Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Use respostas mais diretas e mais naturais; evite hesitações e erros gramaticais. Comece com uma frase-tópico clara (por exemplo: “It depends on my mood.”), depois dê um exemplo específico e conecte as ideias com uma palavra de ligação (e.g., “for example”, “when”). Corrija tempos verbais e remoção de sons de hesitação («uh», «I don't know»).

예시: It depends on my mood. For example, after a breakup I prefer sad songs because their lyrics match how I feel, but otherwise I choose upbeat music to lift my spirits.

제안: Fale de forma direta e evite repetição. Use um verbo adequado para descrever sentimentos (e.g., “make me feel”, “lift my mood”). For coerência, comece com uma afirmação curta e depois explique com um motivo e um exemplo. Evite erros comparativos e duplicação de palavras.

예시: Yes, happy music usually lifts my mood and makes me feel more energetic, for example when I listen to upbeat pop songs I feel motivated to exercise or start my day.

제안: Forneça uma resposta clara sobre quando e corrija estruturas de tempo e vocabulário. Use palavras corretas (e.g., “in seventh grade”, “classical music”, “we learned”). Dê um ou dois detalhes sobre o que aprendeu para enriquecer a resposta.

예시: Yes, I took music classes in seventh grade where we learned classical music. We learned basic violin and piano techniques and practiced simple pieces as a class.

제안: Responda com uma frase-tópico clara e use conectores para explicar situações diferentes (e.g., “when… but when…”). Corrija preposições e tempos (por exemplo, “depends on the moment”, “if I have to study”). Evite hesitações e repita apenas uma ou duas frases com detalhes específicos.

예시: It depends on the situation: if I have to study or concentrate I usually don't listen to music, but in my free time I often listen to playlists to relax or enjoy myself.

× I really don't know because most of the time I prefer uh, listening to songs that have a relationship with my feeling in this day.

✓ I really don't know because most of the time I prefer listening to songs that relate to my feelings on that day.

The verb 'prefer' is typically followed directly by the gerund without an extra 'to' or filler; 'prefer listening' is correct (Grammar problem type 8). 'Have a relationship with my feeling in this day' is awkward: use 'relate to my feelings on that day'. Also use plural 'feelings' to match general emotions and 'on that day' for time reference. Suggestions: Use 'prefer + gerund' and simpler phrasing: 'prefer listening to songs that relate to my feelings on that day.'

× Like when I have a broke up, I prefer to listening sad music because it's relatable to the emotion.

✓ Like when I have a break-up, I prefer listening to sad music because it's relatable to the emotion.

'A broke up' is incorrect form; use the noun 'break-up' (singular/plural issue, type 1). Also 'prefer to listening' mixes infinitive and gerund; use 'prefer listening' (type 8). 'Sad music' order corrected. Suggestions: Use correct noun forms and the gerund after 'prefer'.

× Uh, you can say that most of the times when I said I prefer to listen happy music because I don't know, I think that my mood changed like I, I think that I more happier.

✓ You could say that most of the time I prefer to listen to happy music because, I don't know, I think my mood changes and I feel happier.

'Most of the times' should be 'most of the time' (quantifier/adverb placement). 'Prefer to listen happy music' needs 'to listen to happy music' or 'prefer listening to happy music' (verb + preposition issues). 'When I said' is wrong tense; use simple present 'I say' or omit. 'My mood changed' should be 'my mood changes' to match habitual present (present tense issue, type 6). 'I more happier' is ungrammatical: 'happier' already comparative, do not add 'more' (comparative error, type 25). Suggestions: Use consistent present tense for habits, correct collocations: 'prefer to listen to' or 'prefer listening to', and use 'happier' alone.

× Yes, when I was at 70 grade. I have music classics.

✓ Yes, when I was in 7th grade, I had music classes.

'When I was at 70 grade' is incorrect: likely meant 'in 7th grade' (past time expression) (type 5). 'I have music classics' mixes present tense and wrong noun: use past 'I had music classes' and 'classes' not 'classics'. Suggestions: Use correct grade numbering and past tense 'had music classes'.

× We learn to play violin and piano in my old school.

✓ We learned to play the violin and the piano at my old school.

Tense should be past 'learned' to match 'when I was in 7th grade' (past tense issue, type 5). Use definite articles 'the violin' and 'the piano' (article use, type 22/17). Preposition 'at my old school' is more natural than 'in'. Suggestions: Use past tense and include 'the' before instrument names and 'at' for locations.

× Depends of the moment.

✓ It depends on the moment.

The verb 'depend' is followed by 'on', not 'of' (preposition error, type 11). Also add subject 'It'. Suggestions: Use 'It depends on the moment.'

× What what are I doing now?

✓ What am I doing now?

Word order is incorrect for a question; auxiliary verb 'am' must come before the subject 'I' (sentence structure error, type 26). Also redundant 'what what'. Suggestions: Use 'What am I doing now?'.

× Like if I had to study in this moment I don't listen to music, but if in uh free time, I listen.

✓ If I have to study at the moment, I don't listen to music, but if I'm free, I do listen.

Use present simple 'have to study' or present continuous 'am studying' for current habits (present tense issue, type 6). 'In this moment' should be 'at the moment'. 'I don't listen to music' is fine but 'if in free time, I listen' is awkward: use 'if I'm free, I do listen' or 'in my free time I listen to music' (preposition and sentence structure issues, types 11 and 26). Suggestions: Use natural expressions: 'If I have to study at the moment, I don't listen to music; in my free time, I listen.'