Headphones— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify and correct vocabulary and grammar, keep answer concise and relevant. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific reason and an example. Use correct words (headphones, when I go somewhere, I usually turn on my music) and avoid extra unrelated phrases.

예시: Yes, I usually use headphones when I go out. I wear them mainly to listen to music or podcasts during my commute, for example on the bus or while walking to work.

제안: Use correct product names and grammar, give a clear topic sentence and one specific feature with a brief reason. Replace incorrect words (Airport → AirPods, noise cancel system → noise-cancelling feature) and complete sentences.

예시: I use Apple AirPods Pro, which have active noise-cancelling. This feature is helpful because it reduces background noise on busy streets and makes music clearer.

제안: Be direct and coherent: answer when you use them, give a reason, and use linking words. Correct vocabulary (when I go somewhere, headphones help me avoid noise, noise-cancelling mode) and avoid unclear phrases. Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

예시: I usually use headphones when I travel or walk outside because I don't want to be disturbed by street noise. Therefore, I switch on noise-cancelling mode so I can concentrate on my music or podcasts.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and a brief explanation with an example. Use correct grammar and linking words (because, for example). Focus on social safety and courtesy as reasons not to wear them while talking to others.

예시: I would not wear headphones when I'm talking with someone because it is rude and I might miss what they say. For example, I always take them off when a colleague asks me a question at work.

제안: Answer directly about comfort and give one specific condition that affects comfort. Correct grammar and use concise linking (but, however). Mention a clear example such as during exercise they fall out or feel tight.

예시: They are generally comfortable for daily use, but they can be uncomfortable during exercise. For instance, earbuds sometimes fall out or press on my ears when I run, so I prefer sport-specific models.

× Yes I usually use the head hole especially when I'm going to somewhere.

✓ Yes, I usually use headphones, especially when I'm going somewhere.

The student used 'the head hole' (incorrect noun) and 'going to somewhere' (incorrect preposition). Replace with the plural noun 'headphones' and correct verb phrase 'going somewhere'. Also add commas for clarity.

× I always on my attorney to sing music or weekend.

✓ I always use my earphones to listen to music on weekends.

The original has multiple errors: 'on my attorney' is incorrect word choice; 'to sing music' should be 'to listen to music'; 'or weekend' should be 'on weekends'. Use 'earphones' or 'headphones' and the correct verb 'listen' and preposition 'on' for days.

× I'm using Airport, it made by Apple company.

✓ I use AirPods; they are made by Apple.

The student used 'I'm using' (present continuous) where simple present is better for general facts. Also 'Airport' likely refers to 'AirPods', and 'it made by Apple company' needs passive with 'are made by Apple'.

× It is useful because I can use noise cancel system.

✓ They are useful because they have a noise-canceling system.

Refer to headphones with plural pronoun 'they'. Use 'have' for possession and the adjective form 'noise-canceling' to modify 'system'.

× It is helpful to.

✓ They are helpful, too.

Use plural 'they' for headphones and 'too' (not 'to') to mean 'also'. Include a comma for natural pause.

× Usually just have phone when I'm going to somewhere because I don't want to hear that sun one boys and I usually use a nose cancer mode.

✓ Usually I just have my phone with me when I go somewhere because I don't want to hear other people, and I usually use noise-canceling mode.

Sentence lacked subject and had wrong verb forms: 'have phone' needs 'I have my phone', 'I'm going to somewhere' should be 'I go somewhere' or 'when I go somewhere'. 'that sun one boys' is unclear; likely 'other people'. 'nose cancer' is mispronounced and should be 'noise-canceling'. Adjust word order and articles.

× It is useful to continue myself.

✓ It helps me concentrate.

'It is useful to continue myself' is ungrammatical. Use an appropriate verb phrase like 'helps me concentrate' to express continuing focus.

× I wish not use headphone when I communicate with someone because if I use it in that case it is need for someone because they are talking to me.

✓ I try not to use headphones when I communicate with someone because they need my attention when they are talking to me.

'I wish not use' is incorrect; use 'I try not to' or 'I don't'. 'headphone' should be plural 'headphones'. 'it is need for someone' is ungrammatical—use 'they need my attention'. Ensure pronouns agree and the sentence is coherent.

× Yes please but wait I'm going to drink.

✓ Yes, but wait, I'm going to get a drink.

Add commas, and use natural phrase 'get a drink' rather than 'going to drink'. 'Please' is unnecessary and odd here.

× I usually use my headphone but it is uncomfortable because when I working out I have to focus on exercise but it is come off.

✓ I usually use my headphones, but they are uncomfortable when I work out because they come off.

Use plural 'headphones' and plural pronoun 'they'. Correct verb forms: 'when I working out' -> 'when I work out'; 'it is come off' -> 'they come off'. Also use commas to separate clauses.