Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise: give a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitation and repetition.

예시: I don't have a strong preference between sad or happy music; I mainly focus on the genre. For example, I usually listen to rock because I like its energy and guitar sound, whether the song is happy or sad.

제안: Start with a clear direct answer, then explain with structured reasons using linking words (e.g., because, however). Reduce filler words and correct grammar for clarity.

예시: Not necessarily. I feel excited by songs with strong, fast beats rather than by whether they are happy or sad, because the rhythm and tempo determine my energy level.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence about your experience, then add specific details (when, for how long, why you stopped) using linking words. Fix tense and word choice errors.

예시: Yes, I took piano lessons at school for a few years, but I didn't enjoy them. Later, I taught myself to play the bass guitar because I preferred its sound; I also took one or two formal lessons to improve my technique.

제안: Answer directly and give specific examples of activities, using linking words to connect ideas. Avoid vague phrases and correct unclear expressions.

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while doing household chores, reading, or studying English. For instance, I play instrumental or low-vocal tracks when I concentrate on reading, and upbeat songs when I'm cleaning to keep my energy up.

× Uh, it doesn't matter to me.

✓ Uh, it doesn't matter to me.

No change needed: sentence is grammatically correct. 'It' correctly refers to the choice between sad or happy music.

× I only like the type of music, like rock music.

✓ I only like one type of music: rock.

Original uses awkward phrasing 'the type of music, like rock music'. Use 'one type of music' to show a single preference and 'rock' as the example. This clarifies meaning and fixes quantifier/article usage.

× I both listen to sad, happy music.

✓ I listen to both sad and happy music.

Word order and connector are wrong. Use 'both ... and ...' with correct order: 'listen to both sad and happy music.' This fixes sentence structure and coordination.

× No the the music make me feel excited is the music or which has strong beats and some sad music also has strong beat and and very fast.

✓ No. The music that makes me feel excited is the music with strong beats; some sad music also has strong and fast beats.

Subject-verb agreement error: use 'makes' for singular 'music'. Also 'which' was misused; use a relative clause 'that makes'. Pluralize 'beats' and 'fast' should modify 'beats'. Remove duplicated words and add punctuation to improve clarity.

× So it's not depend on the happy outside music.

✓ So it doesn't depend on whether the music is happy or not.

Incorrect verb form 'it's not depend' should be 'it doesn't depend' for present simple. 'on the happy outside music' is awkward; use 'whether the music is happy or not' to express the idea clearly.

× I learned piano when I was in school but I didn't like it.

✓ I learned piano when I was in school, but I didn't like it.

Sentence is grammatically correct. Added a comma before 'but' for clarity. Past tense 'learned' and 'didn't like' correctly match the time reference.

× Uh, I like your music, so I learned bass by myself, but I only like took one or two lessons and that's all.

✓ Uh, I like popular music, so I learned the bass by myself, but I only took one or two lessons and that's all.

'Your music' is likely unintended; use 'popular music' or appropriate noun. 'Learned bass' -> 'learned the bass' or 'learned to play the bass'. 'I only like took' is incorrect: 'liked' or 'only took' — here 'only took one or two lessons' is correct. Clarifies noun articles and verb usage.

× Yes, definitely I like to listen music when I like doing my housework and uh read the book or just or just study English and I feel pouring and then listen to music.

✓ Yes, definitely. I like to listen to music when I'm doing housework, reading a book, or studying English; it helps me concentrate and relax.

Multiple issues: 'listen music' missing preposition 'to'. Use progressive 'I'm doing' for activities happening while listening. 'Read the book' -> 'reading a book'. Remove repeated 'or just'. 'I feel pouring' is incorrect and unclear; replaced with 'it helps me concentrate and relax' to convey likely meaning. Corrected verb forms and gerunds for parallel structure.