

Sentence repeats 'shirts' and misuses 'to T-shirts'. Use 'T-shirts' as the item and replace repetition with pronoun 'ones'. Also 'work for long hours' is better as 'work long hours'. Remove filler words.

× However, when I, uh, when I, I'm going to my work, so I put T-shirts under my abaya that make me feel more comfortable for doing my.

✓ However, when I go to work, I wear T-shirts under my abaya which make me feel more comfortable while working.

Fix tense and structure: use 'go to work' or 'go to my work' consistently; 'put T-shirts under my abaya' is colloquial—use 'wear'. 'For doing my' is incomplete; replace with 'while working'. Use 'which' or 'that' to introduce the clause describing the T-shirts.

× It depends, uh, when I go to my uh, job, then uh, I do not spend a lot of time for choosing clause because, uh, I have, I wear a buyer under AT shirt and I put on T-shirt and when, However, when I go to the uh, event or festival, then I, uh, spend a lot of time for choosing the.

✓ It depends. When I go to my job, I do not spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I usually wear a blouse or shirt with a T-shirt underneath. However, when I go to an event or festival, I spend a lot of time choosing them.

Original is fragmented and contains many errors: 'for choosing clause' should be 'choosing clothes'; 'buyer under AT shirt' seems garbled—assumed 'blouse or shirt with a T-shirt underneath.' Remove fillers and fix articles ('an event'), verb forms, and sentence boundaries.

× No, actually, uh, I usually wear the same dress for weekends and weekdays, but uh, when I go for my job, like I, I'm going to professional work. So then I, uh, choose the different style of uh, clothing to look like the professional teacher.

✓ No. Actually, I usually wear the same clothes on weekends and weekdays, but when I go to work, especially for professional reasons, I choose a different style of clothing to look like a professional teacher.

'Wear the same dress for weekends and weekdays' is awkward—use 'clothes' and 'on' for days. Simplify redundant phrases and correct article usage: 'a different style' and 'a professional teacher' or 'like a professional teacher'. Ensure consistent present tense.

× I usually prefer the light colours such as light blue, sky blue, yellow, yellow or green colour that make me feel fresh and full of energy.

✓ I usually prefer light colours such as light blue, sky blue, yellow or green, which make me feel fresh and full of energy.

Avoid repeating 'yellow' and 'colour' twice. 'Prefer the light colours' should be 'prefer light colours'. Use 'which' to introduce result clause. Keep list consistent and concise.

× However, I prefer I would prefer to wear bright colours on at parties and festivals.

✓ However, I would prefer to wear bright colours at parties and festivals.

Do not use 'prefer' and 'I would prefer' together. Use modal 'would' for conditional preference: 'I would prefer to wear...'. Remove extra preposition 'on' before 'at parties'.