Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, avoid repetition and filler words, and give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Also correct grammar (e.g., 'tidy and clean to the body' and 'whenever I waited' are unclear).

예시: I prefer wearing casual clothes most of the time because they make me feel comfortable and relaxed. However, I also choose formal clothes for work or special events because they look professional and appropriate.

제안: Give a clear preference first, then use a linking word to add an exception. Avoid unclear phrases ('allow to smarter', 'bad day'). Provide specific occasions for smart clothes and improve sentence grammar and word choice.

예시: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes for everyday wear because they help me relax. However, I wear smart clothes for special occasions, such as weddings or important meetings, because they make a better impression.

제안: Start with a clear direct answer, then give one concise reason and a specific alternative. Reduce hesitation and correct vocabulary ('addresses', 'camis').

예시: No, I don't prefer T-shirts because I find them slightly uncomfortable. At home I usually wear traditional outfits like a salwar kameez, which I find much more comfortable.

제안: Answer clearly, use linking words for reason, and give a specific example. Avoid repetition and incorrect words ('appreciatable').

예시: Yes, I spend more time choosing clothes when I'm going on vacation because I want to look elegant in photos. For example, I usually plan outfits a week before a holiday and try them on before packing.

제안: Give a direct answer about weekdays vs weekends, use linking words to explain why, and provide one specific contrast. Fix grammar and vocabulary ('looks me', 'lap', 'stylist').

예시: Yes, I wear different styles: on weekdays I dress more conservatively for work, while on weekends I choose trendy, casual outfits to feel relaxed and express my personality.

제안: Answer directly with one or two colours and give a clear reason. Avoid confusing extra people names and unclear structure. Use linking words to contrast preferences if needed.

예시: I prefer white clothes because I think they look clean and suit my personal style. I also like black for formal occasions, while brighter colours such as red or blue are good for parties.

× I like to wear casual or formal clothes because it gives me a sense of satisfaction and relaxation and uh, it's not uh, tidy and clean to the body, so I really, uh, feel uh, relaxed whenever I waited.

✓ I like to wear casual or formal clothes because they give me a sense of satisfaction and relaxation, and they are tidy and clean on my body, so I really feel relaxed whenever I wear them.

Pronoun disagreement: 'clothes' is plural, so use plural pronouns and verbs ('they give', 'wear them'). 'It's not tidy and clean to the body' is ungrammatical; revise to 'they are tidy and clean on my body'. 'Whenever I waited' uses wrong verb tense and verb choice; change to present simple 'whenever I wear them' to express habitual action.

× Well, I always love to wear comfortable and casual clothes because it gives me a sense of relaxation whenever I am at home but I allow to smarter.

✓ Well, I always love to wear comfortable and casual clothes because they give me a sense of relaxation whenever I am at home, but I also like to dress smarter sometimes.

Modal and verb choice: 'allow to smarter' is incorrect. Use 'also like to dress smarter' to express permission/preference. Also fix pronoun agreement: 'clothes' plural -> 'they give'. Add 'sometimes' to indicate occasional action.

× I love to wear smart clothes especially on occasion if it is a bad day or wedding parties.

✓ I love to wear smart clothes, especially on special occasions such as weddings or parties, or when I am having a bad day.

Preposition and noun form errors: 'on occasion' is fine but needs plural 'occasions' for general meaning; 'wedding parties' is better expressed as 'weddings or parties'. Also clarify 'if it is a bad day' to 'when I am having a bad day'.

× No, not really. I don't, uh, love wearing T-shirts, uh, because I feel a little bit uncomfortable with it, uh, but I, uh, prefer uh, wearing, uh, casual and formal addresses at home like salwar and camis, which makes me feel relaxed.

✓ No, not really. I don't love wearing T-shirts because I feel a little uncomfortable in them, but I prefer wearing casual and traditional outfits at home like salwar and camis, which make me feel relaxed.

Pronoun and noun usage: 'T-shirts' is plural so use 'them' not 'it'. 'Addresses' is incorrect; likely 'dresses' or 'outfits'—use 'outfits' or 'traditional outfits'. 'Which makes' should agree with plural antecedent 'outfits' -> 'which make'. Also simplify wording and remove filler words.

× Uh, yes, I do, especially on vacation, I like to spend more time, uh, for choosing clothes because I want to look more elegant and appreciatable, uh, so that I spend a lot of time whenever I go for shopping, uh, for occasionally.

✓ Yes, I do. Especially on vacation, I like to spend more time choosing clothes because I want to look more elegant and presentable, so I spend a lot of time shopping on those occasions.

Tense and word choice: Remove unnecessary 'for' before 'choosing'—use gerund 'choosing clothes'. 'Appreciatable' is wrong; use 'presentable' or 'attractive'. 'Whenever I go for shopping, for occasionally' is awkward; change to 'I spend a lot of time shopping on those occasions' to match present habitual action.

× Yes, I prefer wearing different styles of clothes on weddings and weekends, uh, because I think it'll uh, looks me more elegant and fashionable and it represent my personality, uh, so that I lap to wear a different stylist clothes.

✓ Yes, I prefer wearing different styles of clothes on weekends and at weddings because I think it makes me look more elegant and fashionable and it represents my personality, so I like to wear different stylish clothes.

Preposition and subject-verb agreement: Use 'on weekends and at weddings'. 'It'll looks me' is wrong—use 'it makes me look'. 'It represent' should be 'it represents'. 'I lap to wear a different stylist clothes' is incorrect; replace with 'I like to wear different stylish clothes'.

× I prefer uh, white color clothes, uh, because I think it uh, represent my personality. Although my favorite color is black and Marigold uh, but Ali always like to wear umm, red, uh, golden and uh, blue colored uh, clothes.

✓ I prefer white clothes because I think they represent my personality. Although my favorite colors are black and marigold, I also like to wear red, gold and blue colored clothes.

Adjective/pronoun agreement and articles: 'white color clothes' -> 'white clothes'. 'It represent' -> 'they represent' to agree with plural 'clothes'. 'Although... but' is redundant; use 'although' or 'but', not both. 'Ali always like' unclear—assume 'I also like' and fix subject-verb agreement to 'I also like'. Use plural 'colors' for multiple favorites. Use 'gold' rather than 'golden' for color names.