Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct minor grammar errors; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail with a linking word. Avoid redundant phrases (e.g. “OK,” and repetition of mood).

예시: I prefer different types of music depending on my mood. For example, when I feel low I listen to sad songs because they help me process my emotions, but when I’m happy I choose lively, upbeat tracks to match my energy.

제안: Answer the question directly (yes/no) first, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Fix grammar (e.g. “those stated songs” and “a bit energetic tracks”). Keep it concise and avoid repeating previous answer verbatim.

예시: Yes. Happy music usually makes me feel more excited because the fast tempo and bright melodies lift my mood; for instance, I often play upbeat pop when I want to feel energized.

제안: Start with a direct short answer, then give two specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Replace vague phrases like “never proceed formal lesson” with clear expressions and avoid absolute negatives like “absolutely no.”

예시: No, I haven't taken any music classes. I find music theory quite difficult and practising an instrument feels stressful, so instead I prefer learning about music by listening to recordings.

제안: Answer directly and correct word choice and collocations (e.g. “while I cook” not “while I do homework such as cook”; “laying fluorine” is unclear—use correct term). Give one specific example and a linking word to explain the effect.

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while I cook or when I do small DIY jobs like tiling. Because music lifts my mood and blocks out distractions, it helps me concentrate and makes boring tasks more enjoyable.

× But when I am in overjoyed I choose a bit lively music to match my energy.

✓ But when I am overjoyed, I choose slightly livelier music to match my energy.

The phrase 'in overjoyed' is incorrect; 'overjoyed' is an adjective and should not be preceded by 'in'. Also 'a bit lively music' is awkward: use the comparative 'livelier' with 'slightly' for natural modification. Add a comma after the dependent clause. Suggestion: say 'when I am overjoyed, I choose slightly livelier music.'

× OK, I prefer different types of music depending on my mood and when I'm feeling low, I often listen to those stated songs because they help me process my emotions.

✓ OK, I prefer different types of music depending on my mood, and when I'm feeling low, I often listen to those songs because they help me process my emotions.

The original has punctuation and word choice issues. 'Those stated songs' is unnatural; 'those songs' is sufficient. Also join clauses with a comma and 'and' for clarity. Tense is present and appropriate; correct wording and punctuation improve grammar and flow.

× However, when I'm overjoyed, I play a bit energetic tracks to meet my mood.

✓ However, when I'm overjoyed, I play slightly more energetic tracks to match my mood.

Use 'more energetic' (comparative) with 'slightly' rather than 'a bit energetic tracks' which is ungrammatical. 'Match' is more idiomatic than 'meet' in this context. Keep present tense consistent.

× Absolutely no, I have not taken any music classes because I don't enjoy them.

✓ Absolutely not; I have not taken any music classes because I don't enjoy them.

Reply 'Absolutely no' is unidiomatic for answering a yes/no question. Use 'Absolutely not.' Also a semicolon or period improves sentence separation. Content and tense are fine.

× I find music theory hard and practicing an instrument feels stressful so I never proceed formal lesson but only listening to music.

✓ I find music theory hard, and practicing an instrument feels stressful, so I never attended formal lessons and only listen to music.

Multiple issues: 'proceed formal lesson' is incorrect—use 'attend formal lessons'. 'Never proceed' is wrong verb choice. Also maintain tense consistency: 'practicing... feels' (present) fits with 'I never attend' but 'never attended' is acceptable; here use present simple 'never attend' or past 'never attended'—choose present simple for habitual action: better: 'I never attend formal lessons and only listen to music.' Also change 'only listening' to 'only listen' to match sentence structure.

× I often listen to music while I do homework such as cook or even when I'm doing small DIY jobs like laying fluorine.

✓ I often listen to music while I do homework, such as cooking, or even when I'm doing small DIY jobs like laying flooring.

After 'such as' use the -ing form 'cooking' not the base verb 'cook'. 'Laying fluorine' is likely a misspelling; the correct term is 'laying flooring'. Ensure parallel structure and gerund use after 'such as.'

× It helps me concentrate and makes tedious tasks more enjoyable.

✓ It helps me concentrate and makes tedious tasks more enjoyable.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change necessary; it appropriately uses present tense and correct structure.