Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: حاول أن تتكلم بثقة وبسلاسة أكثر وتقلل الترددات (مثل 'uh')، واصغُر عدد الجمل المكررة. ابدأ بجملة واضحة تُجيب مباشرة ثم أضف تفاصيل قصيرة ومحددة سبب التفضيل. استخدم ربطًا بسيطًا مثل 'because' أو 'so' لتنظيم الكلام.

예시: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and makes me feel energetic. In the past I listened to sad songs when I went through difficult times, but now I choose upbeat music to stay positive.

제안: قلل التكرار وكن أكثر دقة في التعبير عن النتائج أو التأثير. استخدم رابطَين على الأكثر لتوضيح السبب والنتيجة (مثل 'because' و 'so') وقل جملة واحدة أو اثنتين واضحة بشأن كيف يؤثر الموسيقى عليك.

예시: Yes, happy music energizes me and helps me get through the day because it improves my mood and motivation. For this reason, I plan to listen mostly to upbeat songs in the future.

제안: أجب مباشرة ثم أعطِ سبباً واحداً واضحاً وخطة مستقبلية قصيرة. تجنّب الأخطاء في تركيب الجملة بتصريف الفعل الصحيح (مثل 'I haven't taken' و 'I will take a music class'). استخدم روابط مثل 'because' أو 'so' لربط السبب والخطة.

예시: No, I haven't taken any music classes, but I plan to enroll in a music class in Malaysia because the country has a lively music scene and many people come here to learn.

제안: كن موجزًا وواضحًا: ابدأ بجملة إجابة مباشرة ثم قدّم مثالًا محددًا مع رابط سبب واحد. صحّح القواعد البسيطة مثل 'it makes me unfocused' و 'when I am driving, especially on long roads'.

예시: Sometimes I listen to music, but not when I study because it makes me unfocused. I usually play music while driving, especially on long roads, to stay alert and relaxed.

× I had a lot of, uh, situa difficult situations.

✓ I had a lot of difficult situations.

The phrase 'situa difficult situations' is redundant and includes an incorrect word 'situa'. Remove 'situa' and keep the plural noun 'situations' after the quantifier 'a lot of'. Use 'a lot of difficult situations.' Suggestions: avoid filler words and redundant words; say 'I had a lot of difficult situations.'

× So I am preparing, uh, I am adopting now to listen, uh, for, uh, to listen to the happy music and uh, I prefer to listen to, to happy music.

✓ So I am trying to get used to listening to happy music now, and I prefer to listen to happy music.

Several issues: 'preparing' and 'adopting' are incorrect in this context; the correct expression is 'get used to' or 'becoming used to' (present continuous 'I am trying to get used to listening'). Also 'listen to the happy music' needs no definite article 'the' unless referring to specific music; remove repeated words 'to'. Suggestions: use 'I am getting used to listening to happy music' or 'I am trying to get used to listening to happy music.'

× Yeah, it give me enough power to complete my day and I uh yeah.

✓ Yeah, it gives me enough energy to get through the day.

Subject 'it' requires third person singular verb form 'gives'. Also 'power to complete my day' is unnatural; use 'energy to get through the day.' Suggestions: use correct verb agreement 'it gives' and choose natural collocations like 'gives me energy' or 'helps me get through the day.'

× And it is very good to listen to the happy music because if you are sad you will be better and in the future I am uh uh, I will decided to listen just for the happy music.

✓ It is good to listen to happy music because if you are sad it can help you feel better, and in the future I have decided I will listen only to happy music.

Multiple errors: 'you will be better' is awkward; use 'help you feel better.' 'I will decided' mixes future and past; correct is 'I have decided' or 'I will decide.' 'Listen just for the happy music' should be 'listen only to happy music.' Also unnecessary 'the' before 'happy music.' Suggestions: use consistent tense and proper adverb position: 'I have decided I will listen only to happy music.'

× No, definitely I haven't uh, taking any, any class music,

✓ No, definitely I haven't taken any music classes,

After 'haven't' you need a past participle, so use 'taken' (present perfect). Also 'class music' word order is wrong; use 'music classes' and plural 'classes' with 'any.' Suggestions: use present perfect with past participle: 'I haven't taken any music classes.'

× but uh, I think I, uh, I will take uh, a class yeah, a class music here in Malaysia because Malaysia is very famous by, by the music and there are a lot of people come to Malaysia to, to learn uh, music so.

✓ But I think I will take a music class here in Malaysia because Malaysia is very famous for music and many people come to Malaysia to learn music.

Use 'music class' not 'class music.' 'Famous by' is incorrect preposition; correct is 'famous for.' 'There are a lot of people come' should be 'many people come' or 'a lot of people come.' Suggestions: correct noun order, use 'famous for' and simplify the clause: 'many people come to Malaysia to learn music.'

× Yeah, I listen sometimes just, but uh, but if I, if I am studying or doing, uh, anything is uh, it's important.

✓ Yes, I sometimes listen, but if I am studying or doing anything important,

Placement of 'sometimes' should come after subject or before verb: 'I sometimes listen.' The clause 'doing, uh, anything is uh, it's important' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'doing anything important.' Suggestions: place adverbs correctly and restructure: 'I sometimes listen, but if I am studying or doing anything important...'

× Uh, it make me unfocused. Uh, so I just, uh, I just listen to music when I driving special in the long Rd.

✓ It makes me unfocused, so I only listen to music when I am driving, especially on long roads.

Use third person singular 'makes' for 'it.' 'I driving' needs continuous form with auxiliary: 'I am driving.' 'Special' should be 'especially.' 'long Rd' should be 'long roads.' Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement 'it makes,' use correct progressive form 'when I am driving,' and use 'especially on long roads.'