Headphones— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and brief reason), avoid repetitions, correct tense and article use, and limit to about 2–3 sentences. Add a linking phrase if you give an extra reason.

예시: I don't usually use headphones now. I used them in high school, but they feel uncomfortable in summer because they get hot, so I prefer earphones or no device when it's warm.

제안: Give a clear, concise description and avoid fillers and repetitions. Use correct singular/plural and describe one or two key features (brand, colour, how they fit, price impression). Keep to 1–3 sentences and use linking words if needed.

예시: I had a black Sony pair that I received for my birthday. They seemed expensive and powerful, but they didn't fit me well, so I stopped using them.

제안: Organize answer with a clear topic sentence and a linked reason. Correct grammar (verb forms, avoid 'like what is happening') and use linking words (however, because). Be specific about situations and safety concerns.

예시: I usually wear headphones on the train when I commute to school because they help me listen to music or podcasts. However, I avoid wearing noise-cancelling headphones while walking outside because I need to hear traffic for safety.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and give 1–2 specific conditions with brief reasons. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement) and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'also' or 'because' to connect ideas.

예시: I don't wear headphones in hot weather because they become uncomfortable. I also avoid them when I'm working, since I need to concentrate and hear colleagues.

× I used to have headphones when I was in high school but headphones is very uncomfortable in the summer especially because it's easy to get hot so I so now I don't use headphones.

✓ I used to have headphones when I was in high school, but headphones are very uncomfortable in the summer, especially because they make your ears hot, so now I don't use them.

The noun 'headphones' is plural and requires plural verbs and pronouns. 'Headphones is' should be 'headphones are'. Also refer back to 'headphones' with the plural pronoun 'them' instead of repeating the noun. Use commas to separate clauses and rephrase 'it's easy to get hot' to 'they make your ears hot' for clarity.

× Umm, I used to have a black Sony headphones and I think it was very expensive 1 umm and I got for my birthday, but it was not it was not it was not fit where it didn't fit where so I just.

✓ Umm, I used to have a pair of black Sony headphones and I think they were very expensive, and I got them for my birthday, but they didn't fit me well so I stopped using them.

Use 'a pair of headphones' or simply 'headphones' with plural agreement. 'Headphones' takes plural verbs and pronouns: 'they were', 'I got them'. The phrase 'didn't fit me well' is the correct way to express improper fit. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentence endings.

× Whenever I use have headphones when I go to school on the train but I try not to wear headphones when I just walk the road because it has noise cancelling so I cannot hear where like what is happening.

✓ I usually wear headphones when I go to school on the train, but I try not to wear them when I walk on the road because they have noise-cancelling, so I can't hear what's happening around me.

Correct verb structure: 'I usually wear' is more natural than 'I use have'. 'Walk on the road' is the right prepositional phrase. 'Headphones' take plural verbs/pronouns: 'they have noise-cancelling'. Use 'can't hear what's happening around me' to clearly express inability to perceive surroundings. 'Noise-cancelling' is a compound adjective describing headphones.

× In the summer headphones is is very hot. Umm it gets hot very easily. So I don't wear headphones in the summer or when I work.

✓ In the summer, headphones are very hot; they heat up easily. So I don't wear headphones in the summer or when I work.

Again, 'headphones' is plural and requires 'are' not 'is'. Use 'they heat up easily' to explain the cause. Keep sentences complete and use commas/semicolons to improve flow.