Headphones— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more concise and correct minor grammar (avoid 'some stuffs'). Start with a clear topic sentence and add one or two specific supporting details linked with a connector. Keep to under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I often use headphones because I enjoy listening to music. For example, when I'm doing household chores or traveling, listening to music helps me relax and stay focused.

제안: Good structure and clear reason. Improve by using varied vocabulary and a smoother linking phrase; correct subject-verb agreement ('they irritate me') and prefer 'earphones' or 'earbuds'.

예시: I usually use wireless headphones because they are more convenient than wired earphones. For example, wired earphones often get tangled, which irritates me.

제안: Answer is direct but slightly repetitive ('calm and relaxed'). Add a brief specific example and use a linking word to connect ideas. Keep sentences varied.

예시: I usually wear headphones when I'm doing chores or traveling alone because they help me relax. For instance, I listen to playlists while cleaning or on long bus rides.

제안: Good safety point but avoid sentence fragments and informal 'Cause'. Begin with a clear topic sentence, use a linking phrase, and correct phrasing ('traffic signals' or 'vehicle sounds').

예시: I avoid using headphones in risky situations, such as walking alone at night or crossing busy streets, because they prevent me from hearing traffic and other warnings.

제안: Answer is personal but repetitive ('because' used twice). Start with a concise topic sentence, then add one specific reason or example. Use smoother phrasing and avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, I find headphones very comfortable, especially when listening to R&B, which suits my mood and makes long listening sessions enjoyable.

× Especially when I'm doing household chores, traveling or doing some stuffs, listening to music makes me feel relaxed.

✓ Especially when I'm doing household chores, traveling, or doing some stuff, listening to music makes me feel relaxed.

'Doing some stuffs' is ungrammatical: 'stuff' is an uncountable noun and does not take plural 'stuffs'. Also parallel structure is improved by adding a comma before the final item. Use 'some stuff' or better, omit 'doing' before 'some stuff' for concision.

× I use the wireless type of headphones most of the time because it is more convenient than the wired earphones.

✓ I use the wireless type of headphones most of the time because they are more convenient than wired earphones.

The subject refers to 'headphones' (plural), so the verb and pronoun should be plural: 'they are' not 'it is'. Also 'wired earphones' does not need the definite article here. Ensure subject-pronoun agreement.

× For instance, the wired earphones often get tangled and it irritates me.

✓ For instance, wired earphones often get tangled and irritate me.

Maintain subject-verb agreement and avoid unnecessary dummy 'it' when the subject 'wired earphones' already performs the action. Use plural verb form 'irritate' to agree with plural subject 'earphones'.

× I would not use headphones when I'm in a risky situation, for example when I am walking alone at night or when I'm crossing a street. Cause when I have my earphones or headphones on I can't hear the signals of the vehicles or the people.

✓ I would not use headphones in risky situations, for example when I am walking alone at night or crossing a street, because when I have my earphones or headphones on I can't hear vehicle signals or people's warnings.

Starting the second sentence with 'Cause' is informal and fragments the sentence. Combine ideas into one sentence using 'because' for reason. Also pluralize and simplify phrases: 'risky situations' aligns with general statement; 'vehicle signals' and 'people's warnings' are clearer than 'signals of the vehicles or the people'.

× Is wearing headphones comfortable?

✓ Is wearing headphones comfortable?

This sentence is grammatical and needs no change. The preposition usage is correct. No correction required.

× Wearing headphones is absolutely comfortable for me because I love listening to music, to R&B to be specific, because it suits me.

✓ Wearing headphones is very comfortable for me because I love listening to music, specifically R&B, because it suits me.

'Absolutely comfortable' is natural but 'very comfortable' is more common collocation. Reorder 'to R&B to be specific' to 'specifically R&B' for correct adverbial placement. Also avoid repeating 'because' twice; consider combining reasons or rephrasing if needed.