Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "I prefer casual clothes") then give one or two specific reasons or an example. Reduce hesitations and repetitions. Use linking words like "because" or "however" to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer casual clothes because they are comfortable and let me move freely. However, for special occasions or vacations I choose smarter outfits to look more presentable.

제안: Give a direct answer then support with a clear reason and an example. Remove filler words and correct small errors (e.g., "smart clothes" not "smart cool"). Use a linking phrase like "but" or "on the other hand."

예시: I usually prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they don't restrict me. But for gatherings or formal occasions I wear smart clothes to make a good impression.

제안: Be precise and avoid repetition. Correct vocabulary ("loose-fitting" not "loose fizzing"). Give one brief reason and a short example. Keep answers to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I love wearing T-shirts, especially loose-fitting ones because they are comfortable and practical. For example, I often borrow my husband's oversized T-shirts when I'm relaxing at home.

제안: Organize your response: give a clear yes/no then explain briefly with one or two reasons. Remove hesitations and unclear phrases ("perplexed about what to wear"). Provide a specific example such as an interview or party.

예시: Yes, I often spend time choosing clothes, especially when I have an important event. For instance, before a job interview I usually try on several outfits to find one that looks professional.

제안: Answer directly and concisely. State the general pattern (e.g., more casual on weekdays, dress up for events) and give a brief reason. Reduce filler words and be specific about examples.

예시: Generally I wear casual clothes most weekdays, especially now during my maternity leave. However, I dress up for special occasions like festivals or doctor appointments.

제안: Clarify your meaning and avoid confusing or irrelevant details. Give a simple direct answer about favourite colours and one clear reason or exception. Remove unclear phrases (e.g., "spirituality than just frightening").

예시: I usually prefer black because it is versatile and flattering. Lately I've been trying to wear more varied colours for a brighter, more positive look, but I still wear black often.

× Well, I like to wear casual kind of clothing mostly because I do not like to be suffocated all the time.

✓ Well, I like to wear casual kinds of clothing mostly because I do not like to feel suffocated all the time.

The original sentence has awkward structure and word choice. 'Casual kind of clothing' is nonstandard; use 'casual kinds of clothing' or 'casual clothing'. 'Be suffocated' is incorrect use of verb; native speakers say 'feel suffocated'. Revise word order to improve fluency.

× So whenever possible I just like to have casual clothes.

✓ So whenever possible, I prefer to wear casual clothes.

The phrase 'like to have casual clothes' is unnatural. Use 'prefer to wear' to match the context. Also add a comma after introductory phrase 'So whenever possible' for clarity.

× Umm, otherwise, uh, if I have to go to any vacation or sorry, if I have to go to any I would say occasion, I like to wear my clothes accordingly.

✓ If I have to go on vacation or to an occasion, I like to dress accordingly.

Problems include incorrect preposition 'to go to any vacation' (should be 'go on vacation'), redundant filler words, and awkward phrasing 'any I would say occasion'. Simplify to 'go on vacation or to an occasion' and use 'dress accordingly' for natural expression.

× Well, it always depends.

✓ Well, it always depends.

No grammatical change needed; sentence is acceptable. Included to show no correction required.

× As I mentioned earlier, I mostly prefer to wear casual clothing because I don't feel restrictive in that those umm, but like, uh, smart cool clothing.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I mostly prefer to wear casual clothing because I don't feel restricted in it, but I choose smart clothes when needed.

Original mixes wrong adjective/adverb forms and pronouns: 'feel restrictive in that those' is incorrect. Use 'feel restricted in it' or 'feel restricted wearing them'. 'Smart cool clothing' is awkward; 'smart clothes' suffices. Remove fillers.

× I only choose at that time when I have to go some kind of gathering or any occasion.

✓ I only choose them when I have to go to a gathering or an occasion.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'go' and awkward word order. Replace 'at that time' with clearer 'when' and use plural 'them' referring to clothes.

× And that time I like to, umm, dress up, uh, in a, in a very attractive way.

✓ At those times I like to dress up in a very attractive way.

Use 'at those times' or 'on those occasions' for plural/general reference. Remove filler words and duplicate 'in a'. Maintain simpler, natural phrasing.

