Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific reason and an example. Avoid awkward phrasing and redundancy. Use linking words like Because and For example to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer sad music because it expresses deeper emotions. For example, my favorite singer writes songs about personal loss that feel very honest, and I find those lyrics comforting.

제안: Give a concise, grammatically correct response with one topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use correct adjective/adverb forms and natural collocations (e.g., “I feel excited” not “I'm exciting”).

예시: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more energetic. For instance, when I listen to upbeat pop songs while exercising, I feel motivated and ready to work harder.

제안: Respond directly and clearly: state whether you took classes, give specific details (when, what you learned) and use correct tense and natural phrasing. Avoid repeating words and correct comparative errors.

예시: Yes, I took music classes at primary school when I was young. We learned basic singing and how to play the recorder, but now I no longer take lessons because I’m busy with work.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence and add one specific example or reason with a linking word. Use full sentences and natural expressions (e.g., “take a bath” rather than “get a bath”).

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other activities. For example, I usually play soft jazz when I cook and upbeat playlists when I take a bath because it helps me relax or lift my mood.

× I prefer sad because there's more feelings in it that my favorite.

✓ I prefer sad music because there are more feelings in it than in my favorite.

The sentence has preposition and comparison errors. Use 'than' for comparisons, not 'that'. Also 'feelings' should use plural agreement with 'there are' (see plural issue) and 'in my favorite' needs 'in' to indicate comparison with the favorite song. Use 'sad music' to clarify the noun modified.

× My favorite singer is a sad one.

✓ My favorite singer sings sad songs.

Calling a person 'a sad one' is awkward; it's clearer to describe what they do. Using 'sings sad songs' properly links the adjective 'sad' to the noun 'songs' rather than the person. This fixes awkward adjective use.

× Yes, of course. Makes me feel I'm exciting to do something.

✓ Yes, of course. It makes me feel excited to do something.

The original sentence is missing a subject ('It') and uses 'I'm exciting' incorrectly; 'exciting' describes something that causes excitement, not the feeling. Use 'excited' (an adjective describing emotion) and include the subject 'It' to form a complete sentence.

× Makes me feel more power, more energy.

✓ It makes me feel more powerful and more energetic.

'Power' and 'energy' are nouns; to describe feelings, use adjectives 'powerful' and 'energetic'. Also add the subject 'It' for a complete clause.

× Yeah, it makes me excited.

✓ Yeah, it makes me feel excited.

While 'it makes me excited' is understandable, adding 'feel' improves clarity and matches common usage for describing emotional responses in present tense.

× Yes, when I was young in the school we used to go to go to the music classes, but now I'm bigger than go to music classes.

✓ Yes, when I was young at school we used to go to music classes, but now I'm too old to go to music classes.

Multiple errors: use 'at school' (correct preposition), remove duplicated 'go to', and correct the comparative phrase 'I'm bigger than go' which is ungrammatical. Use 'too old to' to express inability or no longer attending. 'Used to' correctly expresses a habitual past action.

× Yes, when I was young in the school we used to go to go to the music classes, but now I'm bigger than go to music classes.

✓ Yes, when I was young at school we used to go to music classes, but now I'm too old to go to music classes.

Preposition 'in the school' should be 'at school' in this context. Also 'to go to' was duplicated and removed; phrase 'too old to' replaces incorrect comparative structure.

× Yeah, actually I listen to music when I cook, when I get a bath.

✓ Yeah, actually I listen to music when I cook and when I take a bath.

Parallel structure and collocation errors: use 'take a bath' (not 'get a bath') and join the two time clauses with 'and' for better flow.