Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons with correct verb forms and articles. Avoid repetition and keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I usually prefer both sad and happy music depending on my mood. Sad songs make me feel comforted and safe when I need to reflect, while upbeat songs energize me when I want to be motivated.

제안: Answer directly and avoid filler words like "details." Use correct verb forms and articles, and connect ideas with linking words (e.g., "and", "so", "because"). Be specific about how happy music affects you and keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, happy music often makes me feel more excited because the melody and tempo lift my mood. When I'm upset, I listen to both sad and cheerful songs because cheerful tracks help me relax and gradually become happier.

제안: Provide a clear, structured answer: state when you took classes, then give a brief specific detail about what you learned. Use correct tense and phrasing (e.g., "we were taught" not "I often got teachers by"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I took music classes in primary school but not later at secondary or high school. We were taught simple children's songs and basic singing techniques, which made music lessons enjoyable.

제안: Answer with one clear topic sentence, then give specific examples using correct vocabulary and word order. Replace vague phrases like "depends on the chance" and avoid asterisks. Use concise linking words (e.g., "for example", "while").

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while doing daily tasks because it helps regulate my mood. For example, I listen to energetic rock when I work out and ambient or lo-fi music when I study.

× It depends on my current mood because sad music make me feel comfort and safe while happy music make me feel energetic and motivated.

✓ It depends on my current mood because sad music makes me feel comforted and safe, while happy music makes me feel energetic and motivated.

Subject-verb agreement and verb form: 'sad music' and 'happy music' are singular subjects and require the third-person singular verb form 'makes' (Grammar Problem Type ID 6 and 2 overlap; follow 6 present tense issue). Use correct adjective/verb forms: 'feel comfort' is incorrect; use 'feel comforted' or 'feel comfort and safety'. Also add a comma before 'while' for clarity.

× So I probably say I would prefer both of them.

✓ So I would probably say that I prefer both of them.

Awkward word order and modal phrasing: 'I probably say I would prefer' is unidiomatic. Change to 'I would probably say that I prefer' to match present preference and improve sentence flow (Grammar Problem Type ID 26).

× Yeah, details.

✓ Yes, in detail.

Informal and unclear fragment: 'Yeah, details' is not grammatical. Use 'Yes, in detail' or 'Sure, I'll give details' to respond appropriately. This fixes sentence structure and tense/word choice (Grammar Problem Type ID 6).

× Whenever I feel upset, I usually not only search up for sad songs, but I also search up for delightful music because those song make me feel uplift so I can calm myself down and begin to feel more happy.

✓ Whenever I feel upset, I usually not only search for sad songs, but I also look for uplifting music because those songs make me feel uplifted, so I can calm myself down and begin to feel happier.

Multiple issues: 'search up for' is incorrect collocation; use 'search for' or 'look for' (Grammar Problem Type ID 8). 'Those song' should be plural 'those songs' (ID 1). 'Make me feel uplift' needs past participle/adjective 'uplifted' and 'more happy' should be comparative 'happier' (IDs 9 and 13). Also add commas for clarity.

× Yes I have, but only in primary school.

✓ Yes, I have, but only in primary school.

Punctuation and minor formatting: add a comma after 'Yes'. The verb 'have' (present perfect) is acceptable here because it indicates experience up to now (Grammar Problem Type ID 6).

× In my secondary and high school they don't actually teach music anymore, but in primary school I often got teachers by simple songs and happy songs for kids.

✓ In my secondary and high school they didn't actually teach music anymore, but in primary school I often learned songs and simple children's songs from my teachers.

Tense and pronoun/reference issues: If referring to past schooling, use past tense 'didn't' (ID 5). 'I often got teachers by simple songs' is ungrammatical—likely meant 'I often learned songs and simple children's songs from my teachers.' Fix pronoun/reference and word order (IDs 12 and 26).

× Yes I do, I often listen to music while doing my daily task because listen to music can adjust my mood.

✓ Yes, I do. I often listen to music while doing my daily tasks because listening to music can change my mood.

Gerund required after 'because': use 'listening to' not 'listen to' (Grammar Problem Type ID 8). 'Daily task' should be plural 'daily tasks' to be natural (ID 1/14). 'Adjust my mood' is acceptable but 'change my mood' is more natural.

× Depends on the chance of the song.

✓ It depends on the type of song.

Fragment and word choice: 'Depends on the chance of the song' is incomplete and unclear. Use a full sentence 'It depends on the type of song' to express the idea (Grammar Problem Type ID 26 and 11).

× For example when I workout I usually listen to ******** rock or while studying I listen to ambient queue lofi song.

✓ For example, when I work out I usually listen to heavy rock, and while studying I listen to ambient, lo-fi music.

Word choice and form errors: 'workout' as a noun vs verb — use 'work out' for the verb (ID 6). '******** rock' unclear; likely 'heavy rock' or a genre name. 'Ambient queue lofi song' is ungrammatical; use 'ambient, lo-fi music' or 'lo-fi ambient music' (IDs 13 and 26). Also add commas for clarity.