Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence. Avoid fillers and repeat ideas once. Add a brief specific reason or example to support your preference. Use linking words for coherence.

예시: I prefer lightweight polyester clothes because they dry quickly and stay cool in the sun. For example, I often choose polyester T-shirts and breathable trousers when I go hiking or spend time outdoors because they keep me comfortable in hot weather.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence and streamline the explanation. Avoid repeating ideas; explain briefly why climate influences your choice and give one concrete example. Use a linking word to connect reason and example.

예시: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because the tropical climate in the Philippines is hot and humid. For instance, I usually wear loose cotton shirts and shorts to stay cool and productive during the day.

제안: Remove hesitation and redundancy. Give one or two specific contexts when you wear T-shirts and add a short reason. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use a linking phrase if adding detail.

예시: Yes, I love wearing T-shirts and I wear them almost every day. For example, I usually put on a T-shirt for casual outings or when I work from home because they are comfortable and easy to wash.

제안: Give a clear, structured response: state the general rule then contrast with the exception using a linking word. Provide one specific example of when you take longer to choose clothes and why.

예시: I usually spend some time choosing an outfit for special occasions, but I decide quickly for casual days. For example, I might take longer to pick clothes for a formal event because I want to match colors and look neat.

× The kind of clothes I like to wear are based on its material.

✓ The kind of clothes I like to wear is based on their material.

The noun 'clothes' is plural and requires a plural pronoun 'their' and a singular verb 'is' when referring to 'the kind' (singular). Use 'their' to agree with plural 'clothes' and 'is' to agree with 'kind'. Suggestion: say 'The kind of clothes I like to wear is based on their material.'

× Uh, I mostly prefer to wear polyester type of clothing or something that is refreshing or something that won't get heated up by the sun.

✓ I mostly prefer to wear polyester clothing or something that is cooling and won't heat up in the sun.

Use parallel and concise verb forms. 'Polyester type of clothing' is wordy; 'polyester clothing' is natural. 'Refreshing' as an adjective is acceptable but 'cooling' collocates better with clothing. Also use 'heat up in the sun' instead of 'get heated up by the sun'. Maintain present tense preference. Suggestion: 'I mostly prefer to wear polyester clothing or something that is cooling and won't heat up in the sun.'

× I prefer wearing comfortable clothes rather than smart clothes, mainly because I live in the Philippines which is a tropical country, so wearing comfortable clothes is basically wearing the smart clothing.

✓ I prefer wearing comfortable clothes rather than smart clothes, mainly because I live in the Philippines, which is a tropical country, so wearing comfortable clothes is basically wearing smart clothing.

Grammatically this sentence has awkward article use and redundancy. Remove 'the' before 'Philippines' clause and change 'the smart clothing' to 'smart clothing' (no article) for general meaning. Also maintain parallel structure. Suggestion: drop unnecessary articles and repetitive words for clarity.

× I do love wearing T-shirts and I wear T-shirts on a regular basis or or something that I would wear when I go out.

✓ I do love wearing T-shirts, and I wear them on a regular basis or when I go out.

Use pronoun 'them' to avoid repetition of 'T-shirts'. Remove duplicate 'or' and redundant phrase 'something that I would wear'. Keep simple present tense for habitual actions. Suggestion: 'I do love wearing T-shirts, and I wear them on a regular basis or when I go out.'

× I spent a good amount of time in choosing an outfit to wear when going out, but if it's for a casual day out I am pretty quick in choosing an outfit to wear.

✓ I spend a good amount of time choosing an outfit when going out, but if it's a casual day out I'm pretty quick at choosing one.

Use present tense 'spend' to match general habit. Remove unnecessary 'in' after 'time' and after 'quick'. Use 'choosing one' and contraction 'I'm' for natural speech. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and correct prepositions: 'quick at' and omit 'in'.