Headphones— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more grammatically correct, concise, and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Correct subject-verb agreement and prepositions (e.g., “listen to music”).

예시: Yes, I do. I usually wear headphones to listen to music or watch movies because they help me focus on the sound and block out background noise.

제안: Give a complete sentence as a topic sentence and add a specific reason using a linking word. Improve grammar (plural agreement) and clarity.

예시: I use wired, over‑ear headphones because they don’t need pairing and are very simple to use, which is helpful when my phone’s Bluetooth is unreliable.

제안: Organize into one clear topic sentence and one supporting sentence. Use correct prepositions and verb forms, and avoid repeating conjunctions. Be specific about situations.

예시: I usually wear headphones on the bus and while I’m working. For example, on the bus they block noise so I can listen to podcasts, and at work they help me concentrate on tasks.

제안: This answer is unclear and incomplete. Provide a clear topic sentence stating when you avoid headphones, then explain a specific reason with correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘group study’ or ‘face‑to‑face conversation’). Finish the sentence and avoid vague words like ‘mutual’.

예시: I wouldn’t wear headphones during group study or class because I need to hear others and participate in discussions, so headphones would prevent effective communication.

× Yes I do, I usually use headphones for listening music and watching a movie because headphones makes me focus with the sound.

✓ Yes, I do. I usually use headphones for listening to music and watching movies because headphones help me focus on the sound.

'listening' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object ('listening to music') and 'watching a movie' should be plural to match general habit context ('watching movies'). 'makes me focus with the sound' is awkward; use 'help me focus on the sound'. Also 'headphones' is plural so the verb must be 'help' not 'makes'. Add punctuation for clarity.

× Cable headphones. It helps if you don't have Bluetooth or connection and it's simple to use.

✓ I use cable headphones. They are helpful if you don't have Bluetooth or another connection, and they're simple to use.

The fragment 'Cable headphones.' lacks a subject-verb structure; expand to 'I use cable headphones.' 'It helps' incorrectly uses singular verb for plural 'headphones'; use 'they are helpful'. 'Connection' needs a modifier (another/other) for clarity. Use contractions consistently.

× I use headphones when I'm at bus and when I'm working and when I want to listening or watching movies because it helps for me to hear the sound clearly.

✓ I use headphones when I'm on the bus, when I'm working, and when I want to listen to or watch movies because they help me hear the sound clearly.

Use 'on the bus' not 'at bus'. 'want to listening' is incorrect: after 'want to' use base verb 'listen to'. 'watching movies' is fine but parallel structure requires 'listen to or watch movies'. 'helps for me to hear' is unnatural; use 'help me hear'. Also 'headphones' plural so verb 'help'.

× I'm not use headphones when I'm studying because when I'm studying I have to understand the mutual so with the headphones it makes my.

✓ I don't use headphones when I'm studying because I need to concentrate, and with headphones I can't understand well.

'I'm not use' is incorrect—use 'I don't use'. The phrase 'understand the mutual' is unclear; likely meant 'concentrate' or 'understand the material'. 'it makes my.' is incomplete; clarify effect: 'I can't understand well' or 'they distract me'. Use full sentences and correct verb forms.