Headphones— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct pronouns and verb forms, avoid fillers, and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Aim for 2–4 clear sentences.

예시: Yes, I do. I usually wear headphones at the gym because listening to music helps me relax and stay motivated during workouts. However, I don't wear them often elsewhere because I feel uncomfortable using them in public.

제안: Give a clear, well-structured answer: name the product, mention a key feature and explain why it matters using linking words. Fix grammar (I can't, which version it is). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I use Apple AirPods Pro, which have active noise cancellation. I like this feature because it blocks out gym noise, so I can focus on the music and my exercises.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and then give specific conditions and reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (I wear them, in public) and avoid unclear phrases like 'a wave of'.

예시: I usually wear headphones at the gym because music helps me relax and concentrate on my workout. I rarely use them in public since I prefer to stay aware of my surroundings and hear announcements.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence stating the condition, then give specific reasons and an example. Use correct plural/singular and clearer vocabulary (aware of my surroundings, hear emergency announcements). Keep it concise.

예시: I wouldn't use headphones in public because I want to remain aware of my surroundings. For example, if someone calls me or there is an emergency, I need to be able to hear people speaking or alarms.

× 'Yes, absolutely yes. I use his phone when I at the gym center because of uh you listening to the music.'

✓ 'Yes, absolutely. I use my phone when I am at the gym because I like listening to music.'

'his' is incorrect pronoun (should be 'my'). Also 'you listening to the music' is ungrammatical; use 'I like listening to music'. Use 'am' with 'I' for progressive. Suggestion: replace incorrect pronoun with the correct possessive and keep subject consistent.'

× 'It's helped me to relax only.'

✓ 'It only helps me to relax.'

'It's helped' is present perfect which conflicts with general habitual statement; use simple present 'helps' for habitual effects. Also adverb placement: 'only' should come before the verb phrase for intended meaning. Suggestion: use simple present for habits and place adverbs close to verb.'

× 'I only wear it at gym center because I don't feel comfortable wearing.'

✓ 'I only wear them at the gym because I don't feel comfortable wearing them elsewhere.'

'it' (singular) conflicts with 'headphones' (plural); sentence is incomplete ('wearing' needs an object or continuation). Also missing article 'the'. Suggestion: use plural pronoun 'them', include 'the' before 'gym', and complete the clause.'

× 'I am currently using Apple Airport and I'm can't remember which version it is but the function that come is is a noise cancellation.'

✓ 'I am currently using Apple AirPods and I can't remember which version it is, but the feature it has is noise cancellation.'

'I'm can't' is incorrect contraction; use 'I can't'. Product name likely 'AirPods'. 'the function that come is is a noise cancellation' is ungrammatical: use 'the feature it has is noise cancellation' or 'it has noise-cancellation'. Suggestion: fix contraction, use correct product name, and restructure noun phrase.'

× 'I like this because of when I listening to the music.'

✓ 'I like them because when I listen to music.'

'when I listening' is wrong; after subject use base form with correct tense: 'I listen'. Also 'because of' should be 'because' before a clause. Suggestion: use 'listen' for simple present and use 'because' before clauses.'

× 'I usually wear it when I at the gym because of listening to the music help me relax and also concentrate on my workout.'

✓ 'I usually wear them when I am at the gym because listening to music helps me relax and helps me concentrate on my workout.'

'when I at the gym' misses auxiliary 'am'. 'wear it' should be 'wear them' for headphones. 'listening to the music help' needs subject-verb agreement: 'listening ... helps'. Suggestion: include 'am', use plural pronoun, and ensure verb agrees with singular gerund subject.'

× 'I don't really wear it often at the public because I want to a wave of.'

✓ 'I don't really wear them often in public because I want to be aware of my surroundings.'

'at the public' is incorrect preposition/article; use 'in public'. 'want to a wave of' is incorrect phrase—intended 'be aware of'. Also 'it' should be 'them'. Suggestion: use 'in public', correct pronoun number, and use 'be aware of' + noun.'

× 'I do not wear headphone when I am at public because of I want to a wave of surrounding.'

✓ 'I do not wear headphones when I am in public because I want to be aware of my surroundings.'

'wear headphone' should be plural 'headphones'. 'at public' wrong preposition; use 'in public'. 'want to a wave of surrounding' mixes words wrongly—should be 'be aware of my surroundings'. Suggestion: pluralize, fix preposition, and use correct phrase for awareness.'

× 'For example if someone call me or any emergency people yell at me that I can still hear it.'

✓ 'For example, if someone calls me or if emergency personnel yell at me, I can still hear them.'

'someone call' lacks third-person singular -s. 'any emergency people' is awkward; use 'emergency personnel' or 'people in an emergency'. Pronoun 'it' should match plural 'people' -> 'them'. Suggestion: add -s for third person, choose appropriate noun, and match pronouns in number.'