Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and structured: give a clear topic sentence, then one or two supporting reasons with specific examples. Avoid filler words and repetitions (uh, like, because I believe). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words (for example, because, so).

예시: I prefer wearing comfortable clothes, whether traditional or Western. For example, a soft cotton kurta or a loose shirt and jeans makes me feel confident because I can move freely and don’t worry about my appearance.

제안: Start with a direct answer, then give a clear example. Remove fillers and correct small grammar slips (e.g. 'can't be is smart' → 'can also be smart'). Use linking words such as 'however' or 'for example' to show contrast and illustration.

예시: I prefer comfortable clothes, but they can also look smart. For example, a solid, well-fitted shirt with trousers or smart jeans is both comfortable and appropriate for casual meetings.

제안: Clarify the meaning and avoid unclear phrases (e.g. 'anti electrical T-shirts' and 'good for learning' are confusing). Give a direct yes/no, then 1–2 clear uses or occasions for T-shirts. Remove hesitations and keep sentences short.

예시: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are very comfortable. I usually wear them at home and when I run errands, and I choose cotton T-shirts because they are breathable.

제안: Answer directly then expand with a time frame and contrast. Reduce hesitations and repetitive words. Use linking phrases like 'however' or 'for special occasions' to organize ideas.

예시: I don’t usually spend much time choosing clothes. However, for special events I plan a day ahead to pick and match an outfit, while on regular days I usually just throw on something simple.

제안: Provide a clear contrast between weekdays and weekends with specific examples. Remove fillers and repeat words. Use linking words like 'whereas' or 'on the other hand' and limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes. On weekdays I usually wear comfortable and casual clothes like jeans and a T-shirt because I’m busy, whereas on weekends I dress up more, choosing nicer shirts or a dress for social outings.

제안: Start with a clear preference then explain reasons and give specific examples. Remove hedging phrases and repetitions. Use connectors such as 'because' and 'for example' to make points coherent.

예시: I enjoy wearing many colours because each shade complements my skin differently. However, I often choose dark colours like navy or charcoal for everyday wear because they are practical and easier to keep clean.

× I do have a lot of clothes, but I like to wear something that is comfortable with a traditional or Western, uh, because I believe if it is, uh, like because I believe, uh, if I wear something comfortable, it easily makes us confident.

✓ I do have a lot of clothes, but I like to wear something that is comfortable, either traditional or Western, because I believe if I wear something comfortable, it makes me confident.

The original mixes singular and plural pronouns ('us' vs 'I') and has redundant phrases. Use a consistent first-person singular pronoun 'me'/'I' to match the speaker. Also streamline repeated clauses and choose 'either' to present two options clearly.

× Like, you know, we don't have to be conscious around like what we are wearing.

✓ Like, you know, we don't have to be conscious about what we are wearing.

The preposition 'around' is incorrect in this context; 'about' is the correct preposition for 'be conscious about'. This fixes the phrase and keeps present continuous tense 'are wearing' appropriate.

× Uh, or like I said, uh, earlier, I like to wear comfortable clothes, but it doesn't mean that comfortable clothes can't be is smart, right?

✓ As I said earlier, I like to wear comfortable clothes, but that doesn't mean comfortable clothes can't be smart, right?

The original contains an extraneous auxiliary 'is' and awkward negation 'can't be is smart'. Removing 'is' and using the contraction 'doesn't' corrects the modal/auxiliary structure and yields a natural negative modal construction.

× So like, uh, for example, if I wear a solid loose fitted shirt over the jeans or trouser, it can be, uh, comfortable as well as fun.

✓ For example, if I wear a solid, loose-fitting shirt with jeans or trousers, it can be comfortable as well as stylish.

Use plural 'trousers' to match count and 'jeans' without 'the'. 'Loose fitted' should be 'loose-fitting' (present participle adjective). 'Fun' is less appropriate for clothing; 'stylish' or 'smart' fits the context better.

× Uh, yes, of course, of course. Uh, they are very comfortable. Uh, I like to wear T-shirts like, uh, at home, uh, for anti, uh, electrical T-shirts at home, uh, like when they go out, I, they are very good for learning.

✓ Yes, of course. They are very comfortable. I like to wear T-shirts at home, and they are also good to wear when I go out.

The original has unclear fragments ('anti, electrical') and mixed subjects. Remove nonsense words, make clear subject 'they' refers to T-shirts, and use 'good to wear' for clarity. This corrects quantity/usage confusion and sentence structure.

× Uh, uh, usually I do spend a little time, not like a lot of time, uh, but before the, uh, a special event or anything, I do take some time a day before to think, uh, uh, and match what I would like to wear the next day or for the coming event.

✓ Usually I spend a little time, not a lot, but before a special event I take some time the day before to think and decide what I will wear.

Streamline verbs: remove unnecessary 'do' and use simple present for habitual action 'spend' and 'take'. Use 'the day before' and change 'would like to wear the next day' to 'will wear' to match planning for a future event.

× Uh, but on the regular days, I just like, you know, throw on whatever.

✓ On regular days, I just throw on whatever.

Remove filler words and fix verb form: 'throw on' requires subject 'I' and base verb 'throw' after 'just'. This produces a concise habitual present statement.

× Uh, definitely, I think so now that I think on the days I tend to like, you know, when something that's more comfortable and, uh, comfortable, uh, and relaxed while, uh, and like, you know, I don't dress up much on the weekdays, but while on weekend I try to dress up more and like, you know, something fancy.

✓ Definitely. On weekdays I prefer clothes that are comfortable and relaxed, and I don't dress up much, but on weekends I try to dress up more and wear something fancy.

Original has run-on, repetition and incorrect time expressions. Rearranged into clear contrast between weekdays and weekends, use plural 'weekends' and consistent present tense 'prefer' and 'try'.

× I like to wear a different type, different colour clothes since like, you know, I find every colour beautiful and every colour emphasises your skin tone, your face in different ways.

✓ I like to wear different types and colours of clothes because I find every colour beautiful and each colour emphasizes your skin tone and face in different ways.

Use 'types and colours of clothes' for correct noun grouping, and replace 'since' with 'because' for spoken reason. Use 'each' to match singular 'colour' emphasis and correct spelling 'emphasizes' (US) or 'emphasises' (UK) consistently.

× It's a better on general basis. I tend to go more on like, you know, dark colours because they are easy to wash.

✓ It's better in general. I tend to choose darker colours because they are easier to wash.

Replace 'a better on general basis' with 'better in general' for idiomatic phrasing. Use comparative 'darker colours' and adjective 'easier' to agree with plural subject 'colours'. Use 'choose' for clearer verb.