Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify vocabulary, avoid mistakes and redundancy, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting details. Replace incorrect word "cash flow" with "casual" or "comfortable", remove filler phrases, and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Use a linking phrase to connect reason.

예시: I prefer wearing casual, comfortable clothes because they make me feel relaxed and allow me to move freely. For example, I often choose T-shirts and jeans when I go out, since they’re practical and easy to wear.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence that answers directly, then give one specific reason with a linking word. Remove fillers like “uh” and avoid repeating phrases. Use correct subject-verb agreement ("casual clothes are").

예시: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because I often spend time at the mall or park doing recreational activities. Therefore, casual clothes are more suitable for my lifestyle than smart clothes.

제안: Answer directly and add one specific detail. Use linking words to make the sentence flow and avoid repetition (don’t repeat "T-shirts" unnecessarily). Mention a reason and a short example.

예시: Yes, I like wearing simple cotton T-shirts because they’re comfortable for activities and easy to pair with jeans when I go to the mall or meet friends.

제안: Give a short direct answer then support with a brief reason and example. Use accurate verbs ("spend time choosing clothes") and avoid vague words such as "a bit". Connect sentences with a linking word like "because" or "so".

예시: No, I don’t spend much time choosing clothes because I prefer simple, casual items. For example, I can quickly buy a T-shirt and jeans at most malls.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence then one concise supporting detail. Remove hesitation and duplicate words. Use a linking phrase such as "but" or "however" to contrast weekdays and weekends.

예시: Yes. I wear smart clothes for work on weekdays, but on weekends I usually wear casual clothes to run errands and relax.

제안: Start with a direct statement of preference, correct grammar ("I prefer black and white"), and give a clear reason with an example. Avoid awkward phrasing and repetitions.

예시: I prefer black and white clothing because those colors are easy to match with other items. For example, a black top goes well with most shoes and jackets.

× I actually prefer wearing cash flow or comfortable clothes simply because it makes me feel at ease and relax and I can move freely when I wear pants or T-shirts and et cetera.

✓ I actually prefer wearing casual or comfortable clothes simply because they make me feel at ease and relaxed, and I can move freely when I wear pants or T-shirts, etc.

The sentence used 'cash flow' incorrectly instead of 'casual' (word choice) and mixed singular/plural agreement: 'clothes' is plural so use 'they make' not 'it makes'. 'Relax' should be the past participle 'relaxed' to describe a state. Also add commas for clarity and replace 'and et cetera' with 'etc.' to be concise. Suggestion: choose correct adjectives (casual), ensure subject-verb agreement for plural nouns, and use 'relaxed' to describe how something makes you feel.

× As mentioned, I actually prefer wearing comfortable and casual clothes because I'm a type of person who loves going to the mall and park or doing recreational activities. So uh, casual clothes is more suitable for me than smart clothes.

✓ As mentioned, I actually prefer wearing comfortable and casual clothes because I'm the kind of person who loves going to the mall and the park or doing recreational activities. So, casual clothes are more suitable for me than smart clothes.

Use 'the kind of person' (idiomatic) and include article 'the' before 'park'. 'Casual clothes' is plural, so use verb 'are' instead of 'is' (subject-verb agreement). Remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: use correct articles with places and match plural nouns with plural verbs.

× I like wearing T-shirts, like cotton T-shirts, simple T-shirts, because I can really do recreational activities, go to the mall and I love pairing it with jeans.

✓ I like wearing T-shirts, like cotton or simple T-shirts, because I can comfortably do recreational activities, go to the mall, and I love pairing them with jeans.

Pronoun agreement: 'T-shirts' is plural so use 'them' instead of 'it'. Use 'comfortably' (adverb) to modify 'do recreational activities'. Also streamline list with commas and use 'or' between similar adjectives. Suggestion: ensure pronouns match noun number and use adverbs correctly to modify verbs.

× No, I don't spend a lot of time using clothes because I am into casual clothes. So T-shirts, pants and any casual clothes are a bit easy to find in the mall.

✓ No, I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I like casual clothes. So T-shirts, pants and other casual items are fairly easy to find in the mall.

Use 'choosing clothes' instead of 'using clothes' (wrong verb). 'Into' can be okay but 'like' is clearer here. 'Any casual clothes' is awkward; 'other casual items' or 'casual clothes' is better. 'A bit easy' is unnatural; use 'fairly easy'. Suggestion: pick correct verbs for the activity (choose), prefer natural collocations and clearer modifiers.

× Yes, I actually work on weekdays so I wear smart clothes while on weekends I I of course choose to wear casual clothes to do my errands.

✓ Yes, I actually work on weekdays, so I wear smart clothes, while on weekends I of course choose to wear casual clothes to do my errands.

There was a duplicated 'I' and punctuation was needed to separate clauses. 'To do my errands' is acceptable but 'for running errands' is more natural. Suggestion: remove duplicate words, add commas to separate clauses, and consider more natural phrasing like 'on weekends I choose casual clothes for running errands.'

× I am in the black and white just that palette because it is easy to pair to any colors and I it is easy to choose with shoes.

✓ I prefer black and white tones because they are easy to pair with any colors, and they make it easy to choose shoes.

Original used awkward prepositions and structure: 'in the black and white just that palette' is ungrammatical. 'Pair to any colors' should be 'pair with any colors'. Pronoun and verb agreement: use 'they are' for 'black and white tones' and avoid extra 'I'. Suggestion: rephrase to 'prefer black and white tones' and use 'pair with' and clear subject-verb agreement.