Headphones— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct grammar, and use clearer vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct common errors (plural/singular, verb forms, articles) and avoid unnecessary repetition.

예시: Yes, I use headphones every day. For example, I usually wear them during my commute and when I do housework, so I can listen to music or podcasts without disturbing others.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence naming the model, then add one concise detail about why you chose it or how long you have used it. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement, pronouns) and avoid redundant brand explanation.

예시: I use Apple AirPods, specifically the second-generation model. I have had them for three years because my mother gave them to me as a gift, and they are convenient for commuting.

제안: Start with a direct statement about typical situations, then give two specific scenarios with linking words like 'also' or 'for example'. Improve grammar (prepositions, articles) and word forms.

예시: I usually wear headphones when I'm doing housework or relaxing at home alone. I also use them on public transport, such as buses or cars, to listen to music or podcasts.

제안: Answer directly and give one clear reason, then add a brief example. Correct grammar (verb forms, nouns) and use natural phrasing like 'turn them off' and 'listen attentively'.

예시: I wouldn't use headphones when someone wants to talk to me, especially about something important. In that case, I turn them off and listen attentively out of respect.

제안: Give a clear opinion, then explain with one specific reason and a possible solution. Fix grammar (gerunds, articles) and unclear phrasing (last sentence unclear). Use precise vocabulary like 'fit' and 'cause pain'.

예시: Not always. If I wear my AirPods for long periods, my ears start to hurt because they don't fit my ears well. For that reason, I try to take breaks or use over-ear headphones for long listening sessions.

× Yes I use headphone everydays and I usually use during my commute or when I finish my homework or do housework.

✓ Yes, I use headphones every day, and I usually use them during my commute or when I finish my homework or do housework.

The noun 'headphone' should be plural 'headphones' when referring to the device in general. 'Everydays' is incorrect; use the adverbial phrase 'every day'. Also 'use' requires an object pronoun 'them' when referring back to 'headphones'. Add commas for clarity.

× Also when my friends call to me outside that I will use headphones because I don't want the others license my phone.

✓ Also, when my friends call me outside, I will use headphones because I don't want others to hear my phone.

Do not use 'call to me'; use 'call me'. The clause structure 'that I will' is unnecessary; use a simple main clause. 'The others' is awkward; use 'others'. The verb 'license' is incorrect here; likely meant 'hear' or 'see'. Use 'others to hear my phone' to express privacy. Commas improve readability.

× Actually, I use Airpods. It's a product from Apple and it have different models and I use the second one because it was a gift that my mom bought me three years ago.

✓ Actually, I use AirPods. They're products from Apple and they have different models, and I use the second one because it was a gift my mom bought me three years ago.

Use the correct plural 'AirPods' and match the pronoun 'they' with plural 'products' and 'have' for subject-verb agreement. 'It's a product' suggests singular; since multiple models exist, plural fits. Also remove unnecessary 'that' after 'gift' and add commas.

× It's a product from Apple and it have different models and I use the second one because it was a gift that my mom bought me three years ago.

✓ It's a product from Apple and it has different models, and I use the second one because it was a gift my mom bought me three years ago.

If keeping 'it' singular (referring to 'AirPod model'), the verb must be 'has' not 'have' to agree with third person singular. Choose singular or plural consistently; here the correction demonstrates fixing the third person singular verb form.

× I usually use my headphones when I finish my homework or do housework, when I stay at my home alone.

✓ I usually use my headphones when I finish my homework or do housework, or when I am home alone.

Use 'at my home' is awkward; 'at home' or 'am home' is natural. Add 'or' to link the ideas and change 'stay' to 'am' for a correct state verb.

× Also when I take a bus or in a car I usually use headphones because I want to listen music at that time.

✓ Also, when I take a bus or am in a car, I usually use headphones because I want to listen to music at that time.

Use parallel structure: 'when I take a bus or am in a car'. The verb phrase 'listen music' is missing the preposition 'to' -> 'listen to music'. Commas improve clarity.

× I would not use my headphones when someone want to talk to me or discuss some important things to me.

✓ I would not use my headphones when someone wants to talk to me or discuss important things with me.

'Someone' requires third person singular verb 'wants'. Use 'discuss important things with me' rather than 'discuss ... to me'. Remove 'some' for concision.

× That I will turn off my Airpods and listen others concentrately because I think it is a manner from myself.

✓ Then I will turn off my AirPods and listen to others attentively because I think it is polite.

Use 'Then' not 'That' to sequence actions. 'Listen others' needs preposition 'to'. 'Concentrately' is awkward; use 'attentively'. 'A manner from myself' is incorrect; use 'polite' to convey proper behavior.

× No, actually when I wearing my headphone for long hours I feel my ears always getting pain because the size of my Airpods is not suitable for me.

✓ No. Actually, when I wear my headphones for long hours, my ears always hurt because the size of my AirPods is not suitable for me.

Use base form 'wear' after 'when'. 'Headphone' should be plural 'headphones'. 'I feel my ears always getting pain' is unidiomatic; say 'my ears always hurt'. Keep present simple to describe habitual experience.

× You cannot contain your own shape of your airport.

✓ You cannot change the shape of your ear with your AirPods.

The original is unclear: 'contain your own shape of your airport' is incorrect. Likely intended 'change the shape of your ear' or 'fit everyone's ear shape'. 'Airport' should be 'AirPods' and sentence rephrased to convey meaning: 'AirPods cannot conform to every person's ear shape'.