Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 答えをもっと明確に、簡潔に伝える練習をしてください。まず最初に短いトピック文で好みを述べ、その後に1〜2の具体的な理由をつなぎ言葉（because, so, therefore, for exampleなど）で示してください。また文法（時制・前置詞・代名詞）や語彙（"lyrics"や"mood"など）の使い方を正しくすることに注意してください。発話は自然な流れで、冗長な繰り返しを避け、文は最大5文に収めてください。

예시: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me feel more energetic. For example, upbeat songs with cheerful melodies make me smile and stay positive during the day. Therefore, I usually choose happy music when I want to relax or focus.

제안: 回答は冗長な言葉や繰り返しを避け、論理的に組み立ててください。まず簡潔に肯定・否定を述べ、その後に理由を一つか二つ具体的に説明します。接続詞（because, so, when）を正しく使い、語彙（"lyrics"、"melody"、"tempo"など）を適切な形で用いる練習をしてください。また文法的に主語と動詞の一致を確認してください。

예시: Yes, definitely. Happy music often makes me feel excited because the lively tempo and positive lyrics boost my energy. For instance, when I listen to upbeat pop songs, I feel more motivated to start tasks and move around.

제안: 否定の表現はシンプルで正確に。まず短く答え、その後に理由を明確に述べてください。語法に注意して過去形・現在完了形（I have never taken）や可算名詞の複数形（musical instruments）を正しく使うこと。さらに代替行動（例えば"I enjoy listening"）を付け加えると内容が豊かになります。

예시: No, I have never taken any music classes because I am not good at singing or playing musical instruments. Instead, I enjoy listening to a wide variety of music in my free time.

제안: まず簡潔に答え、その後に具体的な場面や理由をつなぎ言葉で説明してください。時制を統一し（I listen / when I study）、重複や不自然な表現（"without without"や"I can survive"）を避け、より自然な比喩（"it's like part of my daily routine"）を使うと良いです。文を3〜4文にまとめ、内容を明確にしてください。

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while doing chores like washing dishes or studying. It helps me concentrate and makes boring tasks more enjoyable. For me, music is an important part of my daily routine.

× I prefer happy music because I want when I listen to music, I always for, I always. To be happy about my feelings.

✓ I prefer happy music because when I listen to music I always want to feel happy.

The original sentence has awkward structure and extra words that disrupt meaning. Combine clauses properly: place the dependent clause 'when I listen to music' after 'because' and use 'want to feel happy' to express intention. Remove redundant fragments like 'I always for, I always.' Ensure subject-verb and infinitive usage ('want to feel') are correct.

× So I never listen for when I'm my feeling sad.

✓ So I never listen to music when I am feeling sad.

The phrase 'listen for' is incorrect; use 'listen to' with the object 'music'. The word order 'when I'm my feeling sad' is ungrammatical; use 'when I am feeling sad' or 'when I'm sad'. Fix pronoun contraction and word order.

× Because the I always choose relics that lyrics makes me happy or not.

✓ Because I always choose songs with lyrics that make me happy or not.

'Relics' is incorrect word choice; 'songs' fits context. 'Lyrics' is plural and should be treated with plural verb 'make' rather than 'makes'. Use 'that make me happy' or 'whose lyrics make me happy'. Also remove the extra 'the'.

× So the lyrics make me happy.

✓ So the lyrics make me happy.

This sentence is grammatically correct as written and needs no change. It properly uses plural subject 'lyrics' with plural verb 'make'.

× My feeling really excited.

✓ My feelings are really excited, or I feel really excited.

This sentence lacks a proper verb. Use 'My feelings are really excited' (linking verb 'are') or better 'I feel really excited' to express the emotional state. 'Feeling' should be plural or replaced by 'I feel'.

× No, I never take any music classes because I'm not good at singing and I'm not good at playing music instruments, so I just always listen to music and that's all.

✓ No, I have never taken any music classes because I'm not good at singing and I'm not good at playing musical instruments, so I just always listen to music and that's all.

Use present perfect 'have never taken' for life experience up to now. 'Music instruments' is incorrect collocation; use 'musical instruments'. Word order 'just always' is awkward—prefer 'I just listen to music' or 'I always just listen to music.' The rest is fine.

× Yes, like washing dishes. I always listen to music and when I was studying I listen to music.

✓ Yes, like when washing dishes. I always listen to music and when I study I listen to music.

Maintain consistent present tense: 'when I was studying' mixes past with present general habit. Use 'when I study' and 'listen' to express habitual action. Also add 'when' before 'washing dishes' for clarity.

× So without without listening music, I can survive.

✓ So without listening to music, I could not survive., or So without music I couldn't survive.

'Without without' duplicates a word; remove repetition. Use 'listening to music' with preposition 'to'. The intended meaning likely negative ability, so use 'I could not survive' or 'I can't survive' to express inability.

× So for me it's really important things to listen to music.

✓ So for me it's really important to listen to music., or Listening to music is really important to me.

Word order and noun phrase are incorrect: 'important things to listen to music' is ungrammatical. Use the structure 'it's important to do something' or nominalized 'Listening to music is important to me'.

× It's like a one, it's like a part of my body.

✓ It's like a part of my body.

The fragment 'a one' is unnecessary and ungrammatical. Keep the metaphor concise: 'It's like a part of my body.' This uses correct article and noun phrase.