Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct word forms (clothing, decent), and give one specific example. Use a linking word to show reason (because) and limit to 2–3 short supporting sentences.

예시: I prefer comfortable, modest clothing because I am Muslim and usually wear covered clothes. For example, I often choose lightweight, breathable tunics and loose trousers so I stay comfortable throughout the day.

제안: Begin with a clear direct answer (e.g. It depends on the occasion). Reduce filler words and repetition, use linking phrases (for example, however) and give a specific contrast with one brief example for weekdays vs weekends.

예시: It depends on the occasion. For example, I wear smart, breathable corporate clothes to the office, but on weekends I usually wear casual, comfortable clothes like jeans and a T‑shirt.

제안: Answer directly and avoid hesitations and unclear words. Say why you like T‑shirts and give one specific detail about fabric or fit. Use one linking word to explain reason (because) and correct word choice (comfortable, lightweight).

예시: Yes, I like wearing T‑shirts because they are comfortable and breathable. I usually choose cotton or moisture‑wicking fabrics that are lightweight and have a loose fit.

제안: Good direct answer and reasons. Improve by reducing repetition, using one smooth linking phrase (because / as) and adding a brief specific example of how you decide (e.g. matching colours, checking weather). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I usually take my time choosing clothes because I want to make a good impression and feel confident. For instance, I check the weather first and then pick colours and styles that match the occasion.

제안: Answer clearly and avoid vague phrasing. Give one concise contrast with specific examples (work vs errands) and use a linking word like whereas or while to show contrast. Correct word forms (clothing not clothings).

예시: Yes, I wear different styles. At work I wear smart, tailored shirts and trousers, whereas on weekends I choose casual clothes like a hoodie and jeans when running errands.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence listing a few favourite colours. Reduce repetition and give reasons for each choice using short linking phrases (because / for example). Correct word forms and capitalisation (navy blue). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer neutral and dark colours such as white, navy blue and black because white looks clean and professional while navy and black are practical. I also like occasional bright colours like yellow for a cheerful touch.

× I like to wear very comfortable clothings as well as very decent clothing.

✓ I like to wear very comfortable clothing as well as very decent clothing.

'Clothing' is an uncountable noun and should not take a plural 'clothings'. Use 'clothing' for both instances.

× So this boils down to making sure that what you're wearing is comfortable, breathable at the same time descent.

✓ So this boils down to making sure that what you're wearing is comfortable, breathable and decent at the same time.

'Descent' is a misspelling; the correct adjective is 'decent'. Also use 'and' to join adjectives 'comfortable, breathable and decent' for clarity.

× This, this the type of clothing I put on is going to be related to what occasion it is.

✓ The type of clothing I put on is related to the occasion.

Remove redundant 'this, this' and simplify structure. Use present simple 'is related' for a general statement and 'the occasion' rather than 'what occasion it is' for conciseness.

× I need to wear smart corporate clothing at the same time, breathable.

✓ I need to wear smart corporate clothing that is also breathable.

Add 'that is also' to correctly link 'breathable' as a property of 'smart corporate clothing' and improve sentence flow.

× But you cannot compare that with a range whereby I'm home during the weekend or I need to go down.

✓ But you cannot compare that with how I dress when I'm at home during the weekend or when I need to go out.

Original sentence is unclear. Replace 'a range whereby' with 'how I dress' and 'go down' (vague) with 'go out' to make meaning clear.

× Yes, I do like wearing T-shirts, but like I I've I've been saying since our earlier conversations, I like breathable clothing.

✓ Yes, I do like wearing T-shirts, but as I have been saying since our earlier conversations, I like breathable clothing.

Remove repeated filler 'I've I've I've' and use 'as I have been saying' for correct auxiliary verb structure and formality.

× So whichever to **** I'm going to put on needs to be made out of a very breathable product that is cutting and, you know, lenient.

✓ So whatever I am going to put on needs to be made from a very breathable fabric that is comfortable and lightweight.

Replace obscured word and awkward phrasing. 'Made out of' is acceptable but 'made from' and 'fabric' are more natural. 'Cutting and lenient' is incorrect; 'comfortable and lightweight' conveys intended meaning.

× Oh definitely, I take my time to put on to choose the kind of clothes I'm wearing, especially when I need to step out.

✓ Oh definitely, I take my time to choose the kind of clothes I wear, especially when I need to go out.

Remove redundant 'put on to' and use 'choose the kind of clothes I wear' and 'go out' for natural phrasing.

× Because clothing is not just about me, it's about creating an impression and at the same time feeling confident and comfortable about yourself.

✓ Because clothing is not just about me; it's about creating an impression and, at the same time, feeling confident and comfortable about yourself.

Sentence mixing perspectives: starts with 'me' then ends with 'yourself'. For consistency, keep second person ('it's about creating an impression and feeling confident and comfortable about yourself') or change both to first person. Here punctuation and commas improved; keep 'yourself' if addressing listener, but better to say 'about yourself' consistently.

× Yes I do. The type of clothing I put on varies.

✓ Yes, I do. The types of clothing I put on vary.

'Type' singular conflicts with 'varies'; if referring to multiple kinds, use plural 'types' and verb 'vary'. Alternatively keep singular: 'The type of clothing I put on varies' could be acceptable, but clearer to pluralize when multiple styles are implied.

× For instance, when I'm stepping out, going out to work, I wear smart clothings that fit perfectly into the information I'm stepping into compared to when I'm home or need to step out to get groceries down the down the road.

✓ For instance, when I go out to work, I wear smart clothing that fits the environment I am entering, compared to when I'm at home or going out to get groceries down the road.

Replace 'clothings' with uncountable 'clothing'; change 'stepping out' to 'go out' for naturalness; 'information I'm stepping into' is incorrect—use 'environment I am entering'; remove duplicate 'the' and fix word order.

× I have a specific color clothings, I have specific colour clothings that I put on for instance white, I believe white is clean and it fits perfectly into professional kind of setting.

✓ I have specific colors of clothing that I wear; for instance, I believe white is clean and it fits perfectly in a professional setting.

Use uncountable 'clothing' and plural 'colors', add prepositions 'of' and 'in', and insert punctuation for clarity.

× I like to wear yellow clothings at same time.

✓ I also like to wear yellow clothing at the same time.

Use uncountable 'clothing', add 'also' for meaning, and include 'the' in 'at the same time' for correct adverbial phrase.

× You know, I like dark clothings, dark coloured clothings, Navy blue, black and the likes so.

✓ You know, I like dark clothing and dark-colored clothes such as navy blue and black and the like.

Use singular 'clothing' or 'clothes' not 'clothings'; 'dark-coloured' should modify 'clothes'; 'and the likes' is nonstandard—use 'and the like'. Capitalization of 'Navy' not needed mid-sentence; simplify list for natural speech.