× Absolutely, I love wearing T-shirts, especially the loose fittings ones because in those like I am, I'm free to do whatever I want.

✓ Absolutely, I love wearing T-shirts, especially loose-fitting ones, because in those I am free to do whatever I want.

Use hyphenated adjective 'loose-fitting' and 'ones' without 'the' is acceptable; 'fittings' is incorrect. Remove unnecessary filler 'like' and extra commas.

× And earlier I used to wear like tight clothing which were like very much touching, touching my skin.

✓ Earlier I used to wear tight clothing which used to feel very close to my skin.

'Clothing which were' has subject-verb agreement and word choice issues; 'clothing' is a mass noun and pairs with singular verbs or use 'clothes which were'. 'Touching my skin' is repetitive; 'felt very close to my skin' is natural.

× But these days I just prefer to have a loose fizzing T-shirts.

✓ But these days I just prefer to wear loose-fitting T-shirts.

'Fizzing' is incorrect word; should be 'fitting' and 'a ... T-shirts' mixes singular article with plural noun. Use 'wear' instead of 'have' for clothing.

× Sometimes I wear my husband's.

✓ Sometimes I wear my husband's T-shirts.

Sentence ends with possessive 'husband's' without a noun; add the omitted noun 'T-shirts' for clarity.

× I'll be very honest with you.

✓ I'll be honest with you.

No grammatical error, but 'very honest' is redundant; simplified version is more natural. Included to show stylistic improvement.

× I do this a lot more times, especially when I have to go somewhere.

✓ I spend a lot of time choosing clothes, especially when I have to go somewhere.

Original 'do this a lot more times' is vague and ungrammatical. Replace with clear expression 'spend a lot of time choosing clothes' to match question.

× I always uh, I'm always per perplexed like to what we are umm, because at home I'm just waiting what I what I want.

✓ I'm often perplexed about what to wear, because at home I wait to decide what I want to wear.

Original is full of disfluencies and incorrect phrases: 'per perplexed like to what we are' is unintelligible. Use 'perplexed about what to wear' and 'wait to decide what I want to wear' for clarity.

× But if I have to go somewhere like in the occasion, any meeting or any interview.

✓ But if I have to go somewhere for an occasion, a meeting, or an interview, I spend more time choosing clothes.

Fragment: original lacks main verb. Add main clause 'I spend more time choosing clothes' and correct preposition 'for an occasion' and articles for list items.

× Uh, well, I mean, uh, for me, we can some weekdays are kind of similar these days because I'm on my maternity leave, so I'm wearing usually the casual or the comfortable clothing at home.

✓ Well, for me, some weekdays are similar these days because I'm on maternity leave, so I usually wear casual, comfortable clothing at home.

Original has pronoun 'we' incorrectly used; remove it. Use 'on maternity leave' (no 'my'), place adverb 'usually' before verb, and correct article use with adjectives 'casual, comfortable clothing'.

× But if I have to go, like let's say if there is any doctor's appointment or any umm, festival, I dress up accordingly to look good.

✓ But if I have to go to a doctor's appointment or a festival, I dress up accordingly to look good.

Add 'to' after 'go' and correct articles 'a doctor's appointment' and 'a festival'. Remove filler.

× Well, I am fond of wearing black clothing, but, uh, there are some spiritual things going on right now in my mind and I'm focusing more on, uh, spirituality than just frightening.

✓ I am fond of wearing black clothing, but right now I am focusing more on spirituality than on fashion.

'Frightening' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'fashion' or 'frivolous dressing'. Remove fillers and tighten sentence. Also prefer 'focusing more on spirituality' and include parallel preposition 'on'.

× So, uh, according to that, I need to add black clothing, but it's, it's not, uh, like I can totally replace without, uh, black clothing.

✓ So, based on that, I need to reduce wearing black clothing, but I am not going to stop wearing black completely.

Original is confusing and ungrammatical: 'add black clothing' contradictory to focus on spirituality; 'replace without black clothing' is incorrect. Clarify intended meaning: reduce wearing black but not stop entirely. Remove fillers and fix verb forms.