Headphones— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Speak in present tense and give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details. Fix grammar (use correct verb forms and articles) and avoid redundancy. For example, say you currently use headphones, why you want new ones, and mention a specific problem.

예시: Yes, I use headphones at the moment. My old pair is broken, so I want to buy a new one because the left side stops working and the cable is frayed.

제안: Start with a direct statement about the type you currently use, then give a clear reason for wanting a different type. Use correct terms (wireless/wired) and linking words such as 'but' or 'however'. Be specific about the advantages or style reasons.

예시: I currently use wireless headphones because they are convenient for moving around. However, I’m thinking of buying wired ones because I believe wired models sometimes have better sound quality and are more fashionable right now.

제안: Begin with a concise topic sentence about when you use headphones, then give specific contexts and reasons. Avoid vague phrases and correct word choice; use linking words like 'for example' or 'because'.

예시: I usually wear headphones when I travel in my father's car. For example, I listen to music or podcasts on the long drive to my village because it helps me relax and pass the time.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two concrete reasons or examples. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'when I'm at home', 'because my family often needs me') and linking words (for example, because).

예시: I don't usually wear headphones at home because I have a large family and people often need my help or want to talk to me, so I prefer to be available.

제안: Respond directly and politely: state your opinion, then give a specific reason or example. Avoid self-deprecation and grammatical errors. Use linking words like 'but' and explain how they affect you physically or emotionally.

예시: Yes, I find headphones comfortable and I enjoy using them, but after long use my ears start to hurt, so I try to take breaks every hour to avoid discomfort.

× I used headphones but I want to buy new headphones because my old headphones is break.

✓ I used headphones, but I want to buy new headphones because my old headphones are broken.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly and has subject-verb agreement and verb form errors. 'I used headphones' implies past habit; context suggests present habit so use 'I use headphones' or keep past consistently. 'My old headphones is break' has plural subject 'headphones' requiring 'are' and needs past participle 'broken' instead of base verb 'break'. Suggestion: use 'I use headphones, but I want to buy new ones because my old headphones are broken.'

× By the way, I use headphones without wire, but I want to buy headphones with wire because it's new mode it's style.

✓ By the way, I use wireless headphones, but I want to buy wired headphones because it's a new model and it's stylish.

'Without wire' and 'with wire' are awkward; use 'wireless' and 'wired'. 'Mode' should be 'model'. Also two clauses run together; add articles and link 'it's a new model and it's stylish.' Use adjective 'stylish' instead of noun 'style.' Maintain parallel structure.

× I use headphones always when I ride in daddy's car because I go in my village and I want to listen. Choose world.

✓ I always use headphones when I ride in my dad's car because I go to my village and I want to listen to music or to the world.

Adverb placement: 'always' should come before the main verb. 'Daddy' is informal; 'dad' is better. 'Ride in daddy's car' -> 'ride in my dad's car.' 'I go in my village' -> 'I go to my village.' 'I want to listen. Choose world.' is unclear; likely 'listen to music' or 'listen to the world.' Use 'listen to' with an object.

× Only when I at home because I have big family and everyone wants of me something always.

✓ Only when I am at home, because I have a big family and everyone always wants something from me.

Missing auxiliary verb 'am' after subject 'I'. Word order and preposition usage: 'wants of me something' is incorrect; correct is 'wants something from me.' Place 'always' before the verb for natural adverb position. Add article 'a' before 'big family.'

× Yes it's so comfortable and I love using it but my ears very ill after headphones. I'm stupid.

✓ Yes, it's very comfortable and I love using them, but my ears hurt after using headphones. I'm upset about that.

Pronoun 'it' is incorrect for plural 'headphones'; use 'them.' 'My ears very ill' is ungrammatical; use 'my ears hurt' or 'my ears feel very painful.' Avoid self-deprecating 'I'm stupid' which is inappropriate; replace with 'I'm upset about that' or 'I'm concerned.' Use commas and articles as needed.