Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct article and verb usage, and add one specific detail. Avoid redundancy. Use a linking phrase if adding a reason.

예시: I prefer modern clothes because they suit my style and are comfortable. For example, I like slim-fit jeans and simple shirts since they are easy to wear and look neat.

제안: Give a direct answer first (one clause), then briefly explain with a clear reason. Reduce hesitations and repetition. Use linking words like because or so to connect reason. Correct the phrase "build confidence" and avoid filler words.

예시: I usually prefer comfortable clothes because they help me feel relaxed and confident. For instance, wearing a well-fitting sweater and trousers lets me focus on work without worrying about my outfit.

제안: Answer directly, fix grammar (e.g., "I am usually seen in T-shirts" -> "I usually wear T-shirts"), and add a specific reason or example. Avoid superlatives like "safest" without context.

예시: Yes, I love wearing T-shirts. They are my go-to for everyday life because they are comfortable and easy to wash; for example, I often wear cotton T-shirts when I run errands or meet friends.

제안: Structure the reply: give a clear conditional statement, then an example. Correct grammar ("depends on the occasion", "I spend more time choosing fashionable clothes"). Use linking words like however or but for contrast.

예시: It depends on the occasion. For special events I spend more time choosing fashionable outfits, but for everyday wear I usually pick comfortable clothes quickly.

제안: Start with a direct statement and then give a clear condition and example. Remove fillers and repetitions. Use linking words like if, otherwise, or usually to make the contrast clear.

예시: Usually I wear the same casual style on both weekdays and weekends, but if I have an event or occasion I choose a different, more formal outfit.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., "I prefer understated colours"), and explain why with a concise reason and a brief example. Replace informal phrases like "eye poking" with "too bright".

예시: I prefer understated colours because they suit my personality and feel more elegant. For example, I usually wear white, grey, or navy as they look neat and are easy to match.

× I like to wear modern clothes because I think I feel more comfortable in that clothes and nowadays people are more lean to fashion or rather than be comfortable.

✓ I like to wear modern clothes because I feel more comfortable in those clothes, and nowadays people are more inclined toward fashion rather than comfort.

Pronoun 'that clothes' is incorrect; use 'those clothes' for plural. 'I think I feel' is redundant; 'I feel' is clearer. 'Are more lean to' is unnatural; correct phrase is 'are more inclined toward'. Maintain parallel structure: 'fashion rather than comfort.'

× I prefer comfortable clothes or wear smart clothes because I think, uh, when, uh, an individual is comfortable in a particular type of clothes, I think it, uh, it can build that, uh, that someone's confident, uh, confidence and I am more comfortable because, uh, it, uh, it, it now it is.

✓ I prefer comfortable clothes to smart clothes because when a person is comfortable in a particular type of clothing, it can build their confidence.

Sentence contains repetition and disfluent fillers; remove fillers and redundant clauses. Use 'prefer A to B' rather than 'prefer A or wear B.' Use 'a person' or 'someone' not 'an individual' awkwardly. 'Type of clothes' should be 'type of clothing.' Replace 'someone's confident' with 'their confidence' for correct noun form and pronoun agreement.

× Yes, I love wearing T-shirts because in my daily routine I usually uh, be seen in T-shirts. I think T-shirts are very safest option if someone's want to be in a comfortable zone.

✓ Yes, I love wearing T-shirts because in my daily routine I am usually seen in T-shirts. I think T-shirts are the safest option if someone wants to be in a comfortable zone.

Use present simple continuous 'am usually seen' to indicate habitual appearance. 'Very safest' is incorrect; use 'the safest' (superlative takes definite article). 'Someone's want' is wrong form; use 'someone wants' (subject-verb agreement).

× It totally depends if I want to go to any function or in any daily routine. I think I spend more time finding thing more fashionable clothes rather than comfortable clothes. In my daily routine I can find any comfortable clothes and does not spend a lot of time on it.

✓ It totally depends on whether I want to go to a special event or for my daily routine. I think I spend more time finding more fashionable clothes rather than comfortable ones. In my daily routine I can find comfortable clothes and do not spend a lot of time on them.

Use 'depends on whether' for conditional dependence. 'Finding thing more fashionable clothes' is ungrammatical; change to 'finding more fashionable clothes.' Use 'ones' to replace plural noun. 'Does not spend' mismatches subject; change to 'do not spend' to agree with 'I'. Replace 'it' with 'them' referring to clothes.

× It totally depends if I have any events or any occasion. I if I have occasion I wear different style of clothes but uh. But uh, if I don't have any occasion I prefer casual clothes.

✓ It totally depends if I have any events or an occasion. If I have an occasion, I wear different styles of clothes, but if I don't have an occasion, I prefer casual clothes.

Use 'an occasion' with article. 'Different style of clothes' should be 'different styles of clothes' for plural agreement. Remove filler 'uh' and fix comma placement for clarity.

× I like very, uh, decent colour clothes because I think it I'll change my personality and I don't like vibrant colours because it is so eye poking and I don't think so it looks good on me. I generally love to wear white kind of clothes.

✓ I like very decent-colored clothes because I think they will change my appearance, and I don't like vibrant colours because they are so eye-catching and I don't think they look good on me. I generally love to wear white clothes.

'Decent colour clothes' should be 'decent-colored clothes' or 'clothes in decent colours.' 'It I'll change my personality' mixes pronouns and contractions; use 'they will change my appearance.' 'Eye poking' is incorrect; use 'eye-catching.' Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'clothes.' 'White kind of clothes' is awkward; use 'white clothes.'