Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence stating your general preference, then give one specific example with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and misuse of phrases (e.g., "rewind down"). Also keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I usually choose music that matches my mood. For instance, when I'm active or exercising I prefer upbeat, happy songs because they boost my energy and help me concentrate. However, when I'm tired I might choose calmer or sadder music to relax.

제안: Give a clear opinion and support it with one or two precise reasons and an example. Use linking words like "because" and "however" correctly. Avoid hesitations and repeated words, and choose appropriate vocabulary (e.g., "improve mood" instead of "make someone mental").

예시: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more energetic because the fast tempo and positive lyrics lift my spirits. However, sad songs can sometimes lower my mood, so I avoid them when I need to be productive.

제안: Answer directly and give a brief reason with a supporting detail. Correct grammar for negative statements ("No, I haven't" or "No, I didn't"). Avoid repetition and clarify phrases like "wind down" properly. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I haven't taken any music classes because I find formal lessons boring. I listen to music mainly to relax at the end of the day rather than as a hobby.

제안: State a clear answer first, then explain with a specific activity and result. Use correct grammar (e.g., "I usually listen to music while...") and avoid filler words. Use linking words like "because" to connect reason and effect.

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while studying or cleaning because energetic songs help me stay motivated and focused. For example, I play upbeat playlists when I tidy my room to keep the pace up.

× To be honest, I have not really thought about whether I prefer sad or happy music.

✓ To be honest, I have not really thought about whether I prefer sad or happy music.

No correction needed; sentence uses present perfect appropriately to describe an experience up to now. Keep as is.

× I almost choose some songs that match my mood.

✓ I usually choose songs that match my mood.

The original uses 'almost' incorrectly with 'choose'. This is a word choice/usage issue best corrected by using 'usually' to indicate frequency. 'Choose' in present simple is correct for habitual actions.

× For example, I'm always listen listen some happy music when I'm doing some activity.

✓ For example, I always listen to happy music when I'm doing activities.

The original repeats words and uses incorrect verb form 'listen' after 'I'm always'. Use simple present 'I always listen to' for habits; include preposition 'to' and plural 'activities' for general meaning.

× It always make me rewind down.

✓ It always helps me wind down.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice errors: 'make' should be 'helps' or 'makes' with singular subject; 'rewind down' is incorrect collocation. Use 'wind down' meaning relax.

× Uh, yeah. Maybe because from my perspectives, happy music may make someone mental, mental mood mood better.

✓ Uh, yeah. Maybe from my perspective, happy music can improve someone's mood.

Plural 'perspectives' should be singular 'perspective' here; 'may make someone mental' is ungrammatical and potentially incorrect wording. Use 'can improve someone's mood' to express possibility. Also remove repeated words.

× But if you listen, some sad music may may ruin your may ruin your daily daily.

✓ But if you listen, some sad music may ruin your day.

Original contains repetitions and awkward phrase 'daily daily'. Correct to 'may ruin your day' which is concise and idiomatic. 'May' expresses possibility appropriately.

× No I don't because I think it is boring for me.

✓ No, I haven't because I think it would be boring for me.

Question asked 'Have you taken any music classes?' requires present perfect 'haven't' rather than 'don't'. Also use 'would be' to express hypothetical opinion about something you haven't done.

× I listen music just for relaxing and make myself wind down.

✓ I listen to music just to relax and to help myself wind down.

Include preposition 'to' after 'listen'; use infinitive 'to relax' for purpose and parallel structure 'to help myself wind down' for clarity.

× Not for my not for my hobbies.

✓ It's not a hobby of mine.

Original repeats fragment and lacks clear structure. Rephrase to a complete sentence 'It's not a hobby of mine.' which is grammatical and natural.

× Yeah, of course I'm you.

✓ Yeah, of course I do.

'I'm you' is incorrect. The expected short answer to 'Do you listen to music while doing other things?' is 'I do.' Use 'I do' for affirmative response.

× I'm usually doing something when I'm listen music because you will make make you more have more motivated to finish the thing.

✓ I usually do something while I listen to music because it makes me more motivated to finish tasks.

Use simple present 'I usually do' and 'listen to music' with 'to'. Replace 'you will make make you more have more motivated' with 'it makes me more motivated' for correct subject reference and verb agreement. 'Finish the thing' is vague; 'finish tasks' is clearer.