Clothing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid awkward phrases (e.g. “no much of lustre and shine”, “cold colours”), and limit to 2–4 concise sentences. Use linking words for clarity and give one specific example with reason.

예시: I usually wear simple, modest clothes that are not shiny. I prefer cool tones like navy or grey, although I sometimes choose warmer shades if they suit my skin. For example, yesterday I bought a pale beige shirt because it matches my skin tone and looks smart but understated.

제안: Make a clear, simple contrast and correct odd phrases and grammar. Start with a direct statement of preference, give one reason, and use a linking word to connect the reason. Avoid unclear numbers or pronouns and keep it to two sentences.

예시: I prefer comfortable clothes rather than smart outfits because comfort helps me focus and feel relaxed. For instance, on long days I choose loose cotton shirts instead of tight formal wear because they are much more practical.

제안: Correct vocabulary and grammar, be concise and specific. Begin with a clear yes/no response, then give 1–2 supporting details (materials, style) and a brief specific example. Avoid filler words and unclear terms like “AT shirts” or “Mel cotton.”

예시: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they fit me well and are comfortable. I prefer plain cotton T-shirts; for example, I bought three cotton T-shirts yesterday because they are soft and breathable for everyday wear.

제안: Provide a direct answer then describe your quick selection method clearly and logically. Replace unclear phrases (“saw them upward”, “whichever tractor”) with precise actions. Use linking words to connect steps and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I choose clothes quickly compared to other people. I usually ask the shop assistant to show me around ten items, then I feel the fabric and pick the one that looks and feels best to me.

× I like to wear the decent clothes with the no much of lustre and shine.

✓ I like to wear decent clothes with not much lustre or shine.

The phrase 'the decent clothes' and 'the no much of' are ungrammatical. Use zero article with plural countable adjective + noun: 'decent clothes'. 'Not much' correctly negates uncountable 'lustre' and 'shine'. Also use 'or' to link two nouns. Suggestion: Remove unnecessary articles and use 'not much' before uncountable nouns.

× I prefer to wear cold colours and sometimes the warmer colours that suit my skin as yesterday I bought a shirt which is a very decent colour that is skin colour.

✓ I prefer to wear cool colours and sometimes warmer colours that suit my skin. For example, yesterday I bought a shirt in a very decent, skin-tone colour.

Use 'cool' rather than 'cold' when describing colours. Omit the article before plural 'warmer colours'. The original run-on sentence needs splitting for clarity. Use 'skin-tone' or 'skin-colour' to describe a colour; 'which is a very decent colour that is skin colour' is awkward. Suggestion: Break long sentences and use hyphenated adjective 'skin-tone'.

× So instead of going for the casual or smart clothes which makes her feel uncomfortable to us, we should not go behind those.

✓ So instead of choosing casual or smart clothes that make us feel uncomfortable, we should avoid them.

Subject agreement: 'clothes' (plural) requires 'make' not 'makes'. 'Makes her feel uncomfortable to us' is incorrect pronoun/context; use 'make us feel uncomfortable'. 'Go behind those' is nonstandard; use 'avoid them'. Suggestion: Ensure verb agrees with plural subject and use correct pronouns.

× I prefer to wear comfortable clothes because I think that a comfortable 80 is more important than anything else.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable clothes because I think comfort is more important than anything else.

'a comfortable 80' is nonsensical; likely intended 'comfort'. Use the noun 'comfort' rather than an incorrect quantifier phrase. Suggestion: Use correct noun forms when expressing abstract ideas.

× So instead of going for the casual or smart clothes which makes her feel uncomfortable to us, we should not go behind those.

✓ So instead of choosing casual or smart clothes that make us feel uncomfortable, we should avoid them.

Original uses 'her' and 'to us' incorrectly; pronouns must agree with the speaker 'we/us'. Combine sentences above: use 'make us feel uncomfortable' to correctly reflect the subject and object pronouns.

× Yes I love to be AT shirts because those suit my body very well.

✓ Yes, I love to wear T-shirts because they suit my body very well.

Use verb 'wear' not 'be at'. 'AT' is incorrect; likely misrecognition of 'T' (tee). Also use 'they' for plural 'T-shirts'. Suggestion: Use correct verb and pronoun agreement.

× I like to wear the T-shirts of plain clothes and uh of cotton fabric.

✓ I like to wear plain T-shirts made of cotton.

'T-shirts of plain clothes' is incorrect collocation. Use 'plain T-shirts' and 'made of cotton' or 'cotton T-shirts'. Suggestion: Use natural noun-adjective order and 'made of' for material.

× Yesterday I bought 3 T-shirts and I love them a lot because they all were very comfortable and having a Mel cotton fabric.

✓ Yesterday I bought three T-shirts and I love them a lot because they were all very comfortable and made of melange cotton fabric.

Write numbers under ten in words in formal speech (optional). 'They all were' is awkward; use 'they were all'. 'Having a Mel cotton fabric' is incorrect structure; use 'made of melange cotton' or 'melange cotton fabric'. Suggestion: Use 'made of' to indicate material and correct word order.

× No, I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes as comparison to others.

✓ No, I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes compared to others.

Use 'compared to others' or 'in comparison with others' rather than 'as comparison to others'. Suggestion: Use standard comparative phrases.

× I only ask the shopkeeper to put the variety of clothes in front of me, about 10 to 15 pieces, without opening them.

✓ I only ask the shopkeeper to put a variety of clothes in front of me, about ten to fifteen pieces, without opening them.

Use 'a variety of clothes' (not 'the variety') and write numbers consistently. Sentence is otherwise acceptable. Suggestion: Use articles correctly before 'variety'.

× I just saw them upward.

✓ I just looked at them quickly from above.

'Saw them upward' is ungrammatical. Use 'looked at them' and specify direction or manner: 'from above' or 'quickly'. Suggestion: Use correct verbs for intentional actions: 'looked at' rather than 'saw'.

× And whichever I whichever tractor attracts me the most, I touch the fabric and choose the one.

✓ And whichever one attracts me the most, I touch the fabric and choose it.

The original contains noise words ('whichever I whichever tractor') and 'tractor' is incorrect. Use 'one' to refer to a piece of clothing and 'choose it' rather than 'choose the one'. Suggestion: Remove filler words and use clear pronouns.