Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce repetition, organize into a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details, and correct minor word choice errors (e.g. "desk" → "dress"). Use linking words to contrast home and going out. Keep it to under five sentences.

예시: At home, I usually wear comfortable clothes such as trousers and shirts because they help me relax and move easily while doing household chores. However, if I go out or attend a wedding, I choose a more formal dress to look appropriate for the occasion.

제안: Avoid repeating the same idea and replace informal words like "LAX" with appropriate adjectives such as "relaxed" or "comfortable." Start with a clear topic sentence and use a linking word to show contrast.

예시: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes at home because they make me feel relaxed and allow me to work easily. However, when I go out or have meetings, I usually wear smart clothes to make a good impression.

제안: Be concise and avoid repeating "comfortable" excessively. Use precise vocabulary (e.g. "shalwar kameez") and organize into a clear preference statement plus supporting details about sleeve length and fabric. Limit to two–three sentences.

예시: Yes, I love wearing T-shirts with trousers because they are comfortable and practical for everyday activities. I especially prefer short-sleeve shirts made from soft fabrics, although traditional outfits like shalwar kameez are also comfortable for certain occasions.

제안: Organize the answer with a clear conditional topic sentence ("It depends") followed by specific examples and correct grammar ("it takes me time"). Remove filler words and hesitations to sound fluent.

예시: It depends. I usually spend more time choosing clothes when I go shopping or when I need an outfit for a wedding or special event because I want the dress and shoes to match and look appropriate.

× When I when I when I am at home I usually prefer to wear the comfortable clothes like trousers and shirt and I feel very comfortable and relaxed in that and I feel comfy in doing the house chores also.

✓ When I am at home, I usually prefer to wear comfortable clothes like trousers and a shirt, and I feel very comfortable and relaxed in them; I also feel comfy when doing the house chores.

Repetition 'when I when I when I' is a fluency error; 'the comfortable clothes' should be 'comfortable clothes' (article error) and 'trousers and shirt' needs an article before 'shirt' and plural agreement 'them' for clothes. 'in doing the house chores' is awkward; use 'when doing the house chores'. Use present simple 'prefer' and 'feel' which match habitual context.

× And if I have to go out or for a wedding then I will choose some particular desk to wear.

✓ If I have to go out or to a wedding, I will choose a particular dress to wear.

'for a wedding' should be 'to a wedding' (preposition fix) and 'desk' is a wrong word; correct word is 'dress' (vocabulary/adjective-noun choice). 'some particular dress' is awkward; use 'a particular dress'. Correct modal 'will' is fine for future intention.

× I prefer to wear comfortable clothes when I am at home or doing some work at home and it's it feel very LAX.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable clothes when I am at home or doing some work at home because they feel very lax.

'it's it feel' is ungrammatical repetition; remove redundancy. 'clothes' is plural so use 'they feel' (pronoun agreement). 'LAX' should be lowercase 'lax' as an adjective. Also 'because' helps link reason more naturally.

× I feel very LAX and comfortable in that while doing the work also.

✓ I feel very lax and comfortable in them while doing work.

Use 'them' to refer to 'clothes' (pronoun agreement) and avoid 'in that' which is vague. 'doing the work also' is wordy; 'while doing work' is concise.

× Yes, I love to wear T-shirts and trousers and I feel very comfortable and relaxed and very comfortable to do work as well as in them.

✓ Yes, I love to wear T-shirts and trousers; I feel very comfortable and relaxed in them and when doing work.

Redundant phrases 'very comfortable' repeated; streamline. Use 'in them' to refer to clothes and 'when doing work' for activity. Maintain present simple for habits.

× And other than the other clothes like sharwar kameez and that they're also comfortable, but I feel very comfortable in trouser shirts.

✓ Other clothes like shalwar kameez are also comfortable, but I feel most comfortable in trousers and shirts.

'And other than the other clothes' is redundant and awkward; simplify. Correct spelling 'shalwar kameez'. Use parallel nouns 'trousers and shirts' instead of 'trouser shirts' and 'most comfortable' to show preference.

× More half shirt, half sleeve shirts are more comfortable and with the soft material, I love them the most.

✓ Half-sleeve shirts are more comfortable, and I love those made of soft material the most.

'More half shirt, half sleeve shirts' is ungrammatical; correct term is 'half-sleeve shirts'. Place adjectives in proper order and use 'those made of soft material' for clarity.

× It depends, when I go for a shopping or I have to choose a dress for a wedding or a particular event then it's take time for me to choose address uh, in shoes I am that uh, it also take times.

✓ It depends. When I go shopping or have to choose a dress for a wedding or another event, it takes me time to decide; choosing shoes also takes time.

Remove filler words 'uh' and fix verb forms: 'go for a shopping' should be 'go shopping'; 'it's take time' should be 'it takes me time' (subject-verb agreement). 'choose address' is wrong word selection; change to 'decide' or 'choose a dress'. Use parallel structure for shoes.