Headphones— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unclear phrases like “daily returns” and redundant repetition.

예시: Yes, I often use headphones. I usually wear them during my commute to listen to music, and I also use them for work calls because they help me hear and speak clearly.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence naming the product, then add one or two precise reasons using linking words. Correct product name and grammar for naturalness.

예시: I use Sony AirPods-style wireless earphones. They’re very comfortable and stay in my ears securely, so I don’t need to keep adjusting them.

제안: Structure the answer with a topic sentence and link two situations with linking words. Use correct grammar and provide specific examples (e.g., types of podcasts).

예시: I use headphones mainly for work calls and while travelling. For example, I wear them during conference calls to block background noise, and on trains I listen to podcasts about technology or music.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons and link them logically. Avoid long unclear clauses and correct grammar (e.g., “I prefer TV” not “watching in movies”).

예시: I usually avoid headphones when watching films or series at home because I prefer the TV’s sound. Also, I try not to use headphones all day since prolonged use can damage my hearing.

제안: Be concise and use a clear topic sentence. If you disagree, explain briefly with two specific reasons and give a final recommendation using linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing like “prolong” and “it's benefit.”

예시: Not always. Prolonged use can be uncomfortable and may harm your ears, so I recommend using headphones only when necessary, for example for important work calls to reduce background noise.

× Yes, I use headphones in my daily returns when I listen to any music or when I am on my formal calls.

✓ Yes, I use headphones in my daily routine when I listen to music or when I am on formal calls.

The word 'returns' is incorrect; 'routine' is the appropriate noun. Also 'listen to any music' is unnatural; 'listen to music' is preferred. 'My formal calls' should be 'formal calls' or 'on formal calls' without 'my'. Use of present simple and present continuous is fine for habitual actions and ongoing calls.

× With the office work I used to use headphones.

✓ When I was doing office work, I used to use headphones.

The original sentence needs clearer temporal framing. 'Used to' indicates a past habit, so 'When I was doing office work' clarifies the context. Word order and preposition 'with' was incorrect for this meaning.

× I'm using the Airports of Sony company.

✓ I use Sony AirPods.

'I'm using' suggests a temporary action; for habitual possession, 'I use' is better. The product name was incorrect and wordy: 'Sony AirPods' or 'Sony headphones' is concise. Avoid 'of Sony company' which is redundant.

× They are more comfortable because they are wireless.

✓ They are comfortable because they are wireless.

'More comfortable' implies a comparison but no comparison target is given. Use 'comfortable' to state a quality. If comparing, specify what they are compared to.

× I don't have to adjust them.

✓ I don't have to adjust them.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It correctly uses auxiliary verb 'do' for negative present simple and plural object 'them'.

× They are fit into my ears perfectly.

✓ They fit my ears perfectly.

Use 'fit' with object: 'They fit my ears' not 'fit into my ears' in this context. 'Perfectly' is correctly placed after the verb phrase.

× I use headphones when I am on a work call because they block the backgrounds noise and specially when I'm travelling I like to listen some podcast or music.

✓ I use headphones when I am on a work call because they block background noise, and especially when I'm travelling I like to listen to podcasts or music.

'Backgrounds noise' should be 'background noise' (singular uncountable). 'Specially' is incorrect; use 'especially'. 'Listen some podcast' requires 'listen to podcasts' or 'listen to a podcast'. Present continuous 'I'm travelling' is fine for current habitual action when travelling.

× At that time I used to wear headphones.

✓ At that time I would wear headphones.

'Used to' and 'would' can both indicate past habits; 'would' fits better after 'at that time'. 'Used to' is also acceptable but avoid repeating 'used to' close to previous sentence to reduce redundancy.

× When I'm watching in movies or any series, I like to watch it on the TV instead of watching it on phone because the phone has less volume.

✓ When I'm watching movies or series, I like to watch them on the TV instead of on my phone because the phone has lower volume.

Remove unnecessary 'in' after 'watching'. Use plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'movies or series'. Use 'on the TV' is acceptable though 'on TV' is more natural; 'on my phone' specifies ownership. 'Less volume' should be 'lower volume'.

× For that I have to use the headphones that I don't want because every day if I use headphones they can harm my ears.

✓ Because of that, I avoid using headphones regularly since using them every day can harm my ears.

Original sentence has unclear pronoun 'that' and awkward structure. Replace with clearer causal connector 'Because of that' and 'avoid using headphones regularly' expresses the intended meaning. 'If I use headphones' should be 'using them every day' to state habitual risk.

× No, I would suggest wearing headphones for prolong.

✓ No, I would not suggest wearing headphones for prolonged periods.

'For prolong' is incorrect; use 'for prolonged periods' or 'for a long time'. Also include 'not' after 'would' to reflect the negative suggestion. Modal 'would suggest' is acceptable for giving advice.

× It can harm the ears, so it's benefit that you can wear it when it is an emergency like for example any work call if you want to communicate with the someone with the clear voice and avoid the background.

✓ They can harm the ears, so it is better to wear them only in emergencies, for example during a work call when you need clear communication and to avoid background noise.

Use plural 'they' to refer to headphones. 'It's benefit that you can wear it' is incorrect; 'it is better to wear them only' is clearer. 'The someone' is incorrect; use 'someone' or 'a person'. 'With the clear voice' should be 'when you need clear communication'. 'Avoid the background' should be 'avoid background noise'.