Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and fix verb forms (e.g., 'makes me happy').

예시: I prefer happy music because it makes me feel energetic and motivated. For example, upbeat songs with a fast tempo help me concentrate when I'm working, whereas sad music tends to make me feel low.

제안: Answer the question directly (yes/no) and then explain with specific details. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' and avoid filler words ('uh'). Correct verb agreement (e.g., 'makes').

예시: Yes, happy music does make me feel more excited because romantic and upbeat tunes lift my mood and make me smile. For instance, when I hear a cheerful chorus I feel energized and more positive.

제안: Use a clear, grammatically correct sentence. State the reason briefly with specific details and linking words (e.g., 'because' or 'so'). Avoid repeating phrases and correct tense usage ('I haven't taken any music classes').

예시: No, I haven't taken any music classes because I was very busy studying and working in a shop. As a result, I didn't have time to attend lessons, but I hope to take one in the future.

제안: Give a direct answer and add a concise, specific example. Use correct phrasing ('when I am at the gym' or 'while I work') and reduce hesitation words. Explain the purpose (e.g., motivation) with one supporting detail.

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while exercising at the gym because it motivates me and makes workouts more enjoyable. For example, I usually play fast-paced pop or electronic tracks to keep my energy up during cardio.

× I prefer happy music because it make me me happy and it make me motivated and when whenever I listen sad music I am too much sad.

✓ I prefer happy music because it makes me happy and it makes me feel motivated, and whenever I listen to sad music I feel very sad.

The verbs 'make' need third person singular -s ('makes') because the subject 'it' is singular. Remove the duplicated 'me'. Use 'makes me feel motivated' for natural phrasing. 'Whenever I listen sad music' requires the preposition 'to' after 'listen'. 'Too much sad' is ungrammatical; use 'very sad' or 'too sad'. Use commas to separate clauses for clarity.

× And I listen mostly romantic songs, uh, because it make me happy and uh, make me smile and make me happy. I feel very relaxed.

✓ I mostly listen to romantic songs because they make me happy, make me smile, and help me relax. I feel very relaxed.

Use 'listen to' (preposition error) and plural subject 'songs' requires 'they' and 'make' (third person plural) not 'it make'. Avoid repeating 'make me happy'; use varied phrasing like 'help me relax'. Also 'make me smile and make me happy' can be combined for concision.

× No, I do not have any taken musical classes because uh, in past I don't have any time to taken any classes uh, because I work in study and uh work in shop so.

✓ No, I have not taken any music classes because in the past I did not have time to take any classes, because I was studying and working in a shop.

'Have not taken' is the correct present perfect; 'do not have any taken' is incorrect. Use 'music classes' rather than 'musical classes' for naturalness. 'In past' needs 'in the past'. 'Don't have any time' should be past tense 'did not have time' to match 'in the past'. 'To taken' should be 'to take' (infinitive). 'I work in study and work in shop' is ungrammatical; use past continuous or simple past 'I was studying and working in a shop'.

× Of course, uh, when I left in a gym, uh, mostly I listen music, uh, for motivation and uh, uh, enjoying feel. Uh, yes.

✓ Of course. When I am at the gym, I usually listen to music for motivation and enjoyment.

'Left in a gym' is incorrect; use 'am at the gym' to indicate location. 'Listen music' requires the preposition 'to' ('listen to music'). 'Mostly' is better as 'usually' in this context. 'Enjoying feel' is incorrect; use the noun 'enjoyment'. Remove filler words for clarity.