Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with grammar and remove hesitation. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct small errors, and add a brief reason with a linking word. For example, avoid "it's makes" and say "it makes me feel good." Limit to 2–3 sentences and include one specific example or situation.

예시: I prefer happy music because it makes me feel energetic and uplifted. For example, I often play upbeat songs when I need a mood boost, such as during a morning run or after a long day at work.

제안: Provide a smoother, fluent response by combining ideas into one or two sentences and using a linking word to explain why. Remove filler words like "uh" and give a specific example of when music motivates you.

예시: Definitely — happy music makes me feel more excited and motivated because the fast tempo and positive lyrics lift my mood, for instance when I listen to energetic playlists before exercising.

제안: Give a concise, grammatically correct answer and add a specific detail about what you learned. Use linking words to connect purpose and result, and avoid fillers like "uh." Mentioning a time frame is fine but combine it naturally.

예시: Yes, I took vocal classes for one month to improve my singing technique, and as a result I learned breathing exercises and pitch control that helped my performances.

제안: Answer directly, combine related activities into one fluent sentence, and explain briefly why you choose music for those tasks. Avoid abrupt contrasts without clear linking words.

예시: Yes, I often listen to music when I'm cleaning or cooking because it makes chores more enjoyable and helps me keep a steady pace; however, sometimes I prefer to watch TV shows when I want to relax.

× I prefer happy music because it's makes me feel good, but sometimes I listen to sad music when I get depressed.

✓ I prefer happy music because it makes me feel good, but sometimes I listen to sad music when I get depressed.

The error is the extra auxiliary 's' after the contraction 'it's' leading to 'it's makes'. The correct subject 'it' with the third person singular verb is 'it makes'. Remove the contraction or use 'it makes'. Suggestion: say 'it makes me feel good' or 'it's good' depending on meaning.

× Yes, I have taken music classes before for one month.

✓ Yes, I took music classes for one month before.

The original uses present perfect 'have taken' with a finished time period ('for one month'), which is inappropriate in many contexts. Use simple past 'took' when specifying a finished duration. Also 'before' is better placed at end. Suggestion: Use 'I took music classes for one month' to indicate a completed period.

× In order to improve my vocals, uh, it is good experience for me.

✓ Taking those classes was a good experience for improving my vocals.

The original sentence has unclear subject and tense: 'it is good experience for me' doesn't link to the classes and mixes present tense with past activity. Recast the sentence to make the subject 'taking those classes' and use past tense 'was' if referring to past classes. Suggestion: Make the subject explicit and keep tense consistent: 'Taking those classes was a good experience for improving my vocals.'