Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the style, avoid filler words (uh) and repetition, and give one or two specific reasons or examples (comfort, occasions). Use linking words for coherence.

예시: I prefer streetwear because it’s comfortable and stylish. For example, I often wear oversized hoodies and sneakers when I meet friends or go shopping because they let me move freely and look casual yet fashionable.

제안: Give a direct answer (prefer comfortable/casual) then support with two clear reasons. Remove hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., singular/plural). Use a linking word such as because or so.

예시: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they make me feel relaxed and confident. For instance, I choose soft fabrics and loose fits for long days out, whereas I only wear smart clothes for interviews or formal events.

제안: Answer directly (Yes) then explain briefly and give a specific example of how/when you wear T-shirts. Avoid repetition and unclear words (e.g., "Goa").

예시: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are versatile and comfortable. For example, I wear plain T-shirts for casual meet-ups and printed ones for weekends with friends, paired with jeans or shorts.

제안: Clarify your habits with a clear topic sentence: say when you do or don’t spend time choosing clothes. Use linking words (but, however) and provide a concrete example of an important event when you dress carefully. Remove filler words.

예시: I don’t usually spend much time choosing clothes for everyday outings, but I do plan my outfit carefully for important events. For example, before a job interview I pick a neat shirt and trousers and make sure everything is ironed.

제안: Give a clear contrast between weekday and weekend styles using linking words (usually, but, however). Provide a specific example for each (e.g., work/university vs weekend). Avoid unclear phrases and hesitations.

예시: Usually I wear streetwear during the week because it’s comfortable for classes and commuting. However, on weekends or for dates and interviews I choose smarter clothes like a shirt and chinos to look more presentable.

제안: State the color clearly then give two concise, specific reasons. Use linking words (because, so) and correct grammar. Provide an example of how you use black in outfits.

예시: My favorite color is black because it looks elegant and is easy to match with other items. For example, I often wear a black jacket and jeans when I want a simple, polished look that doesn’t require much effort.

× Actually sweetwear is my, uh, my favorite style.

✓ Actually, streetwear is my favorite style.

The student used 'sweetwear' which is the wrong word; 'streetwear' is the intended noun. Also redundant fillers 'uh, my' removed and article unnecessary. Use correct vocabulary and avoid hesitation words to improve clarity.

× I feel comfortable and uh, all my friends uh, wearing the same, the same style and uh, it's so, it's so nice and beautiful.

✓ I feel comfortable, and all my friends wear the same style, which is very nice and attractive.

Original sentence misused verb form 'wearing' without proper clause structure and had redundancy. Change to simple present 'wear' for habitual action and use a relative clause 'which is' to describe the style. Remove repeated fillers and duplicate words.

× In my opinion, feeling comfortable and beautiful is the most important thing in in your style.

✓ In my opinion, feeling comfortable and beautiful is the most important thing in your style.

Duplicate word 'in' removed. Sentence structure is otherwise correct; keep simple noun phrase 'the most important thing' to state opinion.

× Uh, not not being smart or anything else.

✓ It doesn't mean you have to be smart or fashionable.

Fragment lacking subject and verb; unclear meaning. Provide a complete clause clarifying contrast: use 'It doesn't mean' plus infinitive 'have to be' to make sentence grammatical and clear.

× You feel comfortable with it. It's an important things.

✓ You feel comfortable with it. It's an important thing.

Plural 'things' is incorrect here; the singular 'thing' agrees with 'It's'. Maintain consistency in singular form.

× Yes, of course, in my opinion, T-shirt is the essential thing in your in your style.

✓ Yes, of course. In my opinion, a T-shirt is an essential item in your style.

Need an article before 'T-shirt' and 'essential thing' is better expressed as 'an essential item'. Remove duplicated 'in your'. Use a period to separate clauses.

× You you can wear it in any place, any style, in any Goa with with friends you can move comfortable.

✓ You can wear it anywhere, in any style, and when you go out with friends you can move comfortably.

Remove duplicated words and wrong proper noun 'Goa' (probably intended 'go out'). Use adverb 'comfortably' to modify 'move'. Combine phrases with conjunctions for clarity.

× Sleep when or I go out with my friends, I, I wear anything.

✓ When I go out with my friends, I usually wear anything comfortable.

Original begins with 'Sleep' mistakenly and has repetition. Reorder to 'When I go out...' and add adverb 'usually' and adjective 'comfortable' to make meaning clear.

× I don't cook, uh, so much time.

✓ I don't spend so much time.

Incorrect verb 'cook' likely intended 'spend'. Use 'spend time' to express duration. Maintain present tense for habitual action.

× But when, when I have, uh, interview or did or something important, I choose carefully my, my, my dress to, to get.

✓ But when I have an interview or something important, I choose my clothes carefully.

Remove filler words and incorrect 'did'. Use article 'an' before 'interview' and place adverb 'carefully' after verb. Reorder 'my clothes' for natural English.

× Actually, U usually I wear a street wear uh, clothes and style.

✓ Actually, I usually wear streetwear clothes and styles.

Remove stray 'U' and filler. Use correct word order 'I usually wear' and 'streetwear' as single word. 'Clothes and styles' plural is acceptable for variety.

× But when I have a date or interview or something important, I I uh, I year old man study.

✓ But when I have a date, an interview, or something important, I dress more carefully.

Original contains nonsense phrase 'I year old man study' likely due to mispronunciation. Replace with clear, relevant action 'I dress more carefully' to answer the question.

× My clothes I I like black is my favorite color because it's so attractive sample and and the beautiful and comfortable when you were you don't like that many color in your dress.

✓ I like black the most; it is my favorite color because it's attractive, beautiful, and comfortable, and if you don't like many colors in your outfit, black works best.

Original sentence has repetition, wrong words 'sample', tense 'were', and awkward structure. Simplify to state preference, list adjective qualities, and explain reasoning with conditional clause 'if you don't like many colors'. Use parallel adjectives and correct verb forms.

× So I choose black as my essential color in my in my style.

✓ So I choose black as the essential color in my style.

Remove duplicated 'in my' and use definite article 'the essential color' to indicate specific choice. Keep phrase concise for clarity.