Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần tự nhiên hơn, câu chủ đề rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ thể loại hay ca sĩ) và dùng liên từ để câu mượt mà. Giữ độ dài tối đa 3–4 câu, sửa ngữ pháp như 'listen to' và 'in my free time'.

예시: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood after a long day at school. For example, I often listen to upbeat pop songs by Taylor Swift or local pop bands in my free time, which helps me relax and feel more positive.

제안: Hạn chế tiếng lắp (uh, I) và lỗi ngữ pháp như 'make me' -> 'makes me', 'listen a' -> 'listen to'. Trả lời trực tiếp rồi mở rộng bằng lý do cụ thể (nhịp điệu, lời bài hát). Sử dụng từ nối như 'because' hoặc 'for example' đúng vị trí.

예시: Yes, it definitely makes me feel more excited because the fast tempo and positive lyrics energize me. For example, upbeat songs with strong rhythms make me want to sing along and feel more optimistic about my day.

제안: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và ngữ pháp đúng thì (past vs present). Tránh lặp từ, dùng cấu trúc như 'I used to' cho quá khứ và 'I'm taking' cho hiện tại. Giải thích ngắn về thời lượng hoặc kĩ năng bạn học. Sửa 'electricity' thành 'electronic music' hoặc 'electric guitar' nếu ý định là đó.

예시: Yes, I have. I used to take piano lessons with my cousin when I was a child, and now I'm learning to play the acoustic and electric guitar from my aunt. I've been taking guitar lessons for about a year to improve my strumming and fingerpicking skills.

제안: Cần sửa ngữ pháp ('while I cook', 'while bathing'?) và dùng câu ngắn, tự nhiên. Nên nêu rõ hoạt động cụ thể và lý do (tập trung, thư giãn). Tránh câu mơ hồ như 'and anything'. Bổ sung ví dụ về khi nào và loại nhạc bạn nghe.

예시: Yes, I listen to music every day while I cook or clean the house because it makes the tasks more enjoyable. For instance, I play mellow acoustic music when preparing dinner, which helps me relax and focus on making a good meal for my parents.

× I prefer happy music because when I listen happy music, I feel very happy and comfortable after a long day at school, and I often listen happy music in free time or after I study in the school.

✓ I prefer happy music because when I listen to happy music, I feel very happy and comfortable after a long day at school, and I often listen to happy music in my free time or after I study at school.

Use of prepositions: 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by the object (listen to music). Use 'in my free time' not 'in free time'. Use 'study at school' rather than 'in the school' for routine attendance. Suggestion: Always pair 'listen' with 'to' and use 'my' for familiar time expressions, and 'at school' for attending school.

× Yes, uh, it's really, really make me feel more excited.

✓ Yes, uh, it really, really makes me feel more excited.

Third person singular issue: When the subject is 'it' (third person singular), the verb must take the -s form in present simple: 'makes' not 'make'. Also remove unnecessary 'is' before the main verb. Suggestion: For subjects he/she/it use verb+s in present simple.

× Uh, for example, uh, when I listen a happy music, I feel very comfortable and I, I feel very love my life.

✓ Uh, for example, uh, when I listen to happy music, I feel very comfortable and I feel that I really love my life.

Article and preposition errors: 'listen' needs 'to' and 'music' here is uncountable so no article 'a' is used. Also 'feel very love my life' is ungrammatical; use 'feel that I really love my life' or 'really love my life'. Suggestion: Use 'listen to music' and avoid 'a' before uncountable nouns like 'music'; express emotions with 'feel that' or 'really'.

× Yes I have. When I was a child I I study in a piano class of my cousin and now I also study I I also study in a guitar and electricity of my aunt.

✓ Yes, I have. When I was a child I studied in my cousin's piano class, and now I also study guitar and electronics with my aunt.

Past tense issue: The action in childhood should use past tense 'studied' rather than 'study'. Also possessive and noun forms: use 'my cousin's piano class'. Present activities can use 'study' for ongoing actions. 'Electricity' is incorrect; use 'electronics'. Suggestion: Use past tense for completed past actions and correct noun forms and possessives.

× Yes I do and I do it every day. I often listen to music while I cooking or I batting. It made me feel more happy and I can cook a good meal for my parents and anything.

✓ Yes, I do, and I do it every day. I often listen to music while I am cooking or bathing. It makes me feel happier and I can cook a good meal for my parents and more.

Preposition and verb form issues: Use progressive 'am cooking' and 'bathing' not 'I cooking'/'I batting'. 'Batting' is wrong word; likely 'bathing'. 'It made me feel' should match habitual present 'It makes me feel'. Use comparative 'happier' not 'more happy'. 'and anything' is vague; replace with 'and more' or specify activities. Suggestion: Use continuous tense for actions happening while listening, correct vocabulary ('bathing'), and use comparatives for adjectives.