Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và độ rõ ràng: sửa thì và chia động từ (ví dụ: 'it improves'), dùng đại từ đúng và loại bỏ từ thừa; tổ chức câu theo cấu trúc rõ ràng: nêu quan điểm rồi giải thích; thêm chi tiết cụ thể về loại nhạc để tăng tính thuyết phục.

예시: I prefer happy music because it improves my mood and helps me concentrate while I cook. For studying, I usually listen to instrumental remixes because they are less distracting and help me focus for longer periods.

제안: Làm rõ ý và sửa ngữ pháp: sửa lỗi chia động từ (ví dụ: 'makes'), tránh cụm từ mơ hồ ('we supported'); diễn đạt lý do rõ ràng và mạch lạc, sử dụng từ nối như 'because' hoặc 'so' để liên kết câu; tránh tiếng ừ, ờ quá nhiều.

예시: Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because its upbeat rhythm boosts my energy and confidence. For example, when I need motivation before a presentation, I play cheerful songs to feel more upbeat and focused.

제안: Sửa cấu trúc ngữ pháp và lặp từ: dùng thì hoàn thành đúng ('I haven't taken'), sửa ý không rõ ('improve shopping' có lẽ là nhầm từ) — cần nêu rõ mục đích (ví dụ: improve my singing or communication skills) và giải thích ngắn gọn vì sao.

예시: No, I haven't taken any music classes yet. In the future I would like to take singing lessons to improve my vocal technique and my confidence when performing in front of others.

제안: Làm rõ và cụ thể hóa thói quen: tránh dùng 'anything' quá chung chung; sửa thì và động từ (ví dụ: 'it makes me feel happy'); nêu ví dụ cụ thể hoạt động kết hợp với nhạc (ví dụ: studying, exercising) và dùng liên từ để kết nối câu.

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other activities, such as cooking or studying, because it makes me feel happier and more energetic. For instance, upbeat songs help me stay motivated when I exercise, while calm instrumental music helps me concentrate when I study.

× I prefer that music because it improve my emotion and help me concentrate while I'm cooking.

✓ I prefer that music because it improves my mood and helps me concentrate while I'm cooking.

The verbs 'improve' and 'help' should be in third person singular to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also 'emotion' is not natural here; 'mood' is the correct noun. Use 'improves' and 'helps' to match present simple third person singular. Suggestions: change 'improve' to 'improves', 'help' to 'helps', and 'emotion' to 'mood'.

× Uh, when I listen when I studying, I listen a remake music.

✓ When I listen while I'm studying, I listen to remakes of songs.

Use the progressive form 'I'm studying' for an action in progress and the structure 'listen to' requires the preposition 'to'. 'Remake music' is unnatural; use 'remakes of songs' or 'remixed songs'. Also remove duplicate 'when'. Suggestions: use 'while I'm studying', 'listen to', and 'remakes of songs'.

× Yes, happy music make me feel more excited because when umm we supported I often use happy music, it make his puts my confident emotion and make me feel very cheerful.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because when I'm supported I often use happy music; it boosts my confidence and makes me feel very cheerful.

Verbs referring to 'happy music' should be third person singular: 'makes'. 'Make his puts my confident emotion' is ungrammatical and unclear; replace with 'boosts my confidence'. Use 'makes me feel' for consistency. Also 'when umm we supported' is unclear; 'when I'm supported' or 'when I feel supported' fits better. Suggestions: use 'makes', 'boosts my confidence', and 'makes me feel'.

× No, I haven't take any music class.

✓ No, I haven't taken any music classes.

After 'haven't' (have not) use the past participle 'taken'. Also plural 'classes' is more natural when speaking generally about taking lessons. Suggestions: use present perfect 'haven't taken' and plural 'classes' if general.

× In the future I want to try take music class because I want to improve shopping uh communication skill and communication skill.

✓ In the future I want to try taking music classes because I want to improve my speaking and communication skills.

After 'try' use the gerund 'taking' when expressing attempting an activity. 'Music class' -> 'music classes' is more natural. 'Shopping' is likely a typo for 'speaking'. 'Communication skill' should be plural and possessive 'my communication skills'. Suggestions: use 'try taking', correct 'speaking', add 'my', and use plural 'skills'.

× Yet I often listen to music while doing anything because it made me feel happy and make me more active to do anything.

✓ I often listen to music while doing things because it makes me feel happy and makes me more active.

'Yet' is unnecessary and awkward. Use 'do things' rather than 'anything' in this context. Maintain present simple: 'it makes' and 'makes me more active'. Also remove redundant 'to do anything'. Suggestions: remove 'Yet', use 'while doing things', and make verbs present simple 'makes'.

× When I listen to music, I can concentrate on anything.

✓ When I listen to music, I can concentrate on anything.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present tense and needs no change. Keep as is.