Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve fluency by removing hesitations ("umm") and making the response more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail or example. Use linking words like "however" or "for example" to connect ideas. Avoid repeating words ("jeans, T-shirt or sportswear" then "comfortable clothes").

예시: I usually wear comfortable clothes because I’m a sportsperson. For example, I mainly choose jeans, cotton T-shirts or sportswear for training and everyday activities. However, I keep some formal outfits for occasions like weddings.

제안: Focus on producing a clear, grammatical topic sentence and avoid hesitations. Make one or two supporting points with linking words ("because", "so"). Correct unclear phrases ("it can fit my daily going out") to precise reasons ("they suit my daily activities and allow freedom of movement").

예시: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they suit my daily activities and allow freedom of movement. For example, I often wear sports trousers and loose T-shirts when I go out casually.

제안: Reduce repetition ("comfortable and comfy") and avoid fillers. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences: one clear opinion + one specific supporting detail and a reason. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" appropriately.

예시: Yes, I often wear T-shirts because they are comfortable and practical. For example, on casual weekends I prefer cotton T-shirts because they keep me cool and allow easy movement.

제안: Clarify the main idea and avoid broken sentences. Use a simple structure: direct answer + brief explanation. Remove unclear or irrelevant remarks (the final sentence is confusing). Practice correct verb forms ("I don't spend", "I just choose").

예시: No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes. I usually pick something quickly from my closet, often a T-shirt, unless I need to dress for a special event.

제안: Organize the response: state difference first, then give two specific examples. Fix grammar ("I can move freely", "on weekends I wear something different for special occasions"). Keep it concise and avoid trailing off.

예시: Yes. On weekdays I usually wear sports clothes because they are comfortable and allow me to move freely. On weekends I dress differently for special occasions, such as weddings, or when I go out with friends.

제안: Provide a clear general statement and then specific examples. Remove hesitations and repetitive phrases. Use linking words ("for example", "however") and accurate vocabulary ("bright colors" instead of "more color").

예시: It depends on the occasion. For everyday wear I usually choose blue jeans and black T-shirts, but for special occasions I prefer bright colors like red dresses.

× As a sportsperson, I usually wear comfortable clothes like jeans, T-shirt or sportswear because they are practical for everyday activities.

✓ As a sportsperson, I usually wear comfortable clothes like jeans, T-shirts, or sportswear because they are practical for everyday activities.

Use plural for countable items when speaking generally (T-shirts) and include commas in a list. This fixes adjective/noun agreement and list punctuation.

× I do umm own some fancy outfits, but I only wear them for specific occasions such as weddings or formal events.

✓ I do own some fancy outfits, but I only wear them for specific occasions such as weddings or formal events.

Remove filler 'umm' from the written sentence. Pronoun usage is correct; the problem was extraneous filler words that interrupt fluency. Keep the sentence concise.

× As I mentioned before, I am a sports person, uh, so I prefer to wear more casual clothes so I can it can fit my daily uh.

✓ As I mentioned before, I am a sportsperson, so I prefer to wear casual clothes that fit my daily routine.

Replace 'sports person' with 'sportsperson' as a single word and remove filler 'uh'. Use 'casual' (not 'more casual' without comparison) and correct clause order: 'clothes that fit my daily routine.' This fixes adjective usage and sentence structure.

× Going out without a word where warning about my clothes.

✓ I can go out without worrying about my clothes.

Original lacks clear subject and verb and misuses words ('where warning'). Corrected sentence supplies subject and verb and uses the verb 'worry' in the -ing form after 'without.' This addresses sentence structure and correct verb form.

× Yes, OFT. Most of the time I'm I wear T-shirt because they are comfortable and comfy and they are practical for everyday activities.

✓ Yes, often. Most of the time I wear T-shirts because they are comfortable and practical for everyday activities.

Replace 'OFT' with 'often', remove repetition and filler ('I'm I'), pluralize 'T-shirts', and avoid redundant synonyms ('comfortable and comfy'). This fixes adverb form and redundancy.

× And for example, on casual weekends I prefer, uh, cotton T-shirts.

✓ For example, on casual weekends I prefer cotton T-shirts.

Remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary comma. Sentence is now concise and grammatically correct.

× It keeps me cool and fresh and it allows me easy movement.

✓ They keep me cool and fresh and allow me easy movement.

Subject is plural ('T-shirts'), so use plural verb 'keep' and drop second subject 'it'. Also 'allow me easy movement' is acceptable but 'allow me to move easily' is smoother. This fixes subject-verb agreement and verb usage.

× Actually, I don't spend a lot of time and umm, choosing my clothes.

✓ Actually, I don't spend a lot of time choosing my clothes.

Remove filler 'umm' and unnecessary 'and'. The verb phrase 'don't spend time choosing' is present tense habitual and correct. Eliminating extra conjunction fixes sentence flow.

× I just choosing, uh, whenever I saw my closet as umm, she used any T-shirt, T-shirt and I were a buyer.

✓ I just choose clothes quickly; whenever I open my closet I pick a T-shirt and wear it.

Original mixes tenses and subjects incorrectly. Use present simple 'choose' for habit, 'open my closet' and 'pick a T-shirt and wear it' to express the intended meaning. This fixes sentence structure and tense consistency.

× Umm, it's an Arabic clothes for women to hang out.

✓ Umm, they are Arabic-style clothes for women to wear when hanging out.

'Clothes' is plural so use 'they are'; use 'Arabic-style' as adjective and 'to wear when hanging out' for correct purpose phrase. This fixes adjective use and agreement.

× As I mentioned, in the weekdays I prefer to wear sports, sports clothes that are that's more comfortable and I can freely movement.

✓ As I mentioned, on weekdays I prefer to wear sports clothes that are more comfortable and allow me free movement.

Use 'on weekdays' not 'in the weekdays'; remove duplicated word 'sports,' use 'that are more comfortable' and 'allow me free movement' for correct adjective and verb phrases. This fixes preposition choice and adjective/adverb usage.

× But the weekends they are more that I have a special occasions, weddings, going a Hangouts with my friends or something like this I wear for a.

✓ On weekends, when I have special occasions like weddings or hangouts with friends, I wear different clothes.

Original is fragmented and jumbled. Reorder into a clear conditional/time clause and concise main clause. Use 'hangouts' lowercase and correct noun phrases. This fixes sentence structure.

× Actually, it depends, uh, on the occasion and where I'm going to or where, where I'm wearing this.

✓ Actually, it depends on the occasion and where I'm going or where I'll be wearing the clothes.

Remove filler 'uh' and use 'where I'm going' or 'where I'll be' — do not use redundant 'going to' with no object. Correct preposition and phrasing.

× For example, I more like to wear, uh, jeans, blue jeans, normal and, uh, black T-shirt.

✓ For example, I prefer to wear blue jeans and a black T-shirt.

Use 'prefer' instead of 'more like to', remove fillers, use articles for singular countable 'a black T-shirt', and avoid redundant words. This fixes adjective/adverb choice and article usage.

× But for the occasions I prefer red dresses and more color.

✓ But for special occasions I prefer red dresses and brighter colors.

Add 'special' to clarify, use plural 'colors' and 'brighter' to express preference for more vivid colors. This improves adjective choice and collocation.