Headphones— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid redundant phrases and fix prepositions (e.g., 'pay attention to my homework').

예시: Yes — I usually wear headphones. I use them when I listen to music and when I study because they block outside noise and help me concentrate on my homework.

제안: Give a clear, grammatical description of the type and a reason. Use correct tense and vocabulary (e.g., 'in-ear earphones' or 'over-ear headphones'), and provide a short reason linked with 'because' or 'so'. Keep it to one or two sentences.

예시: I use in-ear earphones most of the time because they are lightweight and easy to carry. Sometimes I use over-ear headphones at home for better sound quality.

제안: Organize the answer: start with a topic sentence saying when you use them, then add two concise reasons using linking words ('because', 'so that'). Fix grammar (e.g., 'I listen to music' and 'focus on my homework').

예시: I usually wear headphones when I'm studying or commuting. I listen to music with them because they block distracting noise, so I can focus better on my homework.

제안: Provide a clear condition and a logical reason. Use correct grammar and complete sentences. Explain briefly and use linking words ('because', 'so'). Avoid unfinished phrases.

예시: I wouldn't use headphones when I'm at home alone sometimes, because my brother makes noise and interrupts me. Also, I avoid them to give my ears a rest so they don't feel tired.

제안: Start with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons using linking words ('because', 'for example'). Use precise vocabulary ('in-ear' vs 'over-ear') and avoid hesitations like 'uh'.

예시: Not always — wearing headphones can be uncomfortable because in-ear models feel like something is blocking my ear, and over-ear ones can make my head feel heavy, making it harder to turn quickly.

× For an example, I use it when I'm listening to music or doing homework.

✓ For example, I use them when I'm listening to music or doing homework.

The phrase 'For an example' is incorrect; use 'For example'. 'Headphones' is plural and should be referred to as 'them' not 'it'. Also ensure consistency with plural subject to avoid pronoun error. Suggestion: Replace 'For an example' with 'For example' and use 'them' for 'headphones'.

× Headphones can prevent me from listening to the noise outside.

✓ Headphones can prevent me from hearing the noise outside.

The verb 'prevent' is commonly followed by a gerund meaning 'stop from doing something' and 'listening to' is odd here; 'hearing' is the correct verb to indicate perceiving noise. Use 'hearing the noise outside'. Suggestion: Use 'prevent me from hearing the noise outside'.

× It can let me pay attention into my homework and enjoy the music freely.

✓ They let me pay attention to my homework and enjoy the music freely.

Use 'pay attention to' not 'pay attention into'. Also 'it' should be 'they' for plural 'headphones'. Suggestion: 'They let me pay attention to my homework...'.

× I used the earphones at full cupboard of my ear because it has the. More.

✓ I use in-ear earphones that fit deeply into my ears because they block more noise.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and has wrong vocabulary: 'at full cupboard of my ear' is incorrect. Use 'in-ear earphones that fit deeply into my ears'. Also 'it' should be 'they' for plural. Clarify meaning 'block more noise'. Suggestion: Describe the earphone type and use plural pronoun 'they'.

× I usually use headphones where I'm doing my homework.

✓ I usually use headphones when I'm doing my homework.

Use 'when' to indicate time, not 'where'. 'Where' refers to location. Replace with 'when'. Suggestion: 'when I'm doing my homework'.

× I listening to the music by the headphones.

✓ I listen to music with headphones.

Missing auxiliary/incorrect verb form: use 'listen' (base form) with subject 'I'. Use 'with headphones' rather than 'by the headphones'. Suggestion: 'I listen to music with headphones.'

× It can prevent me from the noise and I can get focused to my homework.

✓ They can prevent me from hearing noise and help me focus on my homework.

'Prevent me from the noise' should be 'prevent me from hearing noise'. 'Get focused to my homework' is incorrect; use 'focus on my homework'. Also use 'they' for plural 'headphones'. Suggestion: 'prevent me from hearing noise' and 'focus on my homework'.

× When I'm alone at home I won't use it because my brother want to make noise and interrupt me.

✓ When I'm alone at home I won't use them because my brother wants to make noise and interrupt me.

Pronoun: 'them' for 'headphones'. Subject-verb agreement: 'brother wants' (third person singular requires -s). 'Interrupt' is fine as base form after 'and'. Suggestion: Use 'wants' and 'them'.

× So to let my ear be more relaxed I listening to the.

✓ So to let my ears relax, I don't listen to them.

Awkward phrasing and missing verb form: use 'I don't listen to them' or 'I stop using them'. 'Ear' should be plural 'ears' and 'listening to the' is incomplete. Suggestion: 'I let my ears relax by not using them.'

× It's not quite comfortable.

✓ They're not very comfortable.

Refers to 'headphones' (plural), so use 'they' and plural adjective agreement. 'Not quite comfortable' is acceptable but 'not very comfortable' is more natural. Suggestion: 'They're not very comfortable.'

× Uh, it's like something blocked in your ear and your head may feel quite heavy.

✓ Uh, it's like something blocking your ears and your head may feel quite heavy.

Use present participle 'blocking' after 'like' to describe sensation: 'like something blocking your ears'. Also match plural 'ears'. Suggestion: 'like something blocking your ears'.

× Uh, if you wear the earphones, which is covered your whole ear, you may feel it's quite hard to turn your head around.

✓ Uh, if you wear earphones that cover your whole ear, you may find it quite hard to turn your head around.

Relative clause: use 'that cover' not 'which is covered'. 'Earphones' plural so 'cover'. Use 'find it' to express experiencing difficulty. Also remove 'the' before 'earphones'. Suggestion: 'earphones that cover your whole ear' and 'you may find it quite hard...'